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Dark Chocolate


Converting daydreams into stories helps me pretend to be human.

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Celestia and Luna retell the story of Nightmare Moon to a class of foals. Things don't go well.

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Cute story, but the formatting is horrible and really needs some clean up to make it easier to follow. There also seems to be some commentary after Cheerilee's last bit of dialog that doesn't seem like it is supposed to be there.

7506637 Google docs I swear....

That was pretty hilarious.

XD I'M CRYING

Heh, that was pretty funny. Definitely worth reading. Thanks for the laughs. =)

Celestia hits Luna with her hoof, and the two sisters start a vicious hoof slapping contest, tucking their heads back as they take blind swings at each other while yelling.

This right here made my night. :rainbowlaugh:

I like the catfight.

*laughing, so hard*

“All I’m saying dearest sister, is when foals make you mad, they suddenly go missing. Also how did Starlight Glimmer make her town, hm? A strange coincidence…”

Well... She's not wrong...:trixieshiftright:

:rainbowlaugh:
That was beautifully written.
Now excuse me as I go look for my sides.

maybe a bit more background at the beginning but otherwise a great funny short

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In the future, it's often best for formatting if you paste into a plain text editor (ie, notepad on windows) first, and then into fimfiction. This will remove extra latent formatting from google docs and only give you carriage returns (enters) tabs, and spaces, which is usually what you want, since centering and italics are all done through [] bbcode tags. Just make sure to add all your tags and extra line breaks as you go along... it can be a bit of a nuisance to put extra line breaks or whatever back through after.

Funny little story. Nice job.

I nearly fell of my chair in laughter at this. I like this very much. Thank you.

This was fantastic. :rainbowlaugh::pinkiesmile:

:rainbowlaugh: laughing the whole story

LOL That was awesome!! 10/10

cute story with a nice sibling Luna and Celestia that I crave. Gotta say though you chose the perfect picture for this story.

I am at school a the moment and I am trying to not laugh out loud in the middle of class

Welp, alright then.

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It is from two sisters play! :twilightsheepish: Don't remember which one though...

Love these mares!:rainbowlaugh:

7512091 I know, i believe it's from the portal 2 video.

This sums up 99% of my interactions with my sister so perfectly it scares me.

There's Luna, and there's Celestia. In an arguement, I could end up being one, or the other, with no in-between.

This sounds like me and my sister every time we have to be in the same room together.

When do the historical aliens come into play?

That story had me laughing from start to finish.Kudos.:rainbowlaugh:

Brava. A most splendid piece of reading, although I would love a little bit at the end of Luna and Celestia still fighting in the streets of Ponyville, and Twilight happens upon them while reading a book, shrugs and rolls her eyes, before wandering off with her book, only to be followed a minute later by Spike pulling a wagon-load of books and scrolls, with Twilight yelling back at him to hurry up. Of course, that's just me XD
Otherwise, loved it, was hilarious to read :pinkiecrazy:

That was so immature from Luna's part, going after Celestia well endowed flank.

🤗Whelp, those foals are never going to be the same after that.

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