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The balance of the universe will be tested when the Lantern Corps' Power Rings come into the possession of certain members of the CHS Mane Seven while a dark and powerful evil looms around every corner. Only the combined power of the Lantern Corps and The Rainbooms stand any chance of stopping those who worship evil's might.

Chapters (8)
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this is good so far keep going:twilightsheepish:

Hey there. Thanks very much for getting this story started. I really appreciate you going to the effort. I have to say, the exchanges, action, emotional content and future chapter set-up in all the right places. I particularly liked the nods to the Justice Society's history. I take it, from some of the dialogue, that this takes place some time after "Legend of Everfree". One thing, though; considering this is the human universe, "Power POSSE" might be a more appropriate comic name. I'm also going to go out on a limb and guess Alan is going to end up mentoring the girls in the use of their new rings . Of course I COULD be wrong on that. At any rate, I'll definitely be looking forward to more of this as soon as time and inspiration will allow.

Continue, ze yo~! :twilightsmile:

So who's gettin' the Black and White rings?

7678673 I don't know about the black ring, but the white ring it's a secret :pinkiesmile:

7679750 It'd be someone dead so what if you reveal that human Sunset's dead and she become the Black Lantern

7680473 not quite what I had in mind:twilightsheepish:

7680476 But it would be cool to have them face each other

7680484 I like the idea but it's not really what I had in mind:scootangel:

Comment posted by Ultimate Mayhem deleted Nov 5th, 2016

7680517 I'm a bit confused about the pictures:rainbowhuh:

nicely done:
:ajbemused: Beware my power, Green Lantern's Light!
:rainbowkiss: Look to the stars, for Hope burns bright!
:raritywink: Nok (:twilightblush: could somebody maybe find me a translation of that oath?)
:yay: Love conquers all, with Violet Light!
:trixieshiftleft: To take what I want, that is my right!
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We'll burn you all, that is your fate!
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Beware your fears made into light!


:twilightblush: makes you wonder what's going to bring them together should they ever encounter THIS:
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7697779 thanks :raritywink: and the indigo lanterns oath is
In sorrowful day, in misfortunate night,
We help those, who need our might,
With the lantern power of Abin Sur,
We rid your misery...,
With compassionate might!

7697837 :rainbowderp: okay: I'm a bit curious as to where you found this... :pinkiehappy: ...but I'm not one to look a gift horse in the mouth :twilightoops: :facehoof: wait: that didn't come out right...

7697865 it's OK:raritywink: and I got the oath from Wikipedia

Not much I can say other than, once again, great job on this latest chapter. The exchanges, emotional content and future chapter set-up are all well done in all the right places. And yeah, I particularly liked the reactions to the new rings and Cinch, the Dazzlings and Trixie actually meeting the heads of their new Corps . And, yeah, I am definitely looking forward to more of this as soon as time and inspiration will allow.

Hoo-boy. This is getting bad. And I mean the situation, NOT the story. The story actually continues to be quite good. Again, great job on the exchanges, emotional content, action and future chapter set-up in all the right places. Pretty well-timed appearance by Hal too. :-D I'll definitely be looking forward to more of this as soon as time and inspiration will allow.

Comment posted by Time Agent pony deleted Nov 13th, 2016

7718247 Thanks and Hal's not the only green lantern to appear:raritywink:

7718358 You're welcome. And, yeah, I kind of figured. (in that order) And, if this IS set after "Legend of Everfree" (like I guessed in my review of the first chapter), then Twi's new telekinesis could, with sufficient practice, allow her to mimic some of the basic Lantern tricks even without a ring, but I admit I could be wrong on that.

7718378 it's alright and yes it is set after Legend of Everfree:twilightsmile:

nicely done; also, if you don't mind, I think I have a pretty good idea who the mentors of the other Lanterns will be:
Rainbow Dash: Blue Lantern: Saint Walker
Rarity: Indigo Lantern/Tribe: Indigo-1
Flutttershy: Violet Lantern/Star Sapphire: Carol Ferris

7718648 that is exactly what I am going to do:pinkiegasp:

7733289 :twilightsheepish: hehe: what are the odds?

