This will be a collection of one-shot stories I have in mind that are dreams had by various members of the My Little Pony: Friendship is Magic cast. Though each dream should make at least some sense for that character, I did try to make them as if they were real dream, not necessary wishes-come-true or nightmares. So, some of them will be more random them others.
Since these are just one-shots and I still have a longer story I'm still working on, updating will be sporatic (even more so then my main story.)
Chapters (4)
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Cool story.
okaaaaaaay.
I'm sorry I can't rate this. I like your story. Very much. But let me tell you a few points.
First of all, critic. Youre writing EVERYTHING in the present. this makes it extremely hard to read and stops me from rating this thumb up.
Second critic, you should use the enter button more often. It makes the whole thing just easier to read.
Thir is: a tip. In the rules there is written, that stories in which the chapters are different storys will be deleted / can be reported.
Nobody I know would report you for this, but you know trolls. If I would be you I would add some sort of overall story into it.
I hope you're working over this in a certain amount of time, because like I said, your story isn't bad.
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First off, thank you for the advice.
I'll admit, I was experimenting with writing in the present tense. I usually write in the past tense, as if telling the story, but I wanted to try to get the feel that the scene was playing out in front of the reader. I figured I would give it shot and see kind of reaction it got.
As for the spacing: maybe it's just me, but I don't see anything wrong with it. The dialogue is properly spaced and paragraphs are separated by content. If I had anymore breaks, i feel it would become disjointed.
I read that rule as 'Do not post multiple chapters of your story as separate stories'. I have seen other such collections on FiMFiction and assumed that it was alright.
813998 okay, I guess then it's al right.
To the thing with experimenting: I know how hard it can be to experiment. But I told you my opinion. I don't think it's easy to read. But that's your opinion.
To the thing with the spacing, I'm not talking about new paragraphs, only new lines.
I'm only referring to one particular place in your story which is a big block without spacing.
To the rule, I only wanted to tell you. Even some Bronys are trolls. I personally like this story, and it would be sad if it would be blocked because of such a thing.
The advice thingie: Everything I said you knew from the beginning. In this case this wasn't advice, it was pointiong out the obvious.
<-- me 
This story was actually based off a dream that I had. I realized it could make good story material. I later realized that I could see that beginning of it working for one of these dreams. I figured, "what better inspiration for a dream story than an actual dream." I adjusted the story enough that it should make sense for a FiM fanfiction, while still holding true to the original concept, with the exception of the 'ending'. A dream like that doesn't really have an ending, it just sort of stops...