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After the whole "casting mind control magic on her friends" incident, Starlight spends a sleepless night staring out her bedroom window and wondering how she can ever manage to apologize to them. And to the rest of Equestria for everything else she's managed to foul up over the years, too, now that she thinks about it...

My entry in the October 2016 Writeoff, "The Darkest Hour," this story came in 10th place.

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A nice little stream-of-conciousness piece with some great writing.
Good job!

This was a really great look at the inner working of poor Starlight's tormented conscience. Well done!

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Thanks, folks!

It kinda fits in with today's finale, too, which is always a plus.... :scootangel:

Mike

This was really good. And it got me thinking, at the part where she mentions her mistakes are worse than other ponies' mistakes.
"What if Starlight Glimmer tried removing her own cutie mark?"
and
"What if she succeeded?"

Food for thought :rainbowderp:

Thanks for making me think. :derpytongue2:

You're a mess, but you're working on it. You're a failure, but you're working on it. You're a monster, but you're working on it.

This be a good story, mate!

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Thanks, folks!

I seem to have developed something of a rapport for Starlight, though I don't believe I've ever tried to take over any villages... :twilightblush:

Mike

Wow. It's not often that I comment on stories, but this is definitely an exception. Starlight's stream of consciousness sounded genuine and plausible. I feel like you did an excellent job at tapping into her character. Aside from maybe one or two minor errors, this story is truly something special. Liked and favorited, and hoping to see more from you in the future. :ajsmug:

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