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After returning from the heady lights of Las Pegasus, all Fluttershy wants to do is relax. One pink filly however, has heard about her pretending to be a scion of the Rich family, and in a case of mistaken identity...
Set after Viva Las Pegasus.
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In this case, the brothers didn't false advertise: it's no different from bottled water really, you can get tap water anywhere, but people still buy it, you can imagine anywhere, the brothers basically sold a glorified imagine spot.
That was a sweet little feel-good tale... Nicely done.
I always like your Diamond Tiara stories.
Oh, slight nitpick. Fluttershy was going as Impossibly Rich in Viva Las Pegasus.
Not that I think it's that big a deal, just something I felt I should point out.
7578497 And something I've edited. Thanks for the clarity... I've only seen the episode once, so...
7578503
No problem.
You're not the filly who's going to burn my house down with the lemons, are you?
(Sorry, couldn't resist)
The bear's name is Harry not Bruno.
7578874 Is that canon? Can you provide a link?
7578875 http://mlp.wikia.com/wiki/Harry
7578901 Meh *EDITS*
Seeing as he's only mentiioned once in an old, old episode, I'm sure you can forgive me...
Excellent story there I always loved Diamond as best filly viillain but good filly is best filly too.
((Detail Ceañera goes with a that symbol the letter "n" has, if that fails go for an "I" example: "Ceaniera"))
7578918 You see, I know that... but I don't know how to get the symbol on screen... Any advice?
7578957 Dunno, just popped into my head *shrugs*. Seemed like a tough name, for a tough animal...
I was actually wondering when a fanwork would play with the fact that Fluttershy was pretending she was somepony from a known family.
Huh...I, myself, pegged Impossibly rich to be a grandmother at best, but a great-grandmother? That's something. The story was nice.
7579160 Same here
7579160 YOUR PRAYERS ARE ANSWERED!!
I just knew you were going to write something like this after the last episode. Love the exchanges these two had with each other!
This story is really neat, I love it!
oh god not fluttershy, too is EVERYONE the exact opposite of who they are supposed tp be in this episode
flim and flam DON'T DESERVE FRIENDSHIP, never have, never will
Is it just me, or does it seem like Goodmane is Gideon Gleeful from Gravity Falls? Or his dad?
7584461 Or even... Elvis?
7584976 Gasp!
If there were a Mistaken Identity feature...
At your request, here are my thoughts: The spelling in this story was good, and a fic centered around these two was a lovely idea. I think the characterization here could stand for some improvement though.
One example would be Diamond Tiara approaching Fluttershy and behaving so pitifully. She's a pretty independent filly, and it would've made much more sense it Fluttershy caught her crying and approached her. Diamond Tiara would put up as tough an act as she could though, as she hates to be seen as weak or helpless. Additionally, private family matters wouldn't be something she'd hastily discuss, especially with a stranger.
And why didn't Diamond Tiara just ask one of her parents to contact the supposed relative in the first place? They could've easily made arrangements for her to see her own grandmother.
As for Fluttershy, she seemed a little haughty.
Attributing the redemption of Discord to her helping him, rather than his own choice to change after being shown something as powerful as kindness is very unlike her. She's quite idealistic, and if anything struggles constantly with self-doubt, not an inflated ego.
I also noticed her dialogue seemed to use the word 'dear' quite a lot, even though she doesn't really use the word all that much in the show. You were obviously trying to convey her soft, approachable personality. But she does that a lot more through subtle actions like tone of voice, concerned expressions, gentle movements, etc.
One aspect of her dialogue you could incorporate though, would be the nervous little pauses she often does, like: "Um... well... I guess if you're really sure about it, Rarity. You know more about fashion than anypony, after all."
Fluttershy also wouldn't ask a filly to stay late at her house when it seems like her parents don't even know where they are. A more accurate portrayal of her would be to escort the filly home and invite her to come by some other day to play with the animals with Diamond's parents' permission.
I read the first few chapters of your 'Spoiled Milk Returns' story, and I recall the characterizations there didn't seem amiss. Maybe you just needed time to improve. Anyways, I wish you well on your writing, and hope you have a lovely rest of your day as well.
Gladmane sure was a phony pony full of baloney