A purveyor of intelligent literary commentary some of the time, and whatever I feel like the rest of the time.
There's a reason ponies don't practice un-magic much, mostly because it's a lot like regular magic except more dangerous and less predictable. But for some ponies, un-magic is worth the price.
Humble Pie is one of those ponies.
Too bad the price seems to be blowing up Twilight Sparkle's castle at the behest of a voice on a radio.
To re-iterate: there's a reason ponies don't practice un-magic much.
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Oh my, oh dear, This looks quite interesting from the description alone! Such a very unique un-idea!
I guess even radios have their, ahem, kinks.
Celestia, ah, I don't know if you knew this, but un-magical socks are not muzzle warmers!
The potential of someone finding your porn is more than enough motivation to climb mountains, let alone pseudo-teleportation.
That sounds like the stupidest thing she could possibly do shy of actually assassinating Celestia. Naturally, she's going to do it.
I dunno, it might confuse Twilight enough for her to "huh?!" herself to death... What do you mean that's not a thing? It's totally a thing!
They're going to be the best of friends, I can feel it.
Just finished, and I have to say this is going to be a marvelous fic. I have absolutely no idea what is going on, and while that usually would make it hard to get engaged in something, I have to say this time it makes the fic interesting. Great job!
7669118 Yeah, it's been too long since I did weird stuff.
One chapter in and I can already tell that this is going to be amazing.
I could have sworn you were writing a different story before this one that you never finished which had a less funny version of this premise. Did you not like it and delete it or something?
7669181 Yeah, it flopped hard. I tore it all down and went back to scratch. Took me a while to realize that comedy made the whole thing run a whole lot smoother
Welp ruined spikes stash place, broke his ribs and gave him a concussion And destroyed his stash while potential making him blast off like team rocket, knocked out twilight and most likely revealed the truth about spike before making her destroy her own home... Two trees down. And finnally tricking and embarrassing royalty in a most pathetic way before kidnaping and using me as a hostage yeah.... The moons the least of worries, better hope your never found or the Suns your fate
Welp, me be ded now from laughing to hard. *le ded*
By any chance, have you ever read some Discworld novels? Might just be me but I sense a similar humor.
Is she Pinkie's daughter or something? I mean, I'm just making an educated guess by the description and her name, to be honest, but it still really sounds like that.
Don't tell me I'm the only one who thought that?
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Got it. I liked the last one, but yeah, this is better.
I like to think that 'undead' is like going past 'dead' until you come out the other side. I'd really love to know how that would look like applied to magic.
In Soviet Equestria, you suck on Metroid.
With that reference, I have this feeling this story ought to be Human-tagged.
This is something I feel I have to follow just to see how weird it gets.
7670473 Nah, if "seedy rom" counted as a ref, the original show would have to be tagged "human" for doorknobs and balloons and hot dogs.
7669864 They are related, but I'll get into that later on.
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Well, Equestria Girls is technically a Pony On Earth story.
I dunno, straight using Metroid music in-story may be stretching "reference" a bit, but it's ok, I'm not complaining about it. Just commenting on the feel it gave that section to me.
7671521 My personal feeling is that the youtube links are semi "unofficial" as the material doesn't actually exist in the text of the story itself.
But hey, it's whatever you, the audience, make of it
So, does that mean Dynamic Entry do this every morning? Comes charging into the bakery at six o'clock sharp to get his morning donut?
I am really getting a kick out of that whole "Cthulhu is a goofy doofus" thing. Revenge of the nerds indeed. "I will make you listen to whining armchair bureacrats" is certainly a more effective threat than "you will be consumed forever in the bowels of the netherhells."
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Well, the whole "a tune rang through the castle" line certainly makes it sound that way. That's pretty unambiguous about the music being there in-story, which is where I got that impression from. Maybe that's something you meant to rephrase a little, then.
The story description and cover art REALLY undersell this one. I clicked expecting a low-key, academic sort of rom-com with minor adventure elements. Instead I got a Banishment Decree-esque over-the-top action comedy.
I feel mugged, author. I walked in with like four handfuls of attention in my pocket, and now you have all of it.
Seriously, though, jazz up that description. For example, spoiling the fact that she ganks two princesses and blows up a castle in the first chapter is a small price to pay to set expectations for your tone.
I am now confused about the timeline. At the beginning of this chapter, Whispy has just been summoned, and his first act is to start working out the contract with Humble that formalized their relationship. But at the end of chapter 1, Humble characterizes Whispy as "That which I had sworn in violation of all laws and order to serve" and the punch in the face is not mentioned in the next chapter, so that makes Chapter 2 a flashback. But^2 this chapter mentions the castle destruction as being in the past, so it can't be.
That aside, I am enjoying this thoroughly. Whispy is best wish granter.
7673989 Does that suggestion go for both the short and the long description? Or just one in particular?
Also, tossed in a comment about the punch to fix up the timeline a little bit, because the beginning was a falshback, but the transition could have been a bit clearer, you're right.
My Like and Track: you have them both!
*smashes laptop on the floor* ANOTH--- Oh... horseapples...
Your
So you combine the evils of a genie with the evils of lawyers and you get... a lease agreement for a new flatmate paid in wishes? This can only end in chaos.
I'm not sure what to make of this "un-magic" thing, though.
Also, I thought after the first chapter that Humble might be interested in Twilight Sparkle, what with the whole magic association and the mother of all pranks. (It would be sweet, she could bring back Golden Oaks!)
7671904 not only that, he tries to break down the door every day! that's why Humble was in such a hurry to open the door!
I have SO many questions, but I am also intrigued.
Please continue.
Should have read this sooner.
Or maybe not, as I'm craving for more...
Hmm. I'm not sure how to feel about this one. I'm a lot more sensitive about blowing up Twilight's house than I thought. Still, you've definitely piqued my interest. I hope to see where you go with this.
oml, I'm so glad I found this. I could've never expected something so genius to be here with that simple description