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Darkest Dungeon


There is a place, beneath those ancient ruins, in the moor, that calls out to the boldest among them...

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why do you keep doing this ;n;

7728836 Given into your temptation, Priest. Let the sin wash over you. :trollestia:

Waaaaaay too much telling.

Sorren #4 · Nov 17th, 2016 · · 8 ·

7728842 I have to agree with you there. This is telly as fuck. Too much 'smiled happily' and 'sighed in relief' and 'she felt'. The pacing just feels way too fast, like the author aimed for quantity over quality, or got tired of giving descriptions when the sex came around.

She was physically, mentally, and sexually spent.

Oreally?

Fluttershy tried to keep her throat open and swallow all the cum that Max was giving her, but the amount was too much. It flooded her mouth, oozing out around the knot and down her chin, and it seeped up to trickle out her nostrils as well. She tried desperately to clear her airway, her throat convulsing around the part of Max’s cock that was inside of it

her throat convulsing around the part of Max’s cock that was inside of it
Very descriptive.

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But if it's truly No-Fap November, that might be difficult.

her mouth was filled with hot dock meat

That must be some exotic treat.

Dis was good. Love seeing Fluttershy used like this. It so fits her personality.

MadMaxtheBlack, my dick can only take so much!

*Don't stop you magnificent bastard*

Sorren #8 · Nov 17th, 2016 · · 25 ·

In addition to my previous comment, I have to add that this story is riddled with errors that could have easily been fixed with a simple editing run.

“Well, I brought some food for you~!”

Shameful tilde is shameful. Get that cutesy RP laziness out of here.

The Great Dane continued to ground his hips against her for a few seconds before suddenly hopping of and spinning around.

stuck in a kennel, surrounded by horny does with two dogs working to fill her from both ends.

Wrapping his forelegs around her barrel, her began to maneuver himself around.

The twin huskies continued to work her over, one trusting away at her mouth

her mouth was filled with hot dock meat

where it pulled and leaked out onto her lips before dribbling down her chin.

On a side-note, over the course of a 2,000 word segment in this story, you say 'fluttershy gasped' six times.

I'm giving this story a dislike for a severe lack of effort.

Just because you have 2k+ followers and everything you write with a sex tag gets featured doesn't mean you should stop trying to put out content that isn't a toss away from the waste bin.

Normally, I'd give this a thumbs up, save the story and move on. But this is just miserable. I expected more. The subject matter is fine and the setup at least tries to be a step up from something The Cinema Snob would run roughshod over. But trying is not succeeding. It's meant to be cheap Clop fodder, I get it. But have some pride. I make cheap clop fodder too. But I care about it.

This may be the only time I down-thumbed a story like this.

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Just because you have 2k+ followers and everything you write with a sex tag gets featured doesn't mean you need to stop trying to put out something that isn't a toss away from the waste bin.

Sounds like you a bitch that's jealous.

Sorren #11 · Nov 17th, 2016 · · 16 ·

7728900 you're*

Also, why would I have any reason to be jealous of a person who can't be bothered to put effort into writing their story? I'd rather acquire followers who prefer quality rather than ones who are aroused by the mere prospect of a sexual situation, regardless of quality or execution. I give credit where credit is due.

I have nothing personal against anyone, but credit is not due here.

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He's been tearing into more than one clop story that makes the featured box lately. Just completely unnecessary and unhelpful, the kind of insulting hidden behind harshly-delivered criticism. Always seems to target the fact that they were liked enough to make the featured box, and now jumping on this writer's follower count as if they and the author are at fault for something... somehow. If you're right, then jealousy would technically explain all of this.

*squints* Madmax? More clop? Fuck man are ya ever gonna give us those last few chapters of YHaY?

Loved it. Can you do another?

but Fluttershy was still able to make ? what she needed.

? = out

Wrapping his forelegs around her barrel, her began to maneuver himself around.

he

stuck in a kennel, surrounded by horny does with two dogs working to fill her from both ends.

dogs

That in turn forced some of the semen up into her mouth, where it pulled and leaked out onto her lips before dribbling down her chin.

pooled

The Great Dane continued to ground his hips against her for a few seconds before suddenly hopping of and spinning around.

grind
off

A week long bitching orgy?

Sorren #16 · Nov 17th, 2016 · · 15 ·

7728934 I'm not insulting anyone. I am providing criticism. Whether or not people are insulted by the fact that I point out problems with a story is their hangup, not mine. I have not only been focusing on content in the featured box, however that is all you have seen specifically because the story happens to be in the featured box. For every featured story I comment on, I tend to comment on at least five or more that aren't.

