But Where We Gonna Go?
Princess Celestia sat upon her throne in serenity. It was a slow day in Canterlot, one that gave the mare some time to herself between appointments with the petty squabbles of nobles. The mare closed her eyes for a moment, relishing in the soft rays of the sun along her coat. She was at peace as her mind soon lulled the mare into blissful thoughts. However, the echoing of the large, throne-room doors opening brought the mare back to reality, as she noticed a guard rushing towards her.
“Princess,” the stallion spoke before bowing quickly and righting himself. “There is trouble that requires your immediate attention. Eric Lancer disappeared from the town of Ponyville last night.” The guard watched as the expression of his beloved princess turned to one of annoyance.
“I know I should have kept him here in the castle,” Celestia mumbled under her breath. Standing from her throne, the mare spread her pristine wings as she summoned a particular guard from the corner of the room.
“Lieutenant Stonewall, I want you to gather a group of your best guards before setting off towards the town of Ponyville. Eric Lancer has gone missing and I want him back in this castle in no less than forty-eight hours. You are allowed to use force if the subject is unwilling to cooperate. Do I make myself clear?” The guard saluted the mare with a resound response.
“Yes Mam!” After a nod from the Princess, the Lieutenant left the throne room before heading towards the barracks.
“Princess, if I may ask. What is so important about this human?” The first guard questioned. Celestia let out a long sigh as she slowly walked over towards one of the large windows of the throne room. The view was captivating, as it accented her beautiful city of Canterlot and the ponies that inhabited it.
“Humans are an untrustworthy bunch of creatures. They are masters of war, able to lay destruction to any who stand in their way. They are intelligent, nimble, predators who prey on the weak,” Celestia stated with a scowl before turning towards her guard. “And they will not hesitate to stab you in the back for personal gain. Mark my words; humans are nothing but trouble, especially Eric Lancer. He possesses an intellect that far surpasses even my understanding. If left unchecked, I fear what sort of evil he will bring upon us all. He is without a doubt, the most dangerous creature to currently exist in Equestria.”
“Got any fours?” Eric casually asked. Lilith smiled at her friend before shaking her head.
“Go fish.” Eric scoffed under his breath as he grabbed a card from the top of the deck.
“So you never did tell me where we are going,” Eric added, as he relaxed into his seat while sipping on his fruity drink.
“I told you, it’s a surprise. Got any nines?” The human reluctantly handed the mare his card with a sigh, eliciting a faint giggle from across the table.
“Looks like I win again. I should have played this game with you the first time,” Lilith teased, bringing a smile to the human as he set his cards on the table.
“Yes you should have. Though you didn’t, which I am rather happy about.” A few moments of silence were shared between the two as Lilith used her magic to stack and reshuffle the deck.
“What’s it like, losing your soul?” Eric questioned. Lilith looked up from the cards on the table before musing over the question herself.
“I don’t really know. I heard it doesn’t really hurt and the transition is really fast. Most ponies die when they lose their soul, though there are a few who survive,” the mare finished as she dealt out the cards. The human picked up his hand before immediately pairing off a set of threes.
“And what happens to those who actually survive?” Lilith smiled softly as she set down a pair of fives and kings.
“I don’t really know. That isn’t really my department, so I couldn’t tell you,” she responded with a shrug of her shoulders. Eric frowned lightly at the response, though couldn’t really blame the mare. It wasn’t her fault that he was a curious human. Growing up, he would always question why something was the way it was. If he didn’t know the answer, he would try everything in his might to find it. This earned him a lot of respect from his teachers, though not so many points with other students. His over-developed curiosity made him in outcast in school. While this wasn’t really a bad thing in the human’s eyes, it did attract a lot of unwanted attention from bullies and manipulative assholes. Suffice to say, his four years of high school could have gone better.
“Got any eights?” Lilith asked, pulling Eric from his thoughts. Searching through his cards, the human let out a tired sigh as he handed it over.
“This is going to be a long ride.”
A couple hours or so had passed as Eric had found himself asleep on the rather comfortable couch, accompanied with a blanket and pillow under his head, courtesy of Lilith. The mare had opted to watch over the human, finding a small amount of comfort and amusement as she watched her new friend peacefully slumber.
Thoughts about the night’s events had left the mare in a conflicting state. It’s true that she was still upset about losing to the human, though given everything so far, she couldn’t really complain. Besides, it could have been much worse, especially if he had made her his slave.
