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Strato Nimbus

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I'll give you a like, but I noticed some spelling issues here and there, nothing to bad, just some 'is's' turned into ifs, and so on, minor typing mistakes, it happens, I noticed it more around the middle, and some words were missing.

Some won't be as forgiving, but it was a nice read for me, since I'm not the best with writing.

Overall, it was a really fun read. As Sparks said, I spotted a few mistakes, but I can't remember where any of them are. The writing in some parts seemed really stiff as well, but it's not too big of a deal. The pacing at the beginning could definitely use some work, but as you progressed through the story, it became more natural. I mean, it was still stiff in a few places, like I said, but despite all that, it was a very enjoyable read. I liked it.

I'd give a better review if I was any good at reviewing things. I'm not. Anyway, keep it up!

7608764 Thank you for the feedback. I'll go back through and correct what I can find later.

7608812 I'll do my best to go back and fix it. thanks for the feedback.

This is, without a doubt, one of my favorite stories on fimfiction.

7743009 Oh, wow. That really means a lot to me. Thank you for the compliment. I almost had to cancel it due to a misunderstanding so I'm glad I got that cleared up.

Do you mind if I ask why you like it?

this fiction is decent however it's not that bad. The only thing I do like is that you did some details in both chapters. However outside you need to put in weather details if you can. Also Time is also a need as well. Look you have 57 likes and 7 dislikes it's a big start. Please don't cancel a good opportunity of this fiction.

Thumb up because the story was good. Some mechanical issues, but that's what revision is for. On to the next chapter!

Absolutely love this story. It’s hard to find stories like this.

Huh, new chapter, that's a pleasant surprise:twilightsmile:

It was a short little extra that I somehow didn't notice was not published even though it was done.

I can't wait for the next chapter to come out.

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