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Scootaloo is about to have a wild and fun day with her friends and family.
Just a cute short story I wrote.
Ponies belong to hasbro.
The absolutely amazing artwork done by The Great and Powerfull Alasou! http://alasou.deviantart.com/
If you are reading this Alasou, then I am a big fan of your art. 
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Nice one! And one of the few fics where Scootaloo has parents.
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Thank you and thank you for the favorite!
What part did you like best?
7699240 The entire story, my friend!
Keep up the good work.
My specializations in fics are parent-realationships my little dashie style but different, set i games I play
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I will! Thank you!
7699264 You're welcome! Feel free to comment on my fics, don't be shy if you're interested. (Ratings aren't so well but I don't care)
Hope you aren't wondering too much (Sorry coudn't resist making that joke when I saw your username)
Ehh, bad grammar, loads of typos, iffy characterisation, no content of note whatsoever. Usually I'd just downvote and move along, but it has a happy Scootaloo which is my greatest weakness.
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Eh, no thanks. I'm not a big fan of gore fics.
Heh! Nice joke.
7699285 Thanks anyway
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it's nice, there typos that could be caught with a bit of checking. overall an enjoyable story
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Thank you!
If you don't mind me asking, but could you give me an example of a typo in the story?
Also, what part did you like best?
Not a very healthy breakfast.
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"Yeah but It's been a long four hours." responded Scootaloo.
the it should be lower.
cake and vanilla frosting They all had a good laugh about it.
there should be a period
little stuff that could be caught.
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That's ok, I welcome all criticism and opinion.
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Not healthy but very very tasty.
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Ah. Thanks for bringing this to my attention I'll look around and see If I can find some more typos to fix.
+ Happy non woobie Scoots
It's always nice to see non orphaned non miserable Scoots
- Typos, too many saidisms and no plot.
The first two are pretty easy to fix a good editor can help refine your style.
The no plot thing is a bigger problem. Good stories are not just a sequence of events. They are a connected sequence of events that flow based on believable character reactions. They also have tension and conflict. This is just one good thing happening after another for no reason, then it ends.
I'd try again with a more coherent narrative.
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I was actually going for a "Random Events Plot" type of plot. http://tvtropes.org/pmwiki/pmwiki.php/Main/RandomEventsPlot
I was thinking it would make the funny bits more funny.
As for the happy scoots, I think we can all like a happy Scoot.
Thank you for the review and the criticism.
It's not that i like child pain..... but this seems fake like your waiting for the reader to be luled into a sense of ease before dropping the it was all a dream plot bomb, and the actually story begins.
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Nope, just a really cute silly story.
Thanks for reading! Do you have any other thoughts or comments on this fic?
7723296 i might do a Dapper review on this just because id be fun to animate my thoughts on this story
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Well, if you do that be sure to send me a link to it!
May I ask, did you enjoy the story?
7723339 its what id like to call speed fluff cute, quick, But no substance. it was enjoyable
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Thank you!
Glad to hear you enjoyed it.
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Thank you for reviewing my story!
I will watch it as soon as possible.
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Really?
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Im super glad i had alot of fun making it.