If you look for hate, you're going to find it. I give credit where credit is due, and many times, it is not due.

And on a side note, I just finished having a story in the featured box. All you have to do to get there is write smut. It's not hard.

First we got Sunset boning horses, AJXWinona, Sci-TwiXDogSpike, and now FluttershyXDoggies

Shocks #18 · Nov 17th, 2016 · · 29 ·

There's too many animal fuckers in this comment section.

purge all degenerates pls

7729004 Mesa, y won't u die :c

This is fucking fantastic. An out of the box, fucked up story is exactly what I've been waiting for for one of the popular authors to make. This gets 5/5 from me Max. Also you can tell most of the critics are just people in denial about enjoying the beastly subject. To that I say fuck off because y'all already wright about pony sex you hypocrites

7729011 leave the trolling to me

Max, Max, Max...You ain't right, man.

7729152 I'm your only true god, Oderus Urungus

7729185 even though there's foalcon humanxpony and all that yet this is the one thing that ain't right?


7729225 oh nice to meet you I'm skull smasher but my fwends call me wolfie

7729250 You've pretty much got it spot on. There's no specific line drawn on what's over the top besides the anthro/human underage in the site rules. If beastiality is wrong then I guess all the humanxpony stories need to be shit on too since a human fucking a horse is beastiality aswell. You could argue that ponies are sentient and human like, but fuck you for disagreeing with me then.

7729284 thank you see this guy gets it but GOOD JOB MAX why? V because you went where others fear to tread

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It's not the criticism that's seen as rather distasteful. It's the way you carried yourself all throughout it that really makes taking you seriously rather difficult. Yes, there are flaws in this story. Yes, they're worth pointing out. And you should do so for the sake of encouragment of improvement (and more effort for the future), but when you barrel into a comments section, and shove criticism into another's face, a person is unlikely to take what you have to say very well. Thus, your intention of criticism won't be recieved very well.

Your first comment was good, and you provided real criticism. Constructive in all the ways that matter. But the second one came off... well, not so great. You may not have anything against the author, but you sure made it look that way, regardless of intention.

At least, that's the way I saw it. You probably had very good intentions. Think of this as constructive criticism as well. You have a great mind for criticism, that much is clear. I'd hate to see said criticism be ignored because of the way you present yourself. However, do as you wish. Anyway, I hope you have a great day. ^^

All of my yes.

OH MY GOD!

How can you write bestiality like this on a website with a lot of fics depicting ponies fucking each other?

You're obviously a sick pervert!
I'm literally shaking right now.

Ever been to a kennel?
They smell like dog shit was smeared on the walls, then someone tried to cover it up with Fabreeze.
Which really isn't far off from what actually happened to make it smell like that.
Not the most conductive atmosphere for sexual activity.

Unfollowed

7729682 Implying Equestria doesn't smell like pony plop.

7729284 you got them by the balls right there

7728997 The Purge: Yiff Opposition.

And once again there's a story about Fluttershy screwing with animals in the featured box. Butterbutt needs to stop giving all the dogs a bone.

Still not the weirdest story on this site. You need to step up your game.

Add that to the "In the arms of an angel" commercial.

7729741 Okay... bye then, I guess?

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I'm not insulting anyone.

Oh really?

Just because you have 2k+ followers and everything you write with a sex tag gets featured doesn't mean you should stop trying to put out content that isn't a toss away from the waste bin.

Calling Blackie lazy and a crappy writer, while implying he doesn't deserve his 2k followers.

Also, why would I have any reason to be jealous of a person who can't be bothered to put effort into writing their story? I'd rather acquire followers who prefer quality rather than ones who are aroused by the mere prospect of a sexual situation, regardless of quality or execution.

Again implying that Blackie is a shitty writer that doesn't put effort into his work.

That right there sounds like some insults.

Also, all of this 'needs to be better quality' whining coming from the guy that's responsible for the steaming pile of shit that's "Size Totally Matters". Practice what ya preach, my friend. You couldn't write yourself out of a cardboard box.

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This fic features Rainbow Dash and a monkey... :rainbowwild: ... and also involves Rarity's pussy. :raritywink: :trollestia:

7730138 oh shit nigga

its getin prty heated in here

i wanna see some action

7730160 Just calling it as I sees it, bro.

7730172 Don't you start something in this comment section either. :ajbemused:

7730138 stop implying things that are wrong.

Also please feel free to tell me how my story was shit in pm. I am always looking for new critism.

7730186 He won't. He just likes to poke the bear and stir up drama. Ignore him and he'll leave you alone. Or I'll end up blocking him for a few days... again.

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