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Harms Way


Admirer of Sunset Shimmer and Adagio Dazzle

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Welcome back to the second person scene!

I'm sorry to say that I'm not into facesitting or ass worship, but I still gave it all a read. It's the least I can do after you've read all of mine! :twilightsmile: I wasn't sure where you were going with "The Fun Has Been Doubled", but it was a pleasant surprise!

I do have a slight criticism, though. It's probably just my own tastes, but I don't understand the whole "It's been a while, but I've had feelings for you for years." and "Since we both just found out we love each other, let's make a baby!" doesn't make sense to me.

Romantic relationships just don't happen suddenly. Both people need time to get to know each other better before making any serious decisions. Again, it might just be my tastes.

I enjoyed reading this, though. Can't wait to see who's next on the "chopping block".

Can you make the facesitting longer please

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Thank you. I know that not everyone was going to be into the things that are in this story. I just wanted to try something a bit different for this one since it was so long since the last entry in this series was put out. And out of all the ideas I had, this was the best one.

Regardless. Thank you for reading it and for the fave as well. :twilightsmile:

Another Second Person story with our old pal Anon, huh? I'm currently working on a story with that concept myself, and I'm still waiting for it to be approved. Though, it isn't gonna have any Mature rated content.

Dude. I gotta say... It's good to have you back. I've missed your writing style so long. And to find an erotic story with not one, but two of the sexiest women in EQG, it's great. You are a genius when it comes to Anon's mature stories. Please make more.

Well, well, well. Long time no see.

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Heh. Sorry if I came on a bit strong there.

Holy fuck, I’ve seldom hit the read-it-later button that fast. Can’t wait to give this a read after I’m done moving!

Now I defiantly have to say. Since I’m sorta not into this kind of stuff anymore, I just had to give this a read for an old friend. This was great man. Glad to see you’ve gotten back on your feet three years after your last story. It’s great to see you back, old friend. :)

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Thanks man. I'm glad you enjoyed it. :twilightsmile:

Glad to see your back.

I was waiting for your last message that I sent you, but its good to see you back. :raritywink:

Yes, a harms way story!

Great work! Shame Luna didn't get it in the butt too (missed opportunity for a "full moon" joke), but I enjoyed the story regardless. Maybe an eventually orgy between Anon and all 7 of the main girls could be a possibility?

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You never know. Another opportunity could present itself in the future for that. :raritywink:

Good to see you posting again man. This seems very promising so far :pinkiehappy:

Another great story! Glad to have you back man!

I'm a bit torn. On the one hand, some if my favorite stories involve strippers.

On the other, I despise the use of Anon! Unless it's like how Holy does it

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Understandable. Thank you for being honest.

Hot DAMN!!! Praise de Moonbutt and Lovebutt indeed

That was hot, though I was hoping he'd pound her the p***y. Maybe be on a pill or something, or have it be a safe day for her

XD Bow's reaction at the end.

It's good to have you back, old friend. Still as amazing a writer as ever

Ok, I have had time to digest this story. It's good, but a few things are holding it back.

Besides Anon.

The strip club aspect feels under utilized. Dance scenes could have been extended a bit more, perhaps with the main character slipping Luna some cash before receiving a reward. The strip clubs I frequent usually have their dancers exchange gropes or smacks on the ass for ones or fives with bigger things for tens and twenties. Also a lack of a sex scene in the club, renting a VIP room with a bad camera for example.

The threesome scene also felt short. Like more could have been done in this situation before a one on one with Luna.

Other than that good job

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