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Fluttershy had finally reached the end of her days, her life perhaps extended by Discord as she's the last of her non-immortal friends to die, but the first thing she sees aren't the green pastures where her friends and the animals she cared for await her. Instead, she sees her friend Discord staring at her cheerfully, but something feels...off...

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Psychological Horror
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Dreadknight garen

Dreadknight garen #1 · Oct 29th, 2016 · · · Alternate Ending ·

WELL THEN.

HAPPY THOUGHTS.

Chinchillax

Chinchillax #2 · Oct 29th, 2016 · · · Alternate Ending ·

An interesting thing about Discord's character is that he can be as strong or as weak as the writer wants to make him. You made him have just the right balance of powers/limitations to create a quite disturbing story.

I feel like Discord would recognize that being turned into an immobile puppet is pretty much the same as being turned to stone, and avoid this scenario. But then again it makes for a creepier story this way. Good job.

The Psychopath

The Psychopath #3 · Oct 29th, 2016 · · · Alternate Ending ·

7680522 Thank you. I have experience with this kind of power because Psycho and Sociopath.

7680397 EVERYONE'S ALWAYS HAPPY. DON'T BE A DOWNER.

Brother Uriel

Brother Uriel #4 · Oct 30th, 2016 · · · Alternate Ending ·

Fuck man... It's a good short read, I enjoyed it... But... By the Emperor... Kinda puts that Chaos Monstrosity into a new light, again, I enjoyed the short read, few mistakes here and there... And kinda Feelsy... But, it's makes things interesting and I like to think on things, good work.

The Psychopath

The Psychopath #5 · Oct 30th, 2016 · · · Alternate Ending ·

7681000 I can't find all the mistakes. It's an issue with my writing. I'll try going through it again and see if I can't fix them.

Brother Uriel

Brother Uriel #6 · Oct 30th, 2016 · · · Alternate Ending ·

7681758 Still a good read, there wasn't too many

The Psychopath

The Psychopath #7 · Oct 30th, 2016 · · · Alternate Ending ·

7681777 I already found a few.

Lunaexcelsior

Lunaexcelsior #8 · Oct 30th, 2016 · · · Alternate Ending ·

You progression inti horror is goin rather well if I may so myself. The first time around we had the not Twiligh being revived in a human lab out of paper mache and some interesting commentary on nature vs nurture. This time around you explored the concepts of eternity and holding on to things way past their time. Chosing the relationship between Fluttershy and Discord as your vessel was very wise and both were shown as the characters in the show.

Discord in particular was done splendendly and the two alternate endings really showed how dual his mind can be at a time. Now the first ending is much more of a happy ending which sacrifices some of the fear the story had but gives Discord more depth and allows him to progress as a character.

The second ending however is downright horrifying and it reminds of a short film I saw where a girl gets entrapped in a doll alongside with more little girls around her age.

The entire work is really interesting and it more fits the psychological horror genre than your previous venture. It focuses really well on Discord's warped perception of the world around him and concepts of friendship that he has recently learned not to mention the horror Fluttershy must have felt in the arms of a madman.

In short it was amazing and I wish you to excell and keep it up. It was deliciously horrifying.

The Psychopath