The Blot: an unearthly darkness, hostile towards all forms of life. This deadly enigma has swallowed up Ponyville, turning the once-thriving town into a pitch-black wasteland. In this new world, food and water are scarce, and the most precious resource of all is light.
Now, two survivors, Tinker Toy and his son, Gearhead, huddle in their home-turned shelter, hiding from the darkness. Without any contact with the rest of the world, father and son must work together to survive the waking nightmare they once called home.
Special thanks my pre-readers Rye Bread, jeray2000, sevenofeleven, and Mcstuffins!
Chapters (2)
sorry, i don't read horror fics if they are not mature
I like these locked off from the world ideas. It provides a fun piece of storytelling. What changes in order to survive? Kinda reminds me of Metro in some respects.
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Then why did you come here?
WOW!
This story really made me, an average reader whom only just learned of it today, feel both excited and satisfied.
This sure makes me, the average reader, want to give this Flintlock guy (whom I have never spoken to) all of my money.
7512360 Your clearly unbiased opinion excites me in turn, as it satisfies my need for unsolicited input! Alas, I have no money, so accept this hearty handshake instead
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ACCEPTED.
I thought Mickey Mouse took care of that thing. But in all seriousness, this looks quite interesting.
Hmmm.ok ill bite. Tracking.
Well, you have my attention.
It's nice to see an interesting creepy pasta that doesn't utterly disregard the character of the established ponies.
Hell, I may even ask you if I may use your monster for a story I plan on writing.
It has a good villain/force/whatever the Blot is. Often, I don't read OC fics, but this one is interesting.
A couple grammatical things I could point out:
Why does it suddenly switch to bold at the end?
If I'm not mistaken, these are ponies. You use 'hand' a couple times where it should be 'hoof'.
This is definitely left on a cliffhanger. In the next chapter, the thing that scared them should be brought back, at least to figure out what it is. If it is just put in and then forgotten about, it lacks meaning.
I thought this was a pretty good fic with some great characters. Keep it up!
7512314 good point
Interesting. I await your next update.
Looking forward to the next chapter
Reminds me of that movie The Mist... just with less mist.
I like it; a lot. The characters are organic, there's a fun bit of 'light through the dark' dialogue, and the dreadful state of things is really pushed through without you straight up saying 'things are dim and black and scary'.
I look forward to more.
Was worried this just be a one shot.
Though I take it your taking inspiration from the vanishing on 34th street?
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Never heard of it. Actually, I took inspiration from a number of sources, including: The Road, Metro: 2033, and Alan Wake.
Wicked awesome!!!!! I'm so gonna be stuck on this!!!!!!
Ok, wicked story!!!!! If you want I'll help you with the pony-based vocabulary? I usually catch that kind of thing.
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Okay, sure.
7679037 Oh sweet!, (Truthfully I had no idea if you would answer xD)
Really interesting. I'm glad I tracked this story.
Being trapped inside that house will eventually drive Tinker and son mad. Though I must say that Gearhead is the kind of pony I'd like to be trapped with. His naive optimism and innocence would help me weather the darkness.
Good story. Please keep up the good work!
I uploaded a reading of this just over two years ago now (https://youtu.be/-j0IRGSxFWo), and I must say I’m mildly disappointed neither were ever completed. I was so invested in these characters. Working on my first ever reading with one of the better writers on the site as the subject was a fun thought as well. The turn out was depressing. Weeks of work and some mild advertising for 12 measly views after the first month, was so incredibly disheartening. The fact that Flint didn’t seem very interested in completing his fic didn’t help.
Alas, I look back proudly at this. It was a ton of fun to make. I just wonder if I could’ve gone anywhere with this had I retained my motivation...