The mare shivered at the thought as she got up from the couch and grabbed herself a few grapes from the fruit bowl on the bar. It wouldn’t be long now, at most another ten minutes or so before they would reach their destination. With a knowing smile, the mare threw the first grape into her mouth before almost chocking on the stupid piece of fruit as the train car began to suddenly brake. After a few coughs, the mare had managed to get the grape down, though decided to prolong her life by throwing away the others.
“W-what time is it?” the human asked, stirring from his spot on the couch. Lilith turned to greet the human, though paused as she could hardly contain her laughter at the human’s messed up mane. Eric caught the mare holding her side before losing it in a fit of laughter. Feeling that something was out of place, Eric blearily blinked his green eyes before digging through the backpack at his feet. Pulling out a small metallic device, the human scoffed as he noticed his short-black mane doing whatever it felt like doing.
“Yeah yeah, laugh it up,” Eric commented, using his hand and phone to try and get his hair under control. He was quickly surprised as he noticed Lilith levitating a bit of water in her magic, before releasing her grasp and letting it gently soak into the human’s hair.
“Hey, what was that for?” Eric grumbled, not at all too happy about having a bit of water dumped onto his head.
“Relax you little filly. It’s just so I can fix your hair,” the mare replied. Trotting over towards the human, Lilith righted herself onto the couch before balancing herself behind Eric. Using her front hooves, Lilith gently combed Eric’s hair. Eric closed his eyes and relaxed as Lilith’s hooves felt like a weird, but comforting head massage.
“This is rather relaxing,” Eric commented, almost to the point of lulling himself to sleep.
“Yeah, well don’t get used to it. I’m only doing this because you have to be at least somewhat presentable,” Lilith retorted. Eric playfully scoffed at the mare, though let the comment slide.
“And done. That should be good enough.” Opening his eyes, Eric held up his phone to inspect the craftsmanship of the mare’s hard work.
“Not bad. It’s seem like you got it under control.” Lilith beamed a victorious smile while also sticking her tongue out at the human.
“Of course it’s good. Are you implying that I would do shoddy work?” Lilith teased, though her tone was a bit too serious for Eric’s taste.
“Well technically, I just met you, so I can’t be sure. Though from what I have seen so far, you take your job very seriously, even if it is a bit unfair to others,” Eric added before reaching a hand up to the mare and gently scratching her mane. A comforting pleasure rocked the mare’s body as she melted into her friend’s touch. Never before had she felt such a surge of comfort and warmth, though she was sure she never wanted it to stop. After a few moments though, the mare was brought back to reality as she noticed a grin plastered smugly on Eric’s face.
“What did you just do to me?” Lilith was both parts curious and cautious as she stared down the human for an answer.
“It was just a simple head scratch. I figured I would return the favor for giving me a little massage while fixing my hair,” Eric responded casually.
“I see.” Lilith grew silent for a moment before a small smile spreads across the mare’s face.
“Do it again,” she demanded. Eric noticed right away the tone of voice the mare was using. He could feel her need to experience that same feeling just a few moments before. If Eric were anything but a gentleman, he would deny Lilith of her needs as he watched her squirm. Luckily, he wasn’t a gentleman, and was going to take much pleasure in teasing his new friend.
“I don’t know Lilith. I don’t really feel like it,” Eric stated before throwing his phone into his backpack. Lilith glared at the human with a pouty expression.
“Come on, you owe me,” Lilith stated, watching as Eric lifted his brow in confusion.
“I owe you? And what exactly do I owe you for?” Lilith took this opportunity to climb onto the human’s lap, while also locking their eyes.
“You owe me for where I’m about to take you. So stop complaining and start scratching mister,” Lilith said as she planted her rump in Eric’s lap. At this point, Eric was both amused and confused, though relented at the childish but rather adorable actions of the mare.
“Fine, fine. But this place better be worth it.” With a beaming smile, Lilith felt Eric’s hand glide through her mane while gently scratching her scalp. Even though the mare wasn’t tired, the actions alone from the human were almost enough to send her to sleep. However, after a few minutes of peaceful mane scratching, Lilith jumped off the human with a smile.
“I appreciate what you just did. It was very refreshing,” she said before making her way to one of the windows on the train with a little pep in her step. “Now come over here and take a look. This is where I was taking us.” The mare motioned a hoof towards Eric, who eagerly left his seat and walked over to the window. Somehow, the train was now currently traveling across a large expanse of water and towards a massive city in the distance.
“What is that place?” Eric asked, unable to peel his eyes away from the scene.
“That my friend, is home.”
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So the same ponies who reformed NMM, Discord (for some reason we still don't know), and now Thorax are still racist xenophobes.
Uh-huh.
7580945 In the description of the story, I stated that this takes place right after season 3 of the show...
Not to mention that even after Discord was reformed, almost everypony but Fluttershy still didn't really trust him.
