• Member Since 10th May, 2012
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Matthew Penn


I write imaginary stories about cartoon horses.

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When a power outage happens during a surprise party thrown for Dr. Hooves, circumstances causes him to reveal a deep secret he has kept from everyone around him.

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Comments ( 13 )

Started off great. Built up expectations. Shattered those expectations with something completely out of the left field. Abrupt and uninteresting ending.
Its such a shame... you had it going so well.

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I appreciate the review. Thanks a bunch. I have to admit I haven't written many stories like this, but thanks for the input. :twilightsmile:

7655634 you're very welcome. I'm sorry that I can't give a better review because I really loved it... until he came out of the basement.

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I was originally going to have Dr. Hooves be the alien in question, but because of the whole Doctor Who(oves) thing, and similar stories like those, I wanted to try something different. Well, you don't succeed all the time. :derpytongue2:

7655647 if I may, did you consider a double twist?
That what he said was a complete fabrication and was revealed to be something else?

7655673

Hmm, I hadn't thought about that. Eh, it's too late now, it's already published. Hopefully I'll make another story like this next time.

Ok, that was something, I guess? :rainbowhuh: the story just end. It didn't have an ending, I feel Iike it just end. What is sad because it start really good. I thought for a second Dr. Hooves was the alien and then bum, there was another alien, preety cool. I like it until that part :scootangel:

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I'm glad you liked it. In hindsight I agree that would have been a better ending. Oh well. :applejackunsure:

This is a very good one-shot.

Bait and switch level : Meh.

Alondro yawns, "Oh gee, the stupid evil alien empire doesn't even notice that the Sun revolves around the planet in this system. Normally I'd thrash them good for their mental deficiency, but fortunately, the ponies have a draconequus for that. Dizzy, go have fun with the imperial alien douchebags."

:trollestia:

Why is "EARTH" mentioned so many times in the story ?

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