Oh, ye great mysterious - Thousand leagues of blue
No one knows which mysteries are hidden
Beneath your surface
Your awful stirrings seem to speak of some
hidden soul beneath
- Ahab: The Pacific
The ocean holds many secrets, hidden away in the deepest expansion, far away from prying pony eyes. With Rarity becoming a reluctant explorer, whisked away in a magical bubble that plunges her beneath the waves, not even in her wildest nightmares could she imagine what awaits her all the way down there...
Inspired by the works of H.P Lovecraft and the Funeral Doom Metal album: "Call of the Wretched Sea" by Ahab.
Now with an audio reading by Illya Leonov: https://youtu.be/-ZkgeyAmsn0
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It was difficult to find my place in the story, I agree.
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7688824 Oh, it looks like something went wrong and it didn't indent properly. Didn't notice that, I'll fix it!
7688824 Indenting is fixed now. Let me know if you still have a problem! Thanks for the feedback.
Is that a subnautica titlecard?
7689690 I don't think so. I just found it on google images :P.
I really like how well detail this story goes with the Night mare. Just a word of advice, you might have to space out the paragraphs as its hard to stay on track when they are so close together.
7727473 I usually intent my paragraphs, but I will double space if it continues to be a problem~.
I was immediately reminded of Uncharted 3 after the twist at the end.
Some good description. Liked the ambiance. Perhaps a sequel?
7842836 I doubt I will make a sequel to this, as I think the mystery at the end is what makes it creepy. But I will absolutely revisit this kind of atmospheric doom metal inspired fantasy/horror in future.
Up til the end I kept waiting for Rarity to bolt awake having fallen asleep during a lecture Twilight was giving on undersea life.
8056084 Haha I've watched plenty of David Attenborough Documentaries, can't you tell? XD
Oh, the atmosphere here is on point!
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I can certainly respect your opinion about the mysterious ambience that this story has . That being said, what about a story about Saddle Arabia in general that way you could leave this story to our imaginations while still fleshing out the world it wouldn't be a sequel per se but a related work sort of thing.
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It's something I'm still thinking about, so I appreciate the suggestion!
I interept it as the memory of an ocean.
Not a true eldritch abyss with some lovecraftian beast at the very bottom....
This screams Subnautica gameplay to me
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I could be wrong, but I think this was written before Subnautica was released. Still, an apt comparison! Thanks for the comment :).
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It's still horrifyingly accurate to Subnautica and the vibes it gives to this entire story.
Oh, um, I loved it but... now I want it to continue. One by one... each of them succumb for they were all ther-
Oh there's a sequel!
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I hope you enjoy the sequel! I'm open to making it a trilogy, but it depends how far I can take the lovecraftian elder god concept =3.
It’s the #1 rule, pones: Don’t drink the water.
I recognize the photo from anywhere, damn subnautica….good game sessions for me though like seriously, never has been exploring and building bases been this fun.