• Member Since 23rd Nov, 2015
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moonlit scribe

I'm baaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaack! (and I wish the Twijack fandom wasn't dead)


This story is a sequel to Goodbye...

I know my daughter is coming. I know it's only a matter of time before she says that one word that I have been waiting for. Then, it will all be over. No more trying. Just seeing him again. I can barely wait.

Chapters (1)
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Comments ( 7 )

7648529 I'm planning a sequel in which I will show what the message said.

7648522 That was what I was hoping!

Grammar seemed to lack during the story, especially when there were speech. However, it is quite interesting but I believe you can develop the character's emotion even further so we have a better understanding of their motives.

I like the convoy of the story but needs editing and quite a bit of it.

7679061 Middle school grammar lessons aren't the best possible source for this kinda stuff:twilightsheepish: I'll work on it, but I don't really see where I've gone wrong... sorry... But I am planning a sequel where I will develop the characters a little more.

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