While most humans are brought to Equestria through near-death, death, or shenanigans, some are brought with a purpose. Meet Zack, he’s young, capable, more or less polite, and our victim. Princess Luna requires a moment’s peace, free from her sister’s pranks. One night, Luna comes up with the perfect plan: playing matchmaker. With her sister plotting, Celestia peacefully slumbers with dreams of mischief ripe in her head. If only she knew just what her little sister was capable of…
This story is rated L (Luna) for infrequent strong language and shipping.
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Chapters (6)
wow, this sounds interesting. cant wait to check it out soon
I'll keep an eye on this and see where it goes.
Ordinarily, I would toss this to the read later pile, as it interests me, but it is late. However, your choice in sadlestia as a cover art has compelled me to read it now so she will stop being sad.
Alright, now that I read, good intro, looking forward to the actual story. I see some potential for a good one here.
880258 Well, that's what I'm here for...
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But she must eat cake so the royal flank will stay big
Interesting story. Now that you have the human in their world does he have a compulsive need to steal (The mental problem one [Kleptomania I think])?
Add to the twist in the story that he gains the interest of not just Celestia but Luna and a few others (Not that he is trying or actually fully notices it himself [That is if you are following the rule of Female to Male ratio being 6:1]). Pinkie or other screwy characters popping up might add to the comedy. I am faving this and watching how it turns out.
This is relevant to my interests
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We aRe pLEaSeD. Continue testing.
Intresting... I will fave on this
This is pretty interesting. I'm looking forward to more.
*ahem* MOAR!!
881692 I must write this carefully, it's like arming a bomb while trying to defuse it in a completely different way. In short, this can go very sour very fast and I don't want that.
881705 perhaps I should rephrase. this is shaping up to be an extremely interesting story which will surly capture my focus and bring me much enjoyment, and I look forward to your updates whenever you feel that they are good and god-damned ready to be released. Not a moment before. I shall wait patiently. img-fotki.yandex.ru/get/5603/113651489.e/0_89ecb_1da149f2_L
881734 As must everyone, I craved a challenge and I'm writing a big one.
Interesting.
Watching you be easier for me >.>
Also, Shenanigans.
:3
Yay.
hold on what type of car is it ie mustang or what
stunning as always.
893060 I hope the first part of chapter three is to your liking then.
Just be lucky that you're not in the room for it...
Also, as more of an aside, I want to introduce you to Wing Sheer. He's my "token Royal Guard with a name" and he makes a good magnet of misfortune...
893078 I've read about Wing sheer in your blog posts, poor guy. As you said though, good for schadenfreude.
Fuckin' yes! This fic is lookin' good. Keep it up.
“And just what’s the present, me or the car?”
I lol'd
Perfect opening chapters, I hope to see more soon!
895653 I'm not quite done with the opening, but it will finish soon. Unlike what some stories of mine seem like, I have a genuine plan, created over a few sleepless nights, edited carefully after getting rest. What, I liked some of the stuff I came up with at 3am
895697
well, it's going great so far!
895880 Onward next chapter! Towards Bluest Blood, Whitest Crime!
895946
I like that title.
Still loving it.
I'm liking the protagonist more and more. And I have to say that I'm extremely curious at how you're going to pull off the ship. Your Celestia seems to be of the more serious kind. And very well written at that. Not many manage to write her without pushing her into either a spot as nearly nonexistent or just making her a generic character. A lot, and this goes for quite the number of shipping fics, tend to skip the whole shipping and make them just suddenly be madly in love without much forethought.
Some seem to think that having them pining for each other for ages is a good way, but that's often just as bad as just suddenly having the two together. So I'm excited to see how you're going to go about it. Especially how much of it is going to be 'faked' by Zach.
"HE IS A CRIMINAL"
"oh he can get rid of blueblood?"
"ok then he is hired"
Stop asking her to destroy Ponyville! She's sick of it already!
913169 to be fair thats a good reason the hire him
913169 Lol.
I'm loving this. Okay Celestia, just a little fraud here, and framing there, and your problems are solved.dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/misc_Vinyl_Scratch.png
Well well well, a human who's taking his sudden teleportation to a magical land of small talking horses quite well and not freaking out! Now that is original! :D
913144 I am in full agreement.
913411
I found it kinda weird, don't think people usually plan for that kinda thing so it's fair to assume they react like this
Just have a talking horse there instead
but then again he's criminal scum
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So maybe that's just how he reacts?
913411
Technically I think he's just enjoying the fact that he's not facing prison time. I believe the term, better here than there fits this situation.
913569 It's just that most HiE stories I read where hyooman ends up accidentally in Equestria freak out (unless they're bronies, in which case they squee like crazy).
Hmm. I normally don't read HiE stories, but you've got me intrigued. Please, continue.
I just have one question...WHY DOES HE STILL NEED THE CAR?!
"Four you're protection."
Four
For
Four
For
Sorry I am being an ass but it peeved me.
Trollestia Strikes Again!
913144: This is something I have to ask myself whenever I start writing a chapter. I wrote out a lot of his train of thought and personality but each time I have to remind myself that he's a con man and that there's a con in his mind regardless of if he wants it there or not.
Where is this? I can't find it anywhere so I can fix it.
913383: I find there are three basic categories of fictional criminals: brutes, brains, and charmers. Very generic but that's not really too important. Zack falls in the charmer category.
913169 & 913387: He's my pet project and hearing that makes it all feel less like a guilty move.
913609: I've written plenty of HiE (not to mention read them) and I think that was always a big issue. It's difficult to write around and I do my best. Previously, I wrote the "I'll just freak out later."
913728: Thank you for reading then, I hope to continue to intrigue you.
913750: Personally, I would think he thinks it still has the possibility of working.
913766:
Now, I'm working on the next chapter as I write this, but this isn't just me taking a break. This is me giving you all some feedback.
Hold on, lemme find it.
After you left the ***** break, it's on the 3rd line.
918951 Thanks, I was wondering where, not to mention when, I'd slip up
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