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ChaoticHarmony


Hey guys! I write sadfics and sadfic accessories! Oh, and I also do comedy things. Yeah. Feel free to check out my stuff! And I hope you enjoy whichever story of mine you happen to be on! ^^

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Screw Loose had always been...different. When other foals wanted to sleep, she always wanted to play and have fun. Some ponies had always said she could compete with Pinkie Pie in terms of randomness. Receiving your Cutie Mark is seen as fate handing you your new life. But for Screw Loose, cruel fate has taken instead of given.

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Oh God... Poor, Poor Pony... Why... I mean... Just... I'll get a picture...

812240 Really? :rainbowhuh: Darkfic was a success then! :trollestia:

Oh God...

that is all I have to say to this

813516 Well, it DOES have all 3 tags y'know....

813670 "I enjoyed it" :rainbowhuh: sometimes I worry about people.......:facehoof:

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WELL SHIT
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woah... didn't see that coming.

813893 I don't think anyone did :twilightsmile:

Wow, that was pretty *ucking dark... I still liked it though, I hope you'll write more darkfics later, you are... disturbingly good at it! (Like everything else you write, how do you do that?!)

That was very enjoyable. Given that I am insanely fucked up in every sense of the term, I had this look on my face the whole time: :pinkiehappy:

You: :rainbowhuh:
Me: :pinkiecrazy:

:( That was a great dark fic, and I love your writing.

XiF

The last paragraph made me smile. :rainbowlaugh:

Oh... my... Luna. o_o;; :twilightoops:

Good concept and style. I would've liked to see a little more back story, though. An explanation for why those bullies weren't prosecuted after putting her in traction twice would've been nice, for example.

Thumbs-up! This earns three Pinkie Pies. :pinkiesmile::pinkiesmile::pinkiesmile:

That was one of the darkest stories I have ever read, and I read edgar Allen Poe. Screwey reminds a lot of baby doll from batman in which she has a cheery, insane demeanor to a dark and loath full. All in all this was just great.

815365 Thanks :pinkiehappy: This was my first time at attempting something like this :rainbowkiss:

I can't for the life of me, figure out what she is missing in the last paragraph.
It makes me sad.
Maybe she is missing lots of things.
That makes me even sadder.
Maybe she just lost everything?
Now I am sobbing. I hate those cruel ponies.
Why!?

815893 erm... She lost the sane part of herself

And why? Because.

A good premise, good backstory you have there.

I think you could make it ten times better by expanding a bit, the story seems rushed as it is now. Maybe a bit more of a struggle, more thrill. A bit more in-the-moment stuff. I mean, I feel detached at the end, whereas I know it has the potential to be a heartbreaking moment if you expand the story a bit. :twilightsmile:

this is just so horrible. and to think it could actually happen in real life too. its just so absolutely sad. :fluttercry::raritydespair::raritycry::applecry:

817356 That is the message I was trying to send. This DOES happen in real life, and it should be stopped. It should have never happened.

:applecry:
NOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO

It pains me to think that any living creature can be that intentionally cruel... Tis truly painful.

859003 This is the message I was trying to send. It does happen in our world. It really does, and it pains me to think of it too.

*Hugs and turns away to wipe at a man-tear*

:fluttercry::applecry::pinkiesad2::raritydespair::raritycry:
Poor pony that gets hit all the time....

887011 Hmm.... if THIS made you sad... you should read my other fics. I suggest my Trixie one.

I just noticed that this has both the 'Sad' & 'Tragedy' tags, which are mutually exclusive and they ask authors not to label stories with both...though it doesn't seem like they enforce it?
Sad is just a good tear-jerker. You know little Timmy's dog gets hit by a car, or X pony comes down with an incurable disease.
Ex. The Unread Letter

Tragedy is when your (main) character's life is torn apart around them, usually because of their own failings or shortcomings - a true, classic Tragedy will always end with them worse off than when they began.
Ex. TAC: The Fall (Yes, this is a shameless plug...)

From what I have read here, I can honestly say that this is one of the few that I can't decide on which it should have? On one hand it reads like a Tragedy, but in reality, Screw Loose came into this story with nothing and leaves much the same way, though it is implied that she has lost so much more...? It seems like too deep and philosophical a story to simply label 'Sad', but at the same time, I question if 'Sad' and 'Dark' aren't the right combination?

All these feels... Screw Loose is best pony :twilightsmile: You described her perfectly, great job!

1876731 I'm glad you liked one of my older fanfics! Maybe you could go read some of the newer ones eh? :rainbowwild:

Hi there. I hope you don't mind, but I enjoyed this fic so much I have put together a reading of it on YouTube.

2716565 <3 I'll give it a listen here soon

2716663

Just thought I'd let you know that you can now download an .mp3 version of the reading here.:twilightsmile:

Oh my god...

Great story.

2860402 You should listen to Scribber's audio reading of it! It makes it even better! Just scroll down in the comments a bit and you'll see it :rainbowdetermined2:

There should be a tag for screw loose.

Oh.. my.. god.. I feel lIke crying... :fluttercry: I swear, I wanna pull Screw Loose in my arms, even though her last bits of sanity went away. In the mean time, I WILL RIP THOSE GUARD'S HEADS OFF! :flutterrage:



..If I could.

after hearing scribbler's reading of this, i felt really horrible for screwy. luckily, the show proves she gets better.

wait how is it proven in the show.

Thank you,
For bringing to my eyes a pony who truly deserves ( and is in desperate need of ) some heaping helpings of love.
:heart::heart:
:heart:

5448401 There's evidence in Just For Sidekicks that Screw Loose is getting better. In the background, around the sixteen-minute mark I think it is, she can be seen hugging a nurse and looking very happy out and about in Ponyville, although Winona's barking is mistaken as hers and she gets glared at.

Poor Screw Loose.

I almost regret stumbling across beautiful artwork dedicated to this pony, because it made me binge-read dark stuff like this.

Excellently written and thoroughly enjoyable dark stuff, but still.

Fuck this shit was fucking disturbing shit!:pinkiecrazy::pinkiecrazy:
You sir, have a really dark imagination. Also you should go to the psychologist, CUZ NIGGA YO MIND'S FUCKD UP BROO!

Poor Screw Loose. I really enjoyed reading this

Wow. Unspeakable is right. I've heard that solitary confinement is considered a punishment because it deprives the person... or pony in this case of social interaction. I'll bet that when the straightjacket is off, Screw Loose goes berserk and kills her tormentors... somehow. I really was hoping for her to go berserk on the guards and that Ponyville would do a better job with ponies inflicted with mental illness, especially insanity. Now that I think about it, why isn't Pinkie Pie in THIS situation!?

Is she so crazy that she hurts everypony around her, or is she just unable to take care of herself?

7637811

why isn't Pinkie Pie in THIS situation!?

Because she isn't harmful to either herself or others.

6474019
Did it occur to you that the intention was to be dark and depressing?

5264836

luckily, the show proves she gets better.

Really?

812240
It is sad.

815043
Huh?

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