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Mithra is a cute, little filly that lives in Fillydelphia! Swift Shade is a bat pony colt who also happens to live in the same city! Little Mithra wants a scary slumber party, and her new friend seems like the perfect colt for that. Bat ponies are supposed to be scary, right? Right!
Except looks can be deceiving. Really, really deceiving.
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Oh, still active are we? Good to know you aren't dead.
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It was a long, hard-fought battle, but I managed to defeat laziness to pump out a one-shot. Alas, I'm still lazy. :c
I'll probably try to hit up some other stories here pretty soon.
>Try
Yay! I love bat ponies!
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Better yet, bat pony colts! Now who doesn't love some bat colt action?
You've created a new paradox!
The scary paradox!
You hear/know something is scary, and you want to be scared, so you go to it expecting to be scared, but then it acts completely normal.
Is that scary to you since now you're more afraid of not being scared since you want to be afraid?
If it does scare you then is it real fear since you already expected to be scared and therefore be happy?
Shade does a good job describing me and every awkward person ever.
I would be offended that you're stereotyping us as a group since we're all special, unique, and different...
But I'm just to shy to say anything rude
(LOLZ)
Wait, if he goes to school in the day wouldn't that completely destroy his sleep schedule?
Wow, that's dark.
Normally I would make/insert a George Takei "Oh My" clip at this point...
Usually.
However, these are children,
As such it would be inappropriate for me to do so.
However,
that will not stop me from making my own new joke about how I'm not using an old joke,
Just like this one.
Enjoy
You should have warned me that there was going to be Peanut Butter in this.
(Rated PB for Peanut Butter)
I could have prepared better.
Damn it.
Now I want PB.
*gets up from chair*
*gets Peanut Butter and knife*
*pours glass of milk8*
*comes back*
Okay, now I'm ready for the story.
(I actually did get PB, literally, no joke)
Thank goodness this wasn't a colt otherwise there would be an obvious joke here, one that I will not make.
Some people are allergic to it... but then in that group of people there are people who still like it, a lot.
Cute, entertaining, and funny. Very well done.
Although... it could be argued that monsters are real. Nightmare Moon, Discord, Tirek, changelings, manticores, chimeras. Granted, none of them have been sighted around Fillydelphia, but still.
Congrats on describing the group that can't/won't tell scary stories.
Not because we lack imagination, but because we want to see them smile and laugh.
Daw... Shade and Mirtha are so cu... and now we have half the fandom shipping them... go figure.
What a perfect way to end a romance...
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That's a lot of comments. Perhaps putting it all in one comment would have been a better option. I'm really glad you liked my story, though! I hope to entertain you more in the future. ^^
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Sorry, I just really, really liked your story.
P. S. There is a bat pony tag you know!
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Oh, I hadn't noticed that. Thanks for pointing that out.
You're Welcome
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Manticores, hydras, cockatrices, parasprites, nightmare creatures (comics), bugbears...
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I suppose. Then again, one could argue that they're simply animals. But yeah, I suppose they're monsters. To us. To the ponies and other creatures, these animals are normal, everyday things. Some more exotic than others. It all depends upon perspective, I guess.
But to a foal, they'd be monsters probably.
Just finished reading and thumbs upping this. Boyo I don't even know where to start. I think I'll start with all the negatives for a change. Firstly there were a couple of misspellings, things like in the beginning were it says scare her mane of instead of off, a couple times where the wrong form of there/their/they're is used, and few omissions of words. Secondly it was really long and hard to read in a single sitting. Though that could just be me. That's it really, the only things left are little knit picks, like the storm didn't think it was stormy when they arrived, it felt like it was out of no where, but living where I do, this is kind of how it happens. Finally I get to sing this story's praises and there's so much to sing about. Now to the Characters both of them were marvelously done. I loved that you got me on the edge of my seat, and even though I pretty much knew what was going on I loved it none the less. Except for the tree I thought that was somepony's pet mandicor, but still whoa it was good. Next Chem-Is-Try I loved it, I'd love to see a hearts and hooves day sequel to this. It was believable, beautiful, and all the way around done right. POV was done very well they both acted like kids would. I liked that you got all of this done the way you wrote, described very well what was going on. Especially those last couple scenes. I could vividly see everything, as it happened, Great Job. All in all a wunderbar geschichte as my comrade would say. I think, oh well I love this story.
