on the longest day of the thousandth year, the stars will aid in her escape,
Equestria is a world rich with magic and power, and in such a world who's to say the Alicorn Princesses are not Gods? Controlling the Sun and the Moon, Guardians of Love and Friendship. They are benevolent forces that keep the world safe.
But even the Gods have higher powers that they must answer to. and after millennia the Wardens of Order have returned to Equestria, and after that has happened they have questions for the Princesses.
Power is a dangerous thing. The shadow of Nightmare Moon is long. And power granted can just as easily be taken away.
Chapters (17)
so its done ?
it says complete?
7586919 whoops, clicked wrong option
Oh My Celestia, this gunna be gooooood!
I'm in
Great premise! There's an air of mystery around this. I'm going to be watching this story. Oh, and have a like! Hope to see more soon!
My prediction: The Wardens are going to try to take Luna's power and possibly her immortality because of what she did as Nightmare Moon.
YEEEEEEEEEESSSSSSSSSSSS!!!!!!!!!!!! I Love this story!
Me like, you make moar!!
Two new theories since my older one is probably wrong now: Either this Warden is going to take control over Equestria or he is going to take away the power of both Celestia and Luna and give it to Cadence and Twilight.
I hate being that guy but...
This is a bit messy... probably should be
or
though the first one is stronger, as it has a more direct voice (I think, but ultimately it's up to you).
Beyond that, this is looking good, wondering what Umbra's deal is, coming to take all of them. Looking forward to the next update, whenever you have it ready.
7652060 Schrodingers editing. mistakes are completely unnoticeable until already posted. i swear i read that section like 5 times before i hit publish
Slow down Luna buy the girl a drink before wisking her away on royal orders jeeze
I might want one for how quick shit hit the fan.
I'm getting a Huge 40k Vib here...
This is interesting and well done that is for sure. and I'm impressed a suggestion that kept my interest and actually makes me want to continue reading. but I fear there's simply to little for this story to be more than a taco.
Oh dear it seems that the Wardens are trolls... How, unfortunate.
Great stuff, though you should probably take another quick look over for the odd bit of punctuation.
Have to say Kibitz leading the mob made me laugh out loud.
Definitely looking forward to what this Warden has planned. With all the Princesses apparently in the firing line this could turn bad quick.
Celestia is in big trouble.
7742304 Why did you make a blank comment?
Will Cadence be badass in this story?
7806090 Maybe, though opportunities for bad-ass-ness are somewhat limited in the face of a being like Umbra
So what Umbra is getting at is that Celestia is the root of everyone's problems?
7828426 he was a lot of reasons to dislike her
some rather personal
never said he wasn't biased
um not sure what word you wanted to use there
if you want i can preread the chapters for you
7828458 thanks and thanks but i already have a pre-reader, guess we just both just missed that mistake.
plus she already knows largely what is going to happen in this fic so shes knows the tone im aiming for better
7828485 there were several others in this chapter which i did not point out
7828485 I figured she was doing some serious Spitting and Sputtering but anyway, very interesting how the sun holders have a tendency to drop the ball quite well since Discord said the last time such a "trial" happened the sun holder got dealt with hard for their screw ups and tia is pretty much oblivious to everything that doesn't cut into cake time.
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oh
oh buddy
thats not what discord was getting at
and theres a lot Celestia doesn't know about what went on before
I like this Umbra character. Looking forward to the next chapter.
Gotta say I like the sound of this third mystery changeling. Once again lamp-shading just how much non-Princess Equestria saving goes on really is driving home Umbra's message well.
I don't think I even need to wait for the Celestia chapter.
This has basically turned into another generic accusation fic which complains about a kids show being a kids show and tries to blame everything on a single person namely Celestia in this instance.
7860590 its not like that i promise, everyone gets thier turn under the grill.
And im just poking fun at various inconsistencies via a melodramatic alien
Do the Wardens of Order have in for Pinkie and Discord?
7860678 Discord isnt worth the bother
This is cool
8145518 glad u like
I love this, do you know when you might upload the next chapter? I hope we get answers to all the cryptic things that are currently happening. 🔮🙂
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I will try soon, thing have been slightly busy irl
I should have seen the signs eailer but come on a condescending bash/fix fic?! Really!? Normally I downvote trash like this but I'll let it slide for now because it is at least well written... and at least some of it is intriguing
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well thanks for not down-voting. I didn't really intend it to get quite so bashing but i am awful at pacing lol
It was Moonglow in earlier chapters.
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shhhh