7684425 I appreciate it! Thanks! I think the problem is that it's got a real slow build up with kinda short sex scenes. I really should just pump out 2klong chapters, but I don't have it in me.
I am really enjoying this story. Ruby is really developing well as a character, having to show a dominant master side and yet still unsure how to really bring it out completely. Then we have Dash who doesn't really know anything about ruby or his history. She simply feels she has been wronged despite the fact she largely did it to herself. Be interesting to see what her opinion of Ruby would be if she learned about his history with slavery and his time displacement making him view the situation in a different light.
The clop scene was good too. With Ruby and Rainbow's interactions, it felt like an interesting scene rather then just clop. Rainbow is now aware that she can make Ruby uncomfortable, but also doesn't seem to care much, but she, at least when tired and needing to distress, was able to admit the situation was largely her fault. Then we got to see her somewhat accept Ruby massaging her, too tired to really argue.
The ending though was interesting, as Rainbow's dream of Fluttershy could mean a few different things. She could just be thinking of what happened last night as her sleeping body was used, or she might actually have some hidden feelings for Fluttershy she herself hasn't acknowledged yet. Making what happened last night feel even worse.
I cannot wait to see what happens next and how things will develop between Ruby, Rainbow and Fluttershy as things progress.
He wanted to use her, to show her that he owner her now. He needed her to realize this, and what he was doing might get the message across—even when you sleep, your mine.
"he owned her" and "you're mine".
Thoroughly enjoying this, as with all your other stuff in the past. Glad to have found a new story of yours to watch like a hawk.
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Meh, it flows with the rest of the story. I think...
I'm really surprised at the lack of attention this is getting. It's very well-written, and easy to get into. Keep it up, man!
7684425
I appreciate it! Thanks! I think the problem is that it's got a real slow build up with kinda short sex scenes. I really should just pump out 2klong chapters, but I don't have it in me.
I am really enjoying this story. Ruby is really developing well as a character, having to show a dominant master side and yet still unsure how to really bring it out completely. Then we have Dash who doesn't really know anything about ruby or his history. She simply feels she has been wronged despite the fact she largely did it to herself. Be interesting to see what her opinion of Ruby would be if she learned about his history with slavery and his time displacement making him view the situation in a different light.
The clop scene was good too. With Ruby and Rainbow's interactions, it felt like an interesting scene rather then just clop. Rainbow is now aware that she can make Ruby uncomfortable, but also doesn't seem to care much, but she, at least when tired and needing to distress, was able to admit the situation was largely her fault. Then we got to see her somewhat accept Ruby massaging her, too tired to really argue.
The ending though was interesting, as Rainbow's dream of Fluttershy could mean a few different things. She could just be thinking of what happened last night as her sleeping body was used, or she might actually have some hidden feelings for Fluttershy she herself hasn't acknowledged yet. Making what happened last night feel even worse.
I cannot wait to see what happens next and how things will develop between Ruby, Rainbow and Fluttershy as things progress.
Only found one bit that stood out to me;
"he owned her" and "you're mine".
Thoroughly enjoying this, as with all your other stuff in the past. Glad to have found a new story of yours to watch like a hawk.
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Thanks! I appreciate the feedback.
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Thanks! I'm fixing those right now!