• Member Since 19th May, 2014
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Dr Equinox


Nice,creative guy who enjoys normal AND strange/weird things.

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[SOON TO BE RE-WRITTEN]

Human beings, said to be the worst of the worst. They were stronger, faster, and more advanced than any other race in the galaxy, even though they never left their planet. Legends spawned from the remnants of their culture, spreading tales of their immense might and unrivaled power. They let nothing stand in their way, not even themselves. Although each legend and tale of the race differs, they all lead to their mysterious disappearance, leaving everything behind. Few skeletons have been recovered, none completely intact. Their ruins influenced every civilization to date in one way or another. None have figured out their connections to the humans, most who claim to often experience ridicule and questioning, and it is doubted that any ever will. They will always be the mysterious parents of the world, never to be seen again.

Until one fateful day, when tensions brewed between the neighboring nations of Gryphonia and Equestria, a group of scouts encounter the last remaining human. The only catch is that the human is completely contradictory to any records resembling human anatomy.

That is because this human is a Giant, able, and willing, to hold the entire scouting party in his gargantuan hands.

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Interesting.. i will keep my eye on this one, it has good potential.

... A human would not shrink due to lower gravity, they would actually grow slightly taller as their spine decompressed minutely. Also, why did you write the number 3 in parentheses near the beginning after spelling the word? It's pointless and constitutes an error.

Ya, not gonna lie, you can really see that you wrote this one fast. Maybe you should consider polishing this up a bit? It feels kind of rushed and somehow superficial. Maybe you could give the reader a tad more insight, maybe a discussion between the king and his adivsers or some reports from the caretakers or hell, even one or two exploits if this giant guy. Oh and starting your story with an "..." looks really, really weird.

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Yeah, sorry about that. It was kinda late and I needed to get this out, just so its out there. I will.be revising this and hopefully be making it more coherent soon, maybe even add in some dialogue. I was planning to originally but by the time I got to the end it was late. Let it be known I wrote this at like 9 when I usually sleep at 10 or 11.

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I made him shrink because while it is lower gravity, he is a literall giant. If anything I'll probably just change it so he's somewhat hunched over all the time, and for the 3 thing, I honestly don't know why I did that. I will fix it as soon as possible.

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This video seems prevalent:

Lower gravity can help with some of the problems, but it would worsen the one brought up at 2:34. This giant would be pretty slow.

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Firstly, so glad someone else watches V-Sauce, love those guys. Secondly, I do appreciate your input and I would like to talk more, maybe private messaging so its less of a hassle. Lastly, I've already counted on him being slow and all that, but I'm also incorporating some fantasy logic in There. It's not all gonna make sense, and while I will stick to some things, there will be times where science will go completely against the fact. I'm.making a story about a giant human who's been living with Gryphons for about six years Or so. There's gonna be some gaps there.

Needless to say though, I do really appreciate your input. Thank you.

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