A Displaced Story
Princess Luna. The true goddess of the night. It is an honor for me to serve her demurely and be in her majestic and glorious presence.
If she does command me to slay her sister, I would do so without even a second thought. If she does command me to call her Nightmare Moon, I would do so with a smile on my face and eliminate everyone who dared to call her differently. If she does ask me to take over Equestria, when I would gather my strongest forces to do so with a passionate fire in my heart.
And yet I… failed. I disappointed her which led to her imprisonment. I couldn’t do anything to stop that retched sun moving fraud.
But Princess Luna is coming back. The Summer Sun Celebration draws near and I will be ready. I will serve her once again so she can claim her rightful throne and to finally dethrone that witch of a sister that claims all the glory and fame for herself.
My name is Fenrich. Loyal servant and right hand of the great bringer of the night, Princess Luna. She shall rise once again and her name will be known in the farthest corners of Equus.
All is for my Princess.
Crossover: Disgaea 4
FenFen and Moonie together against Sunbutt and all of Equestria!? Yay! Tracking and have a like.
7646208 duplicate, don't know the displace but like anyway.
Oh damn, here we go again with the fitting background music.
Please keep this story going!
What's this a crossover with again. I don't recognize the character in the picture.
7647921 Disgaea 4: A Promise Unforgotten
Interesting... need more to confirm?
I am confused i thought that when the elements hit both of them it would have turn Nightmare Moon back to Luna and where is princess Celestia?
Please don't make Fenrich a wolf puppy or a little kid. Keep him the same as he is in the games
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She was turned into the Woona form, so it happened. I only treat the Nightmare Moon part differently. In my honest opinion I never understood why everyone says there is actually such a thing as a Nightmare. I always thought of Nightmare Moon just being the name she choose when she actually tried to usurp her sister.
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This is only temporarily. I mean, if Luna gets turned into Woona, why shouldn't Fenrich's form shift after being hit by them? Give it two Episodes and he will be back to normal again. At least that's the plan. So he won't stay that way for long.
7648945 oh so whatwhat of Luna how long do we wait until Luna goes back to normal, like before she became Nightmare Moon?
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I'd say once Fenrich is back to normal Luna has her normal height, but still her short light blue hair, so that she is a bit slower in her regeneration.
Great chapter
Why are the chapters so small?
7651142 Because of genius, ahhhhhh ummm..... hmmm i got nothing. Though i would love to see longer chapters.
7651142 Simple, not everyone can write long chapters (that and some stories don't need long chapters to get the point across) and as stated these are the Prologue/Introductory chapters.
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Of course I also could have pressed everything into one chapter. That would have been a possibility. But I always admired stories that had such short chapters rather than long ones. I myself shy away when I see a chapter with 6,000 words or more, so I think that such a simple word count motivates others to read more. It is also easier to simply make a pause. Sure, I know there is the bookmark function, but I personally prefer to have things be separated like that, which is a far cry considering the stuff I wrote normally has longer chapters.
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I can write long chapters, but personally just wanted to do something different since I prefer shorter ones.
7651217 fair enough I think about five hundred or so more words and you have my favourite chapter length.
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I personally don't write based off of long nor short chapters, I just write to the flow the story is going in and just end a chapter when I think is a good stopping point. They just kind of write themselves in.
I sorta laughed at how this 1 small chapter-ish is
Keep it up dood!
I'm crying tears of joy and pride. This preview is just like the ones from the Disgaea series: Silly, funny and nonsensical at extreme levels. And yet they tell us what is going to happen next so accurately
An excelent job. Please update soon the tale of how FenFen and Moonie/Woona will take over Equestria!
Liked. Tracking. 1st priority.
Great chapter. He may be small now but he still packs a punch.
OH PLEASE, LET THAT BE tia UNDER THE DOOR.
7664865 no rarity
7664865 My bet is it is Twilight.
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Seconded.
The ending was fabulous.
Kute and Fuzzy to win the day!
Funny ending
Yes, I called it knew the door was going to smash Twilight now Twilight is going to have an unnatural fear of doors cause of this day.
I wonder if he will ever try to weaponize his cuteness.
7659904 How so? Your comment confuses me.
Just how did those three attract a Hydra?
7841343 They are literally the incarnation of stupidity, how else do you think they attracted a hydra they bloody well walked right into its nest and tried to fight it.
7841340 Is this guy from a show or a game?
7842383 Disgaea 4 it's a game, but there is an anime the character could appear in... but it's most likely the game.
i dont know what this is from but im interested
So epic! I loved the fight scene and Fenrich's Magichange. I guess the reason Luna is feeling down is because ponies are afraid of her... After she saved their damn asses!
Also, I find it surprising that RD disapproves the epicness that just happened.
7851997 Most of the problem that is to be had from tia, she turned the entirety of the pony species into a bunch of spineless, gutless pansies
7852106 Yup. And you forgot "useless" and "dependent on Deus Ex Machina friendship magic to do erverything".
And the biggest irony is that Celestia does nothing to help against any threat that comes to Equestria. She just sends Twilight
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tia got Luna back, so Twilight is just a tool that IS useful but also dangerous if she figures out she's expendable so she's going to be used as much as possible before she is ends up dead
damn You! You're making me want to dig out my copy again.
Fus Ro Da, much? Talk about a knock-knock joke.
I swear, if this turns into a 'never killing' rule and pretending there's no such thing as a morally justifiable kill and labeling it all under the head of 'murder' ...
7852988 My little time lord i wounder what time it is my little time lord!
7854200 its midnight.
7854211 its 1:52 for me so jokes on you!
-A comma is needed after the word 'two'
Not bad, and rather interested in these new baddies. Though, I fear for their performance as I was given the impression of Starscream squirming before Megatron. It takes the edge off of how they are perceived, which is rather the exact opposite effect that a hidden meeting concealed all the more because it is held in shadow is supposed to achieve. Still, a minor setback at worst if this really was just a slip-up and harm will otherwise be achieved upon Princess Luna, barring outside interference not conceivably within the villains ability to control or plan for.