Hey there. I just thought of a couple of possible future scenes in later chapters:

1. At an appropriate point, Hal can comment to AJ "Let's see: Youth, Blonde hair, farm girl, super-strength. If she weren't in another universe, I would almost think you were the younger cousin of a friend of mine." (this, of course, would be a passing reference to Superman and Supergirl).

and 2. At an appropriate point, somebody of your choice can comment on Rarity being able to do force fields even WITHOUT the ring and add "At the very least, it will give you an extra trick, make it easier for you to get the hang of certain aspects of using the ring AND make you more likely to survive long enough to recharge the ring."

Of course, if you don't like the ideas, I will completely understand.

7739709 I love these ideas :pinkiehappy: just got to find a good place for them

7749232 Yeah. Good point. But thanks. :-D

Once again, thanks very much for getting the next chapter up. I really appreciate you going to the effort. Once again, excellent job on the exchanges, emotional content and future chapter set-up in all the right places. I'll definitely be looking forward to more of this as soon as time and inspiration will allow.

7749431 as always thank you so much:twilightsmile:

first off, great job showing how the Element Lanterns (Green Apple, Blue Dash, Indigo-Rarity, and Sapphire-shy) match up with their rings both in personality and in mindset (Applejack displays HONESTY with great amounts of WILLPOWER, Rainbow Dash proves how HOPE and LOYALTY go hand-in-hand, Rarity showcases GENEROSITY through COMPASSION; and Fluttershy shows that LOVE is nothing without a little KINDNESS): I felt that was a nice touch; secondly:

"Hal, the Last Light...." Carol said, shakily "we made it through...." she struggled to complete the sentence, "But so did Nekron!"
Hal, Saint Walker and Indigo-1all gasped.
"Not Nekron!" cried Pinkie, "I don't actually know what that is" she whispered to Applejack.
"Hal, who or what is Nekron?!" Sunset asked.
"We're doomed" Hal shivered, almost as if he hadn't heard anyone, "death, death is coming."

this: I like this: it shows how serious the situation is without sacrificing what makes the characters who they are
in other words:
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7749917 thank you so much for your support :raritystarry:

Hey there. Thanks again for getting the next chapter up. I really appreciate you going to the effort. Once again, great job on the action, exchanges, emotional content and future chapter set-up in all the right places. And, yeah, I figured the villains would be the hardest to convince to cooperate. Of course, I am definitely looking forward to more of this as soon as time and inspiration will allow.

Not much I can say other than great job on this latest chapter. It took a while, but was well worth the wait. :-D Again, great job on the exchanges, emotional content, action and future chapter set-up in all the right places. I particularly liked the JSA mini-reunion. And, I have to admit, I kind of liked seeing Maud escaping the Black Lanterns so casually (too much emotional control to give them anything to feed off of) . Actually pretty funny in spite of the seriousness of the situation without being inappropriate.

And, maybe, there could be an epilogue scene after the Black Lanterns are defeated that shows Rainbow testing her super-speed against Jay in a friendly race (with Jay winning, but Rainbow still doing respectably).

Of course, if you don't like the idea, I profusely apologize for wasting your time.

7866710 thank you for the comment and the idea:raritywink:

7866929 You're quite welcome.

:applejackconfused: Sunset Shimmer as a White Lantern? :rainbowderp: :rainbowdetermined2: I'm okay with this; also:

"Just like old times, eh?" Jay asked, Alan.
"Yeah, except I don't remember my back hurting like this back then." Alan replied, rubbing his sore back.
The sound cheering was heard, they all turned to see a crowd of people who had been watching clapping and cheering.
"Eh, you see that," an old man said, smiling, "thats the way to do it."
"Old school like the old school," his friend agreed.
Both men nodded in agreement.

nice reference to "The Incredibles", though I think it should be "NO school like the old school"

Whoa mama. That was one doozy of a final battle. Excellent action all around. I loved seeing so many JSAers getting a chance to shine, and yeah, one of my two suspicions concerning the White Lantern turned out to be correct. I also loved seeing the three least cooperative ring-bearers getting much-deserved karma. And that was, as aforementioned, a beautiful homage to the Incredibles.

And, maybe, while Jay and Rainbow are having their friendly epilogue race, maybe AJ could test her super-strength against either Power Girl or Citizen Steel in a friendly arm wrestling match.

At any rate, I'll most certainly be looking forward to the epilogue, but am quite willing to be patient.

just thought of something else:

In the brightest day,
There will be light to cleanse the soul
and set wrongs right
when darkness falls look to the skies
A new dawn comes
Let there be light!

nice job with including the White Lantern Oath, but I don't recall them HAVING one: care to explain where you found this, or did you make this up yourself?

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