"If you only write when you're inspired you'll be a fairly decent poet, but you'll never be a novelist."
Everglow has waited for a long time to return something to the pony she admired since she was a filly. When her friend happens to spot a pony she'd been searching for she finally gets a chance. If only she could stop being so nervous about talking to her.
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You hardly find any stories of sunset when she was still in equestria. Very interesting with the terrible yet helpful advice.
I liked this story, a pure slice of life.
The only part I didn't like was when MoonChaser hits Sunset... with a head butt.
I mean, you rated this story 'E'. You can't show a random guy punching a girl out of nowhere, even if he had his reason. To not change the story too much, I would advise you to change the headbutt into just him landing and throwing the book in her face. That would tone it down and you don't have to modify anything forward.
I would also consider changing the word 'bitch' into something fitting the E rate. Or you could rate the story as a T, personally I don't mind. Beyond that, I liked everything. Your OC is extremely cute.