So Celestia hates humans cause they are back stabbing war-mongers? No offense, but this has been done to death with many HiE fics
"And I says to Celestia, I says 'Biiiiiiiiiiiitch you racist!' "
"You really said it?"
"Huh?"
"You said bitch to her?"
"Y-yeah, for sho"
7580945 NMM was never reformed, nor was Thorax, NMM was cleansed via the Elements of Harmony and Thorax was just a nice changeling.
7580945 As for Discord, he has the ability to transform all of Equestria and possibly the rest of the world into a chaotic mess. If your arch enemy could do that with ease you'd want him on your side as well.
7580965 Whatever, point is there's no trace of the xenophobic nonsense. I'm not putting much effort into this because the entire issue is absurd.
Not to mention, this is another profoundly lazy setup where the human just pops into Equestria randomly and the ponies are racist 'because they are', and now we have a demon who also just shows up and the mention of the devil... in Equestria... and we're told his entire backstory, including all the racism of the ponies, from a teensy bit of narrative telling so we can get to the plot, which is a pretty typical 'hurr-durr, I can trick an ancient demon and make her my slave cuz I'm smarter than everything' trope. Yeah, the Dresden-verse demons would have this guy's soul for lunch in 10 seconds flat. A proper literary demon's eyes wouldn't glow and reveal their methods. Heck, they'd use something far cleverer... like a die enchanted to always flip to the side they need to win.
Let's see this guy worm his way out of that. This isn't even as clever as the plot of the old "Wishmaster" movie, in which a much cleverer djinn spins wishes to harm the wisher.
Feh, I'd win this guy's soul without even trying. On a bad day.
This set up could be tossed into pretty much every single fandom in existence with almost no alteration save named details. It's a bland, stripped-down version of a trope.
celestia is "all-powerfull" couldn't she read the memories of eric and ask her sister to spy his dreams ? or is she stupid ? ah and i hate stereotypes . frankly just because she had bads experiences with humans means that all humans are evils .
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7580953 Discord was reformed in Season 3. "Keep Calm and Flutter On".
We'd seen Gilda and Gustav Le Grand, Iron Will, Cranky Doodle and Matilda, Mulia Mild... quite a few non-pony inhabitants, and no xenophobia.
In fact, the only race we saw which DID exhibit unambiguous evidence of racial superiority at that point were the changelings, who saw ponies only as a food source as stated by Queen Chrysalis herself, and the dragons as evidenced by the statements of one Garble.
As for pony attitudes towards dragons, the ponies admire them but are (quite sensibly) nervous around them due to dragons' immense size, strength, and frequently hostile and territorial nature.
Also, for the purposes of this story and since everything with regard to the racist ponies takes place off-screen and is summed up in a handful of self-monologue paragraphs... why was it even included? Was that the only reason you could think of for the human to leave? From what I see of him already, he'd have been bored in Ponyville regardless and simply left to find some place more exciting... at which point the demon would show up to tempt him with no other changes needed to the narrative.
7580992 Celestia may be powerful, but she does not have power to read his mind. I don't believe it is cannon in the show so I do not wish to give her that ability. As for Luna, she is able to enter a dream if somepony is having a nightmare. Eric doesn't usually dream, and when he does, it usually isn't a nightmare. So basically, Luna would have to play, find the needle in the haystack with pretty much all of Equestria.
7581011 Has celestia ever met this human while he was in ponyville?
7581004 You are right that Discord was reformed in season three of the show. Even though this happened, most ponies were still very cautious of him.
It is also true that I should maybe clarify it a bit better in the story. The reason why they are xenophobic of the human is because they have never seen one before. Have something you know nothing about enter your town and you don't know if it is friendly or not. Also find out that it eats meat and I wouldn't really want to associate with it either if I were a pony. They are scared, and when people get scared, they can become angry, which is why I said they are Xenophobic of the human. I haven't given a lot of examples yet of what the human had to go through, though I will in the coming chapters. This is just one of the drawbacks of posting a story chapter by chapter. You can't read ahead to find answers and understand why I wrote it the way I did.
7581024 No. She met him only once, though that will be explained in the next chapter.
7581036
So, making rather large assumptions based upon... what?
The ponies seem to only really fear things that either they haven't spoken to or which demonstrate overt hostility. And I'm quite certain Celestia would not fear one mortal human with no magic... seriously, would you fear a guy with no limbs and a soft squishy body you could flatten by batting your eyelash? That's about the level of difference in power and capabilities we're talking here. If Celestia was so worried about 'dangerous' creatures, she NEVER would have attempted to reform Discord... for no real reason... something which (in reality) was almost certain to fail and result in the most powerful entity in their world taking over with ease, this time potentially in perpetuity! Instead, a xenophobic Celestia would have had the Bearers look for a more powerful sealing device or spell to keep him petrified forever.
