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Inky Scrolls


What is life? Is it nothing more than the endless search for a cutiemark?

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The title says it all, really. Celestia eats cake, accompanied by various other creatures at one time or another. Also: I wrote this just having brushed my teeth, and so, in honour of that occasion, the word 'mint' will likely be making a surprise appearance.

Seriously though, this story is crazy. You have been warned. :trollestia:

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So Celestia's being a glutton while Luna's having an existential crisis, then Discord shows up with the express purpose of being a dick.
That's your entire plot.

Sandwiched between we have cameos by supporting ponies and a number of references and fourth wall breaks, none of which really contribute to the overall plot in any way that I can see.

I have some recommended reading for you: http://tvtropes.org/pmwiki/pmwiki.php/Main/ChekhovsGun

7675178 Thank you for taking the time to provide constructive criticism. I assure you that this is not my usual writing style, and the story is not intended to make sense or follow any sort of literary norm. I had not heard of the term 'Chekhov's Gun' before, so I thank you also for helping me to learn something new.

Now I will teach you something new: the Latin name for the wombat is vombatidæ, which I don't think was especially imaginative of whoever thought up the name.

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I see where you're coming from, and in principle I agree that there is nothing wrong with nonsense.

However. When you're writing a short story, the nonsense must be a pseudo-logical kind of nonsense. Think; pretty much anything Pinkie Pie says. Maybe it only makes sense from one specific point of view, and maybe you'd have to break your neck in three different places to get the right angle, but it can still be puzzled out.
Anything else is just a meaningless mess of letters. A waste of space that nobody reading it is happy with.

My creative writing teacher back in school had some marvelous advice; Kill your darlings. It means yes, you love that one little bit you wrote right there. You think that little paragraph or sentence is absolutely fantastic. But it only means anything to you, and it doesn't do anything at all for the story, and I know it breaks your heart but it's really got to go.

We humans really do have some horrific sounding sayings, don't we?

I didn't get any of the references, but this was still funny! I also didn't see any grammar/punctuation/spelling errors, so that's a bonus point!

7675268 Why thank you! :twilightsmile: Hint: most of the references make sense if you like 80's pop music. Jus' sayin'! :trollestia:

that introduction is not cliched... when you do it like that

7678071 Huzzah! Thus, my work here is done. :pinkiecrazy:

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