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A Little Midnight Chat - Nordryd



"Is it wrong to keep secrets from a friend if you know you'd lose them for it?"

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A Little Midnight Chat

“…let everybody down.”

Sudden empathy filled the air, and Sunset and Twilight just stared for a moment.

Twilight gave a small, yet sincere smile, and Sunset couldn’t help but return it.

She let out a mighty yawn. “Better get some sleep. Good luck with the counter spell. Not that you’ll need it. This must be nothing compared to the stuff you’re expected to deal with as a Princess in Equestria.”

“Sunset Shimmer?” Twilight said. “C-Can I talk to you about something?”

“Yeah, sure,” Sunset said. She walked back over to the counter and took a seat next to Twilight. “What’s up?”

Twilight started playing with her pen. “Is it wrong to keep secrets from a friend if you know you’d lose them for it?”

Sunset looked at Twilight quizzically. “Um… a secret that big?”

“I don’t know,” Twilight said. “Something that could change everything about your friendship. Something that might put it in jeopardy.”

“Twilight, what are you talking about?” Sunset asked. “Did something happen?”

Twilight bit her lip.

“Um… nothing happened per se,” Twilight said. “It’s just… is it wrong?”

Sunset scooted closer. “Well, it would depend on what the secret is.”

Twilight looked down at the table, playing with her hands.

“I’m sorry if I’m not being helpful,” Twilight said. “I just can’t get this off my mind, and I need to write this counter spell. I just feel guilty, that’s all.”

“Why?” Sunset said. “Is there something you’re not telling us?”

Twilight sighed. “Maybe…”

Sunset smiled and put her arm around Twilight.

“Twilight, I promise, no matter what you tell us, or tell me, we won’t judge you for it,” Sunset said. “That’s what friends are for.”

Twilight’s eyes seemed to widen upon Sunset wrapping her arm around her. The faint glow of joy seemed to dim almost immediately, though.

“But is keeping secrets from your friends bad?” Twilight asked. “I mean, if it could ruin what you have, should you keep quiet and protect your relationship? Or is it bad to build everything on a lie?”

Sunset gave Twilight a squeeze. “Twilight, again, it depends on what you’re hiding. Some secrets aren’t as bad as you may think.”

Twilight sighed. “But at the same time… it could be…”

“Why are you asking me these questions?” Sunset asked, almost giggling. “Didn’t you use friendship to stop me? You’re the Princess of Friendship, aren’t you?”

“Even I still have a lot to learn,” Twilight said. “Especially on such an abstract concept.”

“Are you afraid of failing us?” Sunset asked. “Can you not write a counter spell?”

“No, it’s not that,” Twilight said. “Well… I guess it kind of is. I just feel like everyone’s counting on me.”

“Well… not to agree with you, but…” Sunset started to say, immediately making Twilight whimper. “Sorry…”

“It’s okay,” Twilight said. “I agreed to do this.”

Silence filled the air for a moment. Twilight looked down at the table at her scribbles while Sunset kept her arm around her. Sunset studied the scribbles a little, and it looked like nonsense.

But then she noticed something. Something that was much more apparent than anything else. It was a crude drawing, but it carried a priceless amount of sentiment.

A little heart with a T and an S in it.

Sunset smirked as she pulled Twilight closer.

“What’s on your mind, Twilight?” Sunset asked. “Why did you ask me about secrets?”

“Huh?” Twilight said. “Oh… um…”

“Is there something you’re not telling me?” Sunset said.

Twilight didn’t say anything. She felt tense.

“I’m your friend, Twilight,” Sunset said, giving her a squeeze. “You can tell me anything.”

Twilight bit her lip. “Sunset, do you hate me at all for what I did to you?”

Sunset’s eyes went wide. “What? Of course not, Twilight. How could I ever hate the one who changed my life?”

“I just feel like I tore down everything you had,” Twilight said.

“Twilight, I realized something that day,” Sunset said. “I had everything, but I had nothing. I ruled the school, and had no real friends. I was totally alone before you came along. You showed me another way. I could never hate you for that.”

Twilight sighed, and didn’t respond. She still looked quite tense.

“Twilight, there’s something you’re not telling me,” Sunset said. “And I’m not leaving until you tell me what it is.”

Twilight looked at Sunset, her eyes wide. Sunset just gave her a smirk.

“What are you talking about?” Twilight said.

“Why else would you ask me about secrets, Twilight?” Sunset said.

Twilight just stammered. “I… I…”

“C’mon, Twilight,” Sunset said. “It can’t be that bad, can it?”

“I mean…” Twilight stuttered. “It’s just that… I…”

Sunset lifted her hand to stroke Twilight’s cheek, silencing her. Her pupils visibly dilated, making Sunset smile.

