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Wandering Pigeon

I came here to eat breadcrumbs and indiscriminately shit on cars. And I'm all out of breadcrumbs...

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SuperPinkBrony12
SuperPinkBrony12 #1 · Oct 16th, 2016 · · ·
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Hehe, Gilda falling victim to her own trap was like an old Willie Coyote cartoon. :rainbowlaugh:

ThatRobotGuy
ThatRobotGuy #2 · Oct 16th, 2016 · · ·
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Karma, meet Gilda. Gilda, meet Karma.

This definitely gave me a good laugh.

Carpinus Caroliniana
Carpinus Caroliniana #5 · Oct 16th, 2016 · · ·
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7646713, definitely.

I saw that elaborate trap and I was like, "Wily E. Coyote cartoon impending"!

Granted, I can't say she didn't deserve it!

That said, I do find the adult foal store element a bit strange.

Galaxy of Equestria
Galaxy of Equestria #6 · Oct 17th, 2016 · · ·
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i how to see pinkie pie get but Gilda not! it just feel i was read something old cartoon gag.
i feel pinkie pie should got prank more!

Darkentrophy
Darkentrophy #7 · Oct 18th, 2016 · · ·
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Eh, it's okay I guess? I get that it's supposed to be Saturday Morning Cartoon material, but Gilda feels even more two-dimensional than she did in her first episode. Writing itself was okay, perhaps a bit of a step up from the last story, although that could simply be the difference in energy a slow-ish story focused on emotional gratification has versus a silly over-elaborate revenge plot does. There was opportunity here, but it remains unrealized, like you only explored half of the idea for the story. Admittedly, I do rather wish there was an alternate ending where Pinkie does trigger the trap, but enjoys it, and Dash is happy to help her and gives Gilda a stern talking to.

Overall, I'll give it a tenative 6/10. I feel Backstage was more complete and succeeded in its goal of being a bit of fluff better, but this story had slightly improved writing.

May your ink never dry.

Enderdragonslayer1
Enderdragonslayer1 #8 · Nov 4th, 2016 · · ·
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You just love humiliating your main characters in your stories, don't you Pigeon?

virgoknight
virgoknight #10 · Nov 11th, 2016 · · ·
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I rather enjoyed this story sort of brings me back to the road runner and the wiley coyote scene's vaguely. I truly enjoy a good prank back firing especially considering the circumstances. Thank you for the story.

Riveris
Riveris #11 · Nov 14th, 2016 · · ·
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I really hope to see a LOT more of these you dont see storys like this a lot sadly. XD just supper funny

Yosh-E-O
Yosh-E-O #12 · May 29th, 2017 · · ·
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<LoL!> The cartoon-like antics in this one were too good. It reminded me of a Wile E. Coyote and Roadrunner moment that, just as with Gilda, went terribly wrong.

What I liked best was your writing of Gilda. Her behavior, particularly at the Adult Foal store, was spt on. I could see everything as it played out. Excellent work!

ChuckHorsis2015
ChuckHorsis2015 #13 · Jun 5th, 2017 · · ·
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Cute story. Wish it had a sequel. There's a lot of potential for one.

Twilight Connor
Twilight Connor #14 · Oct 10th, 2017 · · ·
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7647398
Places like that aren't terribly strange. I've actually seen one in real life before. Granted, you had to be looking for it to find it, but it was there.

Wild Stallion
Wild Stallion #15 · Jan 11th, 2023 · · ·
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It wasn’t a quiet day on the outskirts of the dweeb-filled town of Ponyville. Not a quiet day at all.

Little did Gilda know she was in a WP story. And before long, she would be the biggest dweeb of all.:trollestia:

She just went right along, prancing and pranking like no one’s business.

Little bunny poky poo hoping through the fields rounding up ponies and pranking them till their mad!:pinkiecrazy:

The exact change was dumped onto the counter before her and she barely had time to process it before a green blur grabbed the pack of diapers next to them and fled the store.

Poor Lyra. Being all cute and shy about her secret hobby!:rainbowkiss:

The aisles of her store met her gaze, their pink coloring almost blinding in the bright lighting of the room. The wares they held only served to add to the chaos, with more bright pinks, along with purples, yellows, and baby blues covering the packages of diapers, pacifiers, and oversized foal toys. All of this, was of course, complimented by the magenta wallpaper that bore soft pink swirly designs.

Ohh! Cute! :heart:

After all, it wasn’t like business was bad or anything. Plenty of adult foals lived in Ponyville.

You wouldn't happen to have a list would you?:trixieshiftright:

Sweet was jostled back to reality when a bundle of goods was dropped onto the checkout lane. She glanced up to see a butter cream yellow sundress with a set of matching, massively poofy booties, and bonnet right next to it.

