After landing in Equestria as a big, green minotaur, his only plan was gettting a hug from his favorite pony. As it turned out, he was going to need it. Because being Fudge, is suffering.
I think you nailed down the psychological effects of slavery pretty well, the pacing was decent, all in all the whole chapter had a very pleasant feel to it despite the unpleasant subject. I like how you emphasized the split in the diamond dog ranks, that was well-played foreshadowing
Get them out of that mine, goddammit. You're not winning "artistic" points by wallowing in it, you're pissing off all the readers you won with the first few chapters!
I think you nailed down the psychological effects of slavery pretty well, the pacing was decent, all in all the whole chapter had a very pleasant feel to it despite the unpleasant subject. I like how you emphasized the split in the diamond dog ranks, that was well-played foreshadowing
I BET I KNOW WHO THE PONY IS!!!
....It's sad that I'm excited for this next part.
I am lovin the story, can't wait for the next chapter.
I don't want lily to die.
Please, no
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Must... resist urge... to summon Lightning's WRATH and KILL the slavers!
Get them out of that mine, goddammit. You're not winning "artistic" points by wallowing in it, you're pissing off all the readers you won with the first few chapters!
....O Fortuna? ....MY FAVORITE!