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I think ill follow you :rainbowkiss:

Great fic by the way.

In all actuality, I don't clop but... I think I like this! A lot actually... :twilightblush:

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You'd be the first! This is my first story on this site. Thank you for enjoying it!

Really well written. Followed you :twilightsmile:

Epic!!
And that was sweet in the end.:pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy:

This has the potiential to be a great series. Please do a sequel!

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I'm not quite sure how I'd go about doing that...maybe if enough people want it, I'd find motivation and maybe think up some ideas. :twilightsheepish:

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Well a good plot idea is that Pinkie decides to return to the rock farm to find some closure and takes Twilight with her for moral support. When they arrive they learn that Pinkie's sisters Inkie and Blinkie (Yes that are their names considering there's a Pac-Man theme in that regard) leaving Pinkie to search for her sisters.

no. ponies. are not. like cake.

"Pinkie moaned, leaning back on her arms,"
what is an arm?

Extremely well written story, perfect pace, I DEMAND A SEQUEL :yay:

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Lucky you, I'm actually turning it into a series. Working on the second chapter now! :twilightsmile:

830627 wow, that was a fast reply, but not your fastest, but so fast i shall write a poem about it :P

QUICKEST REPLY, I MUST DENY, BECAUSE I'VE ONCE REPLIED FASTER THAN A MAN COULD DIE!
IN A SPLIT SECOND MESSAGE, I DECRIED, THAT I SENT AN ANSWER THROUGH THE AIR SO FAST, IT FRIED THE MOLECULES THAT SAT STILL IN PLACE, I BURNED THEM ALL UP, CREATING OUTER SPACE!
I'M MAKING THIS SONG UP ON THE SPOT, BECAUSE WITHOUT AIR, THE EARTH IS REALLY HOT, SO I DON'T HAVE ALL THAT MUCH TIME, TO MAKE THIS POORLY WRITTEN RHYME, SO I HOPE YOU ACCEPT THIS, GUY, THIS ISN'T, MY, FASTEST, REPLYYYYY :pinkiecrazy:

830870 yes, i just have a major case of CAPS LOCK!!!! :flutterrage:

:rainbowkiss: :rainbowkiss::rainbowkiss: I love this so much..... and you have no idea how little a detail it takes to turn me off from a story completely. *applause* Followed...

When Pinkie starts licking Twilight's neck, there's a bit where it's repeated at the start of the first paragraph. I'm glad you didn't have an ending where Spike would be writing to Celestia about what he saw them doing; I've seen that too many times. A lovely d'awww at the end. :pinkiesmile:

and hey, I'm watching you. :rainbowderp:

I'm surprised there aren't more "Shrek" jokes in the comments...
NO PINKIE! PONIES. ARE NOT. LIKE CAKES!
(Nice fic btw, I really enjoyed it)

so tender and clopping at the same time.. like it! :pinkiehappy::twilightsmile:

.... WHOA. Not like the whole "Pinkie was abused by her dad and that's why she's so happy; because she's covering up her dark past" thing hasn't already been done, but it always makes me go "whoa. *shrug* either way, I probably would have stretched it out into a multi-chapter epic in which she finally forgives her family for it, but then again, I'm not writing clop... Which brings me to an issue I've noticed: there are no long-standing multi-chapter clops around here. I KNOW they do it in regular erotica, so it just kind mystifies me that no one does it here... Have you seen different, maybe? I dunno, I just remember this one story I followed that came out with 39 chapters before it was all said and done. Hell, I haven't even finished that one. Too busy with... Well, everything.
Anyway, a very d'aww kind of story, I really enjoyed it. And then I enjoyed it again... Lol... Anyway, I kinda want to see this done with all of them. You know, interview them, find out an issue which they confide in Twilight, and then what happened here happens then. I'll actually list their individual problems here.
AJ: honest, because she has been lied to all her life by boyfriends about *insert intimate or shocking thing here*
RD: loyal ,because she's been screwed over by various boys/girls throughout her life. 
Rarity: generous because her parents never lavished her with gifts, even going so far as to give things to her siblings, etc., and not give anything to her.
Fluttershy: Kind because she was beaten and abused by various men throughout her life, maybe even raped.
And Pinkie we have already established. 
Now I don't have the motivation to go and write this, mostly because I'm too consistently busy with my reading and reviewing to do much else, but if you could do it, I'd be pretty happy. Let me know what you think.
*You are now reading this in HK 47's voice*
Addendum: in the case the you have already thought of and have begun writing out the idea mentioned for the others of the mane 6, please disregard the above statement. Meat bag.

