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Waifu Crossbreed


Priscilla is the best Dark Souls waifu

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Meet Lloyd, a 16 year old human being who, for some reason, ended up waking up in the Everfree Forest. Which is, you know, not cliche at all. That would be stupid. Anyway, he ended up in the fluffy body of a zorua. Unfortunately, the inhabitants of the nation, he is now a resident of, really love tiny fluffy creatures like him. In short, he's doomed!

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I feed of FimFiction!!!

Comment posted by Waifu Crossbreed deleted Sep 25th, 2016

7590676 good story and great pokemon you used :twilightsmile:

7599826 all the pokemon i saw in the pokemon fics on this site were a bit overused. I saw some mews a few other legendaries, a lot of pikachus, even a zoroark. So i thought that i should go for something that i have not seen being used, i went for something unique

Remember, the shapeshifting is physical, when Movie Zorua turned into a flying pokemon he could fly as well, although as he didnt practice, all he did was slow his descent...
so gills and stuff should be possible...
and by Bulbapedia, you are also psychic, hydrokenetic, aerokenetic, plantkenetic(not the actual workd but i cant remember it), venemous, and have ghost powers

I looked towards the cooing baby "I'm going to maim you one day!"

Cadance didn't even bother to try reacting to a threat on her baby

Comment posted by Waifu Crossbreed deleted Mar 2nd, 2017

This entire chapter is made of over-used memes and self hate.

And I love it.

Is it sad that this also represents my life?

7619012 i was consuming memes that are way too dank in the creation of this most recent chapter! Also, yes, it is sad that this represents your life, but don't worry, you're not the only one. I feel so cold inside :(

But there are good news! Its my first chapter that got to 2000 words!

This fic has what I'm looking for: A MOTHER FUCKING ZORUA!!

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Boy! How many dank memes did you consume? Too many could give you a MemeZure

7619754 it's too late! I was already taken to the hospital, and i was diagnosed with terminal meme cancer. Don't worry, unlike the rest, this kind isn't fatal. It just make you addicted to dank memes

7619919

Well that's good, at you didn't RIPeroni in pepperoni

I don't think i should have started in season 6....

7619951 is the twilight in your current profile picture trying to eat cereal or hay with a fork?

I've been reading this and noticing some errors throughout. None of them were comment worthy, and then I found this:

"The baby alicorn then unleashed a mighty whale upon us."

You mean a wail, right? What you wrote is the large sea mammal. Sorry if it sounds dickish, but I felt it was too hilarious to leave alone.

Wtf happened my notifications since I was at school?! It's a war zone!

7667322 why is she trying to eat hay with a fork

7667336 thanks pal for finding the error. But I will use an actual whale at some point

It was hilarious? Well, I've done my job. Now I can die a happy socially awkward faggot doodle.

7667904

Why cant she? You Forkcist or sumthin'?

Okay, before you read this, please note that I may sound like a dick. I'm not trying to make fun of your story, but this is my honest opinion. Please don't take this as an insult, but rather as criticism. Again, I'm sorry if it sounds like I'm being mean, I just want this story to be better.

This... this suddenly went from a reasonable story to a crackfic.

I can understand the beginning: dude gets changed into a Zorua. That's fine! Then, it starts losing focus and becomes more and more of "I wonder what would happen if I did this" and it just spiraled from there.

Now, it seems to have zero focus beyond "look at this" or "yeah that just happened." You're focusing on random humor, memes, and not much else now. Hopefully you have a story planned beyond the bland exterior, but it's not evident.

Aside from that, is the main character. While I like how you avoided something prominent in fics (flat out telling the name of the character via fourth wall breaking shenanigans) he otherwise has no personality. He isn't consistent, and his personality shifts quite often. It would seem like he is just a collection of stereotypes and memes meant to portray a person, and rob me it doesn't work.

Moving on from that, his abilities are... well, they have nothing to do with Zorua like you even say in the first chapter. There is no apparent reason for his powers, nor by reason for him to be there.

Alright, I'm done. I'll still watch the story, I like the concept, and I hope it gets better. Im sorry for being a dickwaffle.:applecry: pwease don't hate me!

7668246 no, it just doesn't seem efficient. She has magic right? Why can't twilight use that?

7668870 no you don't sound like a dick, you are just helping my demon child get better :)

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Don't ask me, I just took the picture from DeviantArt.

7670773 DeviantArt? DeviantArt!? DEVIANTART!?!?! You sicken me...

7671060

oy m8 calm yerself, it's not like I have an account, I just grab stuff from it.

Ok, that was very interesting...and very, very random.

And I like it.:pinkiecrazy:

7687137 I have a way of making people say that. It's called an overuse of dank memes.

MY GOD BOOK NERDS! .... wait a second

Welp... I'm out, the memes were to dank, the MC was an intolerable prick, and the pacing problem caused my inner writer to commit honorable suicide then come back as a Zombie with a picket sign denouncing the end times of good stories on FIMfiction.

TL;DR This story has too many problems for me to keep reading... I couldn't even make it all the way through this chapter due to them.

Where is my book canon!?!:pinkiecrazy:

7708757 Don't cry your life story to me. Did you not know that I'm 13? Of course my story is terrible, it doesn't take a genius to figure that out. I just did this for fun.

7736002
I want to make sure his time in the library is actually worth while. And the only way to insure that is with a BOOK CANON!:pinkiehappy:

7736010 YOUR'E 13 AS WELL!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!??????????????????????!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!:pinkiegasp::pinkiegasp:

OMFG!

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