Princess Luna is called off to Hollow Shades, a small community of bat-ponies, to deal with a magical issue.
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This is some what like The Garden of Shadows by CyborgSamurai with the whole light posing thing
7699523 You're exactly right. I got my inspiration from that story; I loved it too much to not try something similar.
I hope I did good.
7699594 It was good but now I want to know how Twilight will reacted to it
When you put up an all-nighter and read this nice story ... awesome!!
Have a like!
WEGTRETEN! o7
7699789 DAS IST GUT, MEIN KOMMANDANT
Good story, I liked it.
7703044 Glad to hear so! Thanks for the like and the addition of my story to your shelf!
Also, if you like SFW romances, the Royal sisters, and Shakespearean dialogue, you should give my page a follow and keep an eye out for my next fic; 'Ancient Hearts'.
gotta pedal my own shit like a door-to-door salesman, ya know?
This is a very good one-shot.
7703050 thanks but no thanks, the last romance I read was very cheesy and boring that made me go away from them.
7704296 This is a one-shot though...
I knew it, I just knew it. Celestia has cooties!
Well, that was something! A few minor gammar errors from what I could detect, but beside that, an enjoyable one-shot.
7706070 Think you could PM me with the errors you found? That'd be really appreciated. Also, thanks for the comment; glad to see your input!
7706256 I'll see what I can send you about it.
Also, I didn't mention it in the other comment, but I liked the little thing you used; bright worms. Never seen that before in my time on here.
7708613 Well... the point of a one-shot is that it is just... ya know, a story on it's own. I COULD do a sequel... but I feel the concept would be sort of repetitive.
Maybe...
If I do decide to make a sequel, I'll pm you.
That was cute.
The first step is for the Royal Sisters to send a message to Twilight about the bright worm. That will allow Twilight to build a magical cage to contain and study it. This was a good story.
I have reviewed this HERE.
Very enjoyable one shot. If you want a tip, I think Luna solved the problem a little too easily. I feel there should have been more risk, like if Luna somehow caught the worm and she had to fight it off while being mobbed and try to cast the spell with her light quickly draining. Also, at the end, Celestia was a little too oblivious for my taste, but that's my opinion. Given the context of having dealt with a similar problem before, I feel she should have caught on a little quicker. Celestia "adopting" the worm was pretty cute though. I'll probably take a look into your other work, as I rather liked how you did Luna's dialogue. Good balance of old English sounding and comprehensibility.
8007001 well, thank you for the comment! I agree, but my aim was to make this story as close to an episode of the show as I could manage, and I felt the simplicity was fitting for that theme. I greatly appreciate the critique, however. If i may suggest a story of mine, id say read "the luna papers". Thats quite a good one in my book, and i do a lot of world-building with luna.
8007001
I actually agree, I'd like to see (or, rather, read) that. After Luna brought up that possibility, I had a sudden urge to actually see (again, rather, read) that.