It just doesn't make sense for a xenophobe to try and befriend the most powerful non-pony enemy they've ever met.
7581052 then why does she assume that he is bad? you cant judge a book by its cover.
7581112 It will be explained later in the story.
7581061 There is a reason why I wrote this story and chapters the way I did. If i were to divulge my train of thought, it would spoil the story and I do now wish to do that. Yes, right now everything might seem absurd, but like i said before. That is what happens when you submit a story in parts. If you want more answers, you will have to wait until I have more chapters out. Sorry if that is not the answer you want.
I love this story so far. I can not wait to read more. I would also like to find out what class of demon Lilith is. Please keep up the good work you have a fan for this story.
The name of the latest chapter is based on a lyric from this song.
7581340 Hehe. I'm glad you caught that. That was the song that inspired this story.
7580945 Yeah, I like the idea of this story, but that made me cringe pretty hard. I get so tired of seeing the misanthropy trope. This still has potential, so I'll track for now.
7581180 Unless the guy showed up and tried to eat Fluttershy... then punched Celestia in the face... and tried to take over the world... and is bitching about being mistrusted for it.
I grant that it's possible he's a bastard in self-denial, since we currently only have his word to go on.
Still, if that were the case, one would think he'd be under much heavier guard or at the very least not permitted to board a train at will. I just can't think of any rationale that makes sense of the circumstances. And then there's the random appearance in Equestria, which happens in the overwhelming majority of HiE stories and tends to be strongly indicative of lackluster storytelling.
This is almost the same exact story that was all the rage (in the negative sense of the word) back before even half of Season 2 had aired. To say this story is beating a dead horse story concept, and badly, is an understatement. I think racist Celestia even has her own group on this website because of how many OOC portrayals of her as a xenophobe have appeared on this website since all the way back.
I think I had a groangasm you must do another
You should get a picture. It would make the story much more marketable, and give readers an idea of what the story is about outside of the description.
7582364 I am trying to do that. But pictures pertaining to the story cost money, so I'm trying to find someone to do it for me that isn't going to kill the bank lol.
I like this a lot! I'm looking forward to seeing what you do with this.
Literally can't get enough of this story
7619522 Yay! Glad you are enjoying it.
Solid picture! Hope you have time to update soon!
more
cant wait for more!
MOAR!!!!!!
I enjoy and would like more please.
Wow great chapter I can't wait to see what happens next keep up the good work update soon
Ok where'd u get this idea it sounds familiar. I love that he wins against lilith but doesn't want anything much but her friendship it tells me alot of his character that he's a lonely soul
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Im not the Author, but this story does share some aspects similar to several Twilight Zone episodes. I also believe there is an old "Outer Limits" episode that has a similar theme as well.
The Monk
To the Author.
This is a great start for a story. You have my interest and I am looking forward to more.
The Monk
I look forward to another chapter.
7581419 Yeah plus Celestia gave only a slight overview of human nature...
On a world where no reliable overview should exist...at all...
Clearly I'd write a story using this trope and brief explanation only to hint to her hiding something huge the next chapter she shows up in and imply this is the exact opposite of what she wants and slow build up to a huge reveal involving corrupt nobility, magic gone rogue, and a hyperlink to some real fucking battle music...and the make the most awesome ass kicking scene while I show the crapshoots at hasbro how to really do a finale....
Assuming anyone would volunteer to edit...since I need that...but hey your story your rules man
7580945 2 wordss!
Somepony
Anypony
7844855 *cough,* zecora *cough, cough*
7844855 The only ones who've tries to take over Equestria as a race were the Changelings. And they basically announced their presence in the world by invading. So it's understandable that one showing up suddenly would be met with hostility.
Before that, for a thousand years as far as we know there was NOTHING.
The ponies have experienced an unparalleled peace. Their fear of the 'other' is... fragmented. It seems to exist only when the plot demands it (they feared a zebra and bunnies and barely batted an eye at a griffon and cheered a minotaur; and while they are understandably nervous of dragons, who themselves tend to look down on ponies, they do not hate them) and thus I disregard it as genuine to the species due to the writing-related inconsistencies.
Moar! :3
More pls! :)
I shall "Fav" this story as I'm curious to see where it is going. :D
I like this story. I'm looking forward to the next chapter
I hope you're not dead.