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Thank you for taking the time to give out some constructive criticism. I've already thanked you the PMs, but I figured I'd say a few things for the record. The typos and all that will be fixed at one point when my editor finds some time in his busy schedule. I realize I should have waited to post this, but this has been put off ever since October. Needless to say, I was pretty excited to push this out into the public. As for the romance, I never intended for that to be a thing, it just sort of slowly formed while I wrote the story. Added the romance tag afterwards. Still, it's not the main driving force of this story. While it can set up for a Hearts and Hooves Day sequel (which I had been already planning), this one was more so about friendship than anything else. And peanut butter. Really, it was just a small undertone that slightly got stronger as you got near the end.
Anyway, I figured I'd both respond to you in a more thought out way and say a few things on record regarding my story for everyone to see. Again, thank you. ^^
8052783 ummm... is that logic or karma? i always forget... oh well. anyway, this was a nice story! i just can't tell the points of the romance, can ya make another chapter or a sequel to this explaining the romance please??
8056225 It's a very small undertone, barely even noticeable. The romance is open to interpretation, really. But it's the small things. A few blushes here and there, and the snuggling near the end. I wouldn't even call it a proper romance. It's just two kids becoming very good friends, though I've established that there is something there, even if it's very, very small. This story isn't about that, though. It's about their friendship, and scary stories.
I'm thinking of making a Hearts and Hooves day sequel one of these days, then, and then it'll become a lot more apparent. For now, though, I wouldn't pay too much attention to it. I basically just added the tag since the ending was alluding towards an innocent attraction, whilst being bolstered by how they acted around each other, mostly Shade, during some points in the story. Really, it's nothing too major just yet. I wouldn't call too much attention to it.
8056225 I started listing off monsters native to MLP as counterexamples that disproved the original statement. So...logic, not karma.
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As I said, it all depends upon one's perspective. A cockatrice could be a monster to a foal, but an animal expert would see them as, well, animals.
It also helps to tell yourself that there aren't any monsters, so that you don't freak out. For a foal, that is.
8057198 I know that, but he wanted to know if I was referencing karma or logic...I'm not quite sure how he thought I might be talking about karma.
8057233 Not really sure, either. Especially considering both our points stand in their own right. Yours from a technical standpoint, mine from the viewpoint that monster is a subjective term.
Eh, didn't mean to make a big deal out of this. Have a great day.
Pony children are lucky they're no good at telling scary stories. They should invite a human next time.
http://tvtropes.org/pmwiki/pmwiki.php/Manga/BarefootGen (should't link directly, I guess)
8054451 This one did really good!
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8057198 it just gets really logical at this point. try not to think too hard, your brain might explode.
8056539 that's not too bad of an idea!
8059540 Aw, but I love overthinking things! It's especially fun when puzzling out the bizzare behavior of the sun and moon in MLP, where I conclude that it is very likely the sun is being moved retroactively at FTL speeds.
8059566 its kinda complicated... I think..?
https://www.fimfiction.net/group/211585/reviewers-caf/thread/308771/reviews#comment/5899609
They love each other, but i bet they are in denial lol
This was cute and all, and I like how childish and innocent the characters are, but, there is so much in here that seems forced. The whole, falling in love with your new friend, thing isn't quite as fluid as it needs to be and is pretty eye-roll inducing at times. It doesn't feel natural.
Other than that, this was a fun read!
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Yeah, after a while, it was a chore to figure out a way to make it all fit together seamlessly. This story wasn't nearly as good as I'd pictured in my head at the time. Should have ran it through a couple of re-writes, and touch-ups here and there, but oh well.