“Tell me, Twilight,” Sunset said. “I won’t think any less of you.”

Twilight stayed absolutely frozen for a moment, until Sunset ran her fingers through her hair. Twilight uttered a small moan, and Sunset returned to caressing her cheek. Slowly, a smile appeared on Twilight’s face as she leaned in to Sunset’s hand.

“Sunset… I don’t know if I…” Twilight stopped, biting her lip as Sunset continued to caress her. “Mmm… that feels nice…”

Sunset giggled. “It’s okay, Twilight. I promise.”

Twilight’s eyes appeared to twinkle as she smiled at Sunset.

“Well, what if I told you I had a… crush?” Twilight said.

“Oh?” Sunset asked. She used her other hand and curled it around Twilight’s thigh. “On whom?”

Twilight looked down, and stared at Sunset’s hand. Her face turned visibly redder as she looked back up.

“Someone whom… I really admire,” Twilight said. “Someone strong… nice… brave…”

“Really?” Sunset said, squeezing Twilight’s leg.

“Somepony really important to me…” Twilight said.

“Somepony?” Sunset said.

Twilight gasped. “Oh… did I say that?”

Sunset rose an eyebrow at Twilight. Twilight started to tense up again.

“Sunset… I… I’m sorry,” Twilight said. “I understand if you feel weird now, or if you never want to talk to me again. I just…”

Sunset leaned forward, and silenced Twilight with a kiss on the lips.

It wasn’t a long kiss at all. Just a peck. But it was enough to leave Twilight completely stunned, her cheeks bright red and her eyes wide.

Sunset giggled. Her stunned expression was just too cute.

“I don’t feel weird at all. In fact…” Sunset said, getting closer to her ear. “…I think I like you even more now that I know.”

Sunset backed up and saw that Twilight’s face had grown even redder, as if that was possible.

Sunset let out another mighty yawn.

“Alright, I better get some sleep,” Sunset said. “Good luck with the counter spell. We believe in you, Twilight. If there’s anyone—anypony—who can do this… it’s you. I know you’ll make us proud.”

Twilight’s face was still bright red. She began playing with her hair as she smiled at Sunset.

“Th-Thanks…” Twilight said.

“Good night,” Sunset said, walking to the stairwell.

“Sunset Shimmer?” Twilight called out.

“Yeah?” Sunset said.

Twilight’s eyes seemed to twinkle.

“I love you,” Twilight said.

Sunset felt her heart flutter. She couldn’t resist Twilight’s adorable face. She walked back up to her, and gave her a kiss on the cheek.

“I love you too,” Sunset said.

Twilight appeared to be tearing up, and gave Sunset a kiss on the cheek before she could completely pull away.

Sunset gave Twilight one more smile before beginning her trek back upstairs. She felt around her cheek where Twilight had kissed her as she walked away. It felt warm from her sweet lips.

As she waked up the stairs, she heard a quiet yet excited squeal from Twilight. And Sunset couldn’t help but squeal a bit herself.

Author's Note:

Addendum, 10:34 PM, 8-23-16: How the hell did this story explode like it has?! It's becoming my second highest rated story, and it's only been a single day! How?! Thank you so much for all your support, everyone. This has seriously made my whole day. You all have kept me going though a really tiring day. Thank you thank you thank you!!! :raritystarry: :yay: :raritystarry:


This was uploaded completely raw and unedited, and written in two hours. Forgive me if there are errors or things that suck. :twilightblush:

I was really itching to write some fluff, so why not do it with one of my favorite ships? :raritystarry:

This setting has been used time and time again, I know. Perhaps even the title has been used already. I don't really care. I wanted to write something about this scene, because SunLight is one of my favorite ships.

Comments ( 68 )

I love all of your unedited, random fluff stories. They're always so good :pinkiehappy:

Great job! You never fail to do one. :twilightsmile:

That was very sweet and cute. Pretty good stuff for just writing off the cuff! Good job!

That was so adorably beautiful! Great job! Man your so good at writing stories like these :twilightsmile:

*staring in stunned silence*
...
*collapses and dies of adorabetes*
:twilightblush:

Aww. It's like drowning in cotton candy.

This was sweet, and pretty cute. I'm not even aboard this ship, and I liked it. Well done.

Yay, I always love the Sunlight pairing. :yay: Not to mention this is probably my favorite scene of the movie. Even more impressive that you wrote this so quickly.