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I am actually turning this into a multi-chapter story; I've been working on that. Since this is centrally a Pinkie/Twilight fic, it will be centered around mainly them. I plan to have things work out for Pinkie...I don't want to say to much, but what I'm trying to imply here is that they will investigate her past further, and that's what I planned the later chapters to be based around.

Now, I do actually like the idea of Twilight finishing her research on the elements within her friends, but I'm not quite sure how I'd fit that in alongside Twilight and Pinkie's relationship, plus the focus on Pinkie's past. I'd really have to think about that, but like I said I do very much like the idea.

Thank you very much for your input, and that is definitely going into consideration! :twilightsmile:

844599 oh, I already thought of how to knit the two together. The tag line goes something like this:
Pinkie and Twilight, after a fateful research interview, begin a journey of self-discovery in which Pinkie comes to terms with her dark past and helps their friends along the way with shocking revelations about the events that lead to them becoming the ponies they are today.
That's how it would go if I were writing the description, anyway. I have a flair for the dramatic, what can I say? Enjoy the idea though. Really, what I was thinking was that while pinkie is off doing something, maybe reconnecting with a family member, perhaps beginning with her sisters then going on to her mom, culminating in confronting her dad. 4 members of the family, though there's two sisters, so maybe she gets back together with both of them in one, then the chapter after her dad, you could have her join twilight o the last interview in which there's a threesome? Yes, I HAVE been thinking about this for the past 24 hours... That's not weird!

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I appreciate your sarcasm. Honestly, I wrote it this way because I feel that realistically none of them would disapprove of their relationship. One might be confused, but I couldn't see anypony disapproving.:twilightsheepish:

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Haha now I have to try that.

Anyway....
The transition from Pinkie spilling the beans about her abusive father to Twilight and Pinks rolling in the hay doesn't quite sit right with me....
Now if I were on a computer I'd write a paragraph or two on why that is and how I think it should have gone....
However I'm using a hand held device with an on screen keyboard and directional buttons to write with making writing anything a helluva mission...
So I'll just say I'm not sure what it is that's bugging me and leave it at great story and thumb up....
This took me eleven minutes.... I want a real keyboard....
I miss being able to speed rant.

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I appreciate your input. I'm actually genuinely surprised you're the first one to mention that. It's kinda hard to right something like that, you know? Eh, it's just my mediocre style, I guess. I'm still trying to improve. :twilightblush:

Yay update.
Clonetrooper pretty much summed up my thoughts on this.

857885 you. You are everywhere I go. Almost half of the stories I've read, I've seen you. Therefore, I plan to say hi to you every time I see you commenting, no matter how old the comment. For giggles, mostly...
To pensive Brony: how did I not notice this having a new chapter out? *snatches new chapter and drags it into the cave to be devoured*

883389 I know right? It's like we all read the same stories or something. :rainbowlaugh:

Another great chapter, kudos on not making AJ be a grumpy pants over this. :pinkiehappy:

I love it so far, I can't wait for the next chapter.

Very good, although it felt a little rushed starting off, but that's quite common in clop as far as I've noticed. You more than made up for it anyway, so good job... I liked how you didn't make Pinkie into a completely different person underneath, like some of the fics featuring angsty!Pinkie. I'd give it 8/10 :moustache: 'staches for clopping brilliance :pinkiesmile:

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