• Member Since 3rd Feb, 2012
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Richer19


A simple writer/ game designer/ brony/ dragon fan.

Comments ( 3 )

Shouldn't it say "The three of them were silent for a moment, each of them trying to catch our breaths", instead of "The three of us were silent for a moment, each of us trying to catch our breaths"? Just wondering but overall great story!

Pretty decent. You need an editor to give this some polish since there were a few misplaced words.

Apart from that, good quick clop material.

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