Aaaaand, I'm dead with cuteness.:pinkiesmile:

this is how it should have happened lol:twilightsmile:

:rainbowkiss: Sooooo cute! I wanna read more SunLight stories

Im usually not into this kind of stuff, but it is really cute. So I like it. Good work.:twilightsmile:

And I missed this how...?:pinkiegasp:

Just what I needed after a rather long day.
These two are so cute together! :heart:

SUNLIGHT FOR THE WIN!

The PanzerBrony approves this sweet, SunLight ship story!!

Featured because it's cute of course. :-) Congratulations!

The "I love you" was too soon for me, but otherwise it was cute.

Oof. Right to the heart.

Cute, but very basic - not really a lot of story here. Not to say it's bad, but it reads like a scene taken out of context from a longer story.

7506431 I wrote this completely on a whim, so yeah. Sorry :twilightblush:

:ajbemused: And I am now diabetic.

:pinkiesmile: Worth it.

Gotta have a daily dose of SunLight, but this...

This will keep me going for the rest of the week.

7506440

Understood. I personally never do that - I don't like going for half measures, so I try to make sure every story I write is special. If course, given how slowly I write, I basically have to make all of them count. :twilightsheepish:

Eh, I guess this is okay as far as romantic fluff goes. The buildup went on so long that I suspected there would be a 'twist' ending of Twilight actually being interested in someone else. I mean, c'mon, she drew a heart with their initials in it? That's so leading, I saw a twist coming a mile off ... then that didn't happen.

7506828 So is it a twist in the sense that it wasn't a twist? :rainbowwild:

Probably not

That was such a sweet story. I wish this would've happened in the movie.

And i`ve been hit with adorkable, fluffy feels. Again. For the umpteenth time. Darn this site and it`s pony fluff!
Random mustache! :moustache:

Once. Just once. I want to see one of these shipfics play out exactly like this, until the person who is being crushed on decides to go in for the kiss from the stammering crusher.

Just to get pure shock and "What the actual hell" from the crusher, who it turns out is NOT working up the courage to confess a crush to her best friend, and the protagonist (and therefore audience) was completely misreading the situation.

7506939 so... did you not like the story then?

7506942
No, it was a good story, and I liked your take on it.
I was just invested enough to have the idea for the story I pitched in my rant :derpytongue2:

7506963 You know that sounds like it'd be an awesome story. I would totally read it if someone did it. Bonus points if they did it well.

Oh ya kinda forgot to say something about this peice hu? It was interesting and cute. But then again isn't the goal of this to be a little peice of fluff?
Good story.

-BFBL

Cute, fluffy story that gave me diabetus. :pinkiehappy:
Fluffy SunLight is always good.3

Congratulations on having a spot in the [Featured] Box! :twilightsmile:

This is the first non-comedy SunLight fic I've ever favorited.

Not that I don't like the pairing, but usually the stories become immediately sexualized, and I don't really care for that. Stories like this one are the sort of shipping stories I like to see on the front page - no attention grabbing titles or raunchy hooks, just a nice story that was well written. Thank you for writing something genuinely good, even if it only took a few hours.

I think the most interesting part of SunLight fics is that either character seems equally likely to be the initiator of the relationship. Twilight being Sunset's liberator and an alicorn can put her in a lofty position relative to Sunset, but Sunset being both older and more experienced with life in the human world can make her seem unattainable in Twilight's eyes. That sort of potential reverence from both sides makes any story of the beginning of a relationship an interesting one. I don't really see that angle with other pairings. It is a shame so many authors resort to sexualization when there are so many fascinating ways the relationship could be initiated.

7507681 I'm not saying I won't write clop in the future, but I don't like how every fic has to be sexualized now, I get it. Actually, the only sex-tag story I have (Amorous) was the first story of mine to get in the popular widget. Funny how that works out, huh? The power of boners...

I'm glad I could deliver in a different way. I can't believe this story is doing so well :raritystarry:

7508090

How the hell did this story explode like it has?! It's becoming my second highest rated story, and it'd only been a single day! How?!

You made a story starring a popular ship with no proper buildup and it is solely meant to be a light, fluffy piece.

Gee, I wonder why?

7508148 Do you have a problem with every story I write? :fluttershysad:

7508090

Okay, time to explain.

The Feature Box is solely automated, with certain stories getting picked out depending on a number of factors decided by algorithms. IIRC, it used to be human-operated, but when you have a few thousand users all clamouring for their fics to be placed into a special spot with so few vacancies, you're bound to upset someone.

Anyway, a few important factors include the amount of viewers reading it at any given moment, how early it was released and the identity of the person who wrote the featured story.