Wait is that for Pinkie Pie?:rainbowhuh:

No, no, no, her eyes are blue!:twilightangry2:

Blue you cretinous bird! :flutterrage:

This is basic color theory! :facehoof:

Honestly it's like you want to be taken advantage of Gilda.:ajbemused:

On top of them was a pack of the largest diapers the story could offer (twenty centimeters of pure padding, to be exact), and a strapable pacifier to rival their size with a massive rubber bulb.

Seems like some chick likes it thick.:pinkiecrazy:

If Dash did that too then maybe their friendship was beyond salvaging.

If you don't want a filly Rainbow Dash Gilda, I'll take her!:pinkiehappy:

With a growl, Gilda leapt into the air and slammed her whole body down, determined to see the spring react.

FWOOSH!

Gilda blinked, going from ground to mid-air in a split second. Her body flipped and flailed in the air, as she saw the spring below for a brief second, now hanging out. It took only a second to realize that it had finally worked, but by then Gilda had already opened her beak and started screaming.

Told you.:ajsmug:

Then she landed in the tree.

A bird in the bush.:rainbowlaugh:

Silky fabric suddenly covered her and her limbs flailed through sleeves as Gilda realized the prissy dress she’d set up was now around her body.

Mmm! Yummy!:raritystarry:

It’s poofiness forced her legs apart as they slid through the waiting holes.

So is her tail stuck in there? That's no good. For her anyway.:unsuresweetie:

Using every ounce of willpower, she managed to turn her body ever so slightly… just in time for the frilly bonnet, the last piece of her prank puzzle, to latch on to the back of her head.

What's a birdy without her bonnet?:trollestia:

Gilda struggled to flee. Her wings were pinned by her fillyish dress, but with the muscle relaxants they wouldn’t be too useful anyway. She tried running, but even summoning what little strength she still had, the best she could do was a weak half-crawl. To make matters worse, her beak couldn’t seem to stop suckling now, exasperating the problem.

Aww! The poor hatchling is panicking.:fluttershysad:

Gilda winced, and weakly turned around. Pinkie Pie and Rainbow Dash stood right behind her, jaws touching the ground at the sight before them.

They're just shocked speechless at your cuteness sweetie.:rainbowkiss:

“You look soooo cute!” Pinkie squealed, at least bothering with a hoof over her mouth.

Told you!:twilightsmile:

A tiny, dribble amount of urine escaped, and then the floodgates were open. A hiss could be heard as Gilda peed herself, a steady stream of liquid pouring forth only to be thirstily soaked up by the diaper she wore. A blush dominated her face as she wet herself, but that wasn’t even the worst of it.

Aww! Is the little chick wet?:ajsmug:

She didn’t even need to push as her bowels followed her bladder’s lead. A hot, steamy mess roared out of her butt with a resounding fart and slammed into her padding. Her diaper crinkled as it expanded, the feces staining it brown almost upon impact despite it’s thickness. Gilda grunted with exertion as halfway through she found herself pushing anyway.

Her diaper sagged as her poop loaded it up, bulging out in a chunky mess. The stench of crap and piss mixed in the air and hit her nose, which was coincidentally the only way she could breathe at the moment.

Eww! What a stinky birdy!:pinkiesick:

Gilda gagged at the smell of fresh manure, whining as her accident finally ended. Her butt fell back to the earth below, squishing the wet padding and stinky mess together in unholy matrimony.

Silly Gilly! You're not supposed to sit in your mess!:rainbowlaugh:

“And leave her like this?” Pinkie asked. “That feels kind of… mean…”

You know you want to help her ponksy poo! You can put her in a crib and bottle feed her until she gets back on her feet!:scootangel:

“Not really. She probably chose to wear and… do all of this.” Rainbow said.

I mean... She did pick out the color. Like it was tailor made for her.:raritywink:

“Okay then,” Pinkie waved at the humiliated griffon. “Bye, Gilda. I hope you enjoy… whatever this is.”

Pinkie Pie is such an encouraging sweetheart.:pinkiesad2:

She almost regretted letting those two go. Almost.

I regret you letting them go. Mama Pinkie Pie would be so cute! And incidentally, the best revenge you could have hoped for. You know how much she hates changing stinky babies!:twistnerd:

With a grunt, Gilda realized that was probably her best option at this point and struggled to crawl back to Ponyville. Seeing the large, crowded town she would have to go through to get to the adult foal store, she whimpered.

Her humiliation wasn’t over yet.

Poor birdy!:fluttershysad:

...Stupid dweebs...

Bet none of them are as cute as you right now! :twilightsmile:

Or as smelly.:applecry:

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