Let's concentrate on the number of viewers thing. More readers generate more heat, which in turn will help propel it into either the Popular Shelf or the Featured Box. A good way to attract viewers to your story is to make it a comedy story, a sad fic that make idiots write "Da Feels" in the comments, a story in starring a self-insert character which readers live vicariously through 2nd-perspective person scores with the MLP girl of their dreams, or just straight-clop starring popular characters. Remember that time where the Featured Box was filled with nothing but Spike-centred stories after "Gauntlet of Fire?"

Thought so. Nowhere is it stated that quality has to be a determining factor. Ad Populum.

Another factor is the identity of the person who wrote it. IIRC, you wrote "Sitting in a Tree," another story in a series of bland, flat and uninteresting self-inserts fucking their waifus' brains out which followed the same formula as Lightning Sword's Steam Collection and Celestia knows how many stories before this.

That story was featured, which in turns leads more users to pay attention to you and whatever you churn out of your ass. In fact, having a featured fic raises your chances of your future stories ending up in the box.

A good example is Monochromatic's Bodyguard AU series, where almost each and every one of her story in that series ended up in the Featured Box. The main difference is that one author writes decent stories filled to the brim with fluff and the other is you. There's also Summer Dancer's stories, where almost each and every one of her stories has ended up in the Featured Box since I don't know when.

tl;dr: It depends on popularity and what the audience wants, and it is not generally indicative of quality.

Do you have a problem with every story I write?

Your first story is about a Unicorn OC who studied under Princess Celestia, who somehow has enough magical power to rival that of Twilight, goes to Ponyville and wins over Fluttershy. It was then remixed, dragged through shit and then handed to us in the form of Loveliest of Trees, where it was the same story all over again.

Also, Amorous. Disgusting.

A mutual friend of ours is the only reason I put up with you.

7508258 I see. Well... I'm sorry. I don't mean to upset you. :fluttershysad:

The fluff series aren't clopfics. I wrote them purely for fluff. And the reason they seem a lot like LightningSword's stories are because I was inspired by him. I mean, I guess there are implications after the fact, but I don't explicitly say the protagonist fuck the girl's brains out.

Sorry the one clopfic I do have disgusts you :ajsleepy:. Can I ask why? I didn't mean it to be disgusting. I just wanted my OC and Fluttershy to explore their relationship. You might hate them, but the people who like the story and pairing wouldn't agree.

For the record, I've always known the featured box and popular widgets are totally automated.

Sorry that you "have to put up with me" because of a mutual friend. But you don't have to read my stories, y'know? If they upset you that much, why don't you just ignore them? Do you feel obligated to read my stories because of this "mutual friend"?

I don't aim to be the best, I just aim to be decent.

This was a very interesting take, imo. I thought it was going to just be some of the same old, simply executed well.

Instead, we got a version of that night that was both adult, and juvenile. Sunset was mature where it counted, but they both acted like adorable teenagers where it was cute.

I think the only way it could have been better is if you'd circumvented the "shutting up with a kiss," I know it's supposed to be romantic, but it's actually kinda weird and it's just done to death.

But, other than that one cliche nitpick (and it's very much a nitpick based in personal preference), excellent job!

7508346 I'm a sucker for the shut up kiss :rainbowkiss:

7508258
Violet! Please don't be mean like that. That was just very uncalled for. Nordryd's stories are fine just the way they are, and a little romantic fluff is a good thing. Being featured is a big deal, at least it was to me the first time, and you shouldn't try to make him feel bad for his accomplishment. I'm sorry if I'm nagging you, but that was just really harsh. Are you like that on all his stories? :fluttershysad:

7508258

I'm jealous that you got to the feature box

You could have really saved your fingers, and everyone's time, by just summing up the thing that got your knickers in a twist, without the forced attempt at masking your vitriol with attempted eloquence.

Neat little story! I don't usually go for little fluff pieces like this, but it put a smile on my face. Good job, author :pinkiesmile:

7508258

Just, seriously man. This was so uncalled for.

The setting of this story is a major problem for me. It expects the reader to buy that Sunset and Twilight basically confess their love for each other in this scene... and then spontaneously forget about it for the remainder of the movie with no indications of it ever happening. Sorry, just too implausible.

And beyond that, there's not really anything to the story. Two characters turn out to have a thing for each other, the end. It's so generic that if you were to change the setting, you could swap out Sunset and Twilight and replace them with practically any two characters who know each other with only a few mild revisions.

7509669 True, that is true. Sorry it didn't satisfy you. :ajsleepy:

If I had it my way, Sunset and Twilight would've kissed at the end of Rainbow Rocks before she walked through the portal, and it causes them to pony up.

And when Twilight calls "Sunset Shimmer... we need you!" Sunset does it not for the girls, but for Twilight.

If I had my way at least.

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