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The Princess's Gift - Monochromatic



When a terrible misunderstanding leaves Princess Rarity with the terrifying prospect of missing her bodyguard's birthday party, she decides that nothing or nopony will stop her from celebrating Twilight's special day.

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Part II

That’s your commoner attire?”

Standing inside the empty West Wing, Rarity chose to ignore the pegasus’s comment. Personally, she found nothing wrong with Twilight’s beautiful black silk cloak, a present Rarity had gotten her during their last trip to Saddle Arabia. The garment was simply divine, boasting several hoof-stitched white patterns depicting several constellations, and the bottom of the cloak itself was decorated with several small sapphires.

Twilight, ungrateful as she was, never used it since she claimed it was too bulky and would be a hindrance if she ever needed to ‘act fast’. Hah! Rarity knew it was an excuse, however, and that she just didn’t even remotely care about her appearance. No matter, sooner or later, she would get through to her beautiful yet thick skull.

“It is perfectly acceptable!”

Rainbow Dash sighed. “Okay, whatever. We’ll figure it out later.” She looked past Rarity and waved her hoof at somepony. “Hey, move it, guys! Wing Free’s going to be back any second now!”

Rarity looked around and was pleased to see Fluttershy and Applejack finally arriving. At Applejack’s suggestion, Fluttershy too had donned a cloak, since it was common knowledge that the Princess and the Countess were often together.

“Are you all set, darling?” Rarity asked when the group reunited, and smiled when Fluttershy nodded.

“Oh, yes. I have her present in my bag.”

Rarity, too, had her present in the saddlebag slung around her back. Of course, it really wasn’t the present she’d prepared, but she’d brought along the letter of request she’d sent to the Mareford Archives. Her Twilight was a mare of facts and evidence, and what more evidence of Rarity’s real intentions was there than the request letter postmarked almost an entire week before their fight.

And! Just to prove how wonderful she was, after the misunderstanding was cleared up, Rarity would reveal that she could easily organize another visit to the Archives in the upcoming weeks.

“Excellent! And Sweetie Belle is already in my room, so I believe we’re all clear,” Rarity said.

The guards had been explicitly told by Fluttershy and Applejack that Rarity felt simply dreadful, and to not disturb her under any circumstance whatsoever. On top of that, Sweetie Belle had been instructed to hide under the covers and cough every so often so as not to arouse suspicion. Then again, her baby sister’s voice sounded nothing like hers, but alas, not every plan could be perfect.

At this, Rainbow Dash trotted behind an empty suit of armor, and after brushing her hoof over the wall for a minute, the walls shook and a secret passage revealed itself. One day, Rarity thought, she'd have to get Twilight to show her all these secret places.

The four mares stepped into the dark tunnel and once the entrance closed off again, they went on their way with nothing but two candelabras and one hornlight to light their path. It was a long trek, much longer than Rarity expected, and by the time they stepped into a back alley on the east side of the castle, nighttime was nearly there.

Rarity and Fluttershy donned the hoods of their cloaks, and followed Rainbow and Applejack out of the castle and out through an entrance reserved for castle staff. Truth be told, Rarity felt excited by the entire affair. She almost never travelled to the surrounding city, and the little she'd seen of it was from inside her carriage when she had to leave the castle for some reason.

The east side of the city was the shopping district, Applejack said. While the Royal Family had always eaten food grown solely for them, the residents of the castle city would buy their food from the market, where farmers from the outskirts of the city would bring their fresh merchandise every morning at six.

"Ain't nothing tastier," Applejack assured, as they stepped into the Food Market. "Just as mouth-lickin' delicious as anythin' from the castle."

While Rarity didn't particularly find herself attracted to the food, she found herself intrigued by, well, the ponies. The market was bustling with them despite the late hour, and it was certainly unlike any conception she had of commoners.

As they trotted by, she watched them laughing about daily occurrences, haggling for better prices, proudly bellowing the quality of their wares, and all in all going about their daily lives and being content doing so.

All her life, the ponies from below had been represented to her as impoverished miserable souls who needed guidance from the wiser royals, and yet… and yet with shame she realized how readily she'd believed this misconception. The worst part was that she found herself wanting to discuss this with Twilight, but…

"Oh, look!" Fluttershy whispered as they reached a small plaza, and so did the four mares come to a halt.

Three fillies in ragged dresses paraded themselves along the plaza, and it was clear they were trying to imitate the nobles Rarity frequented in her daily life. More than that, however, a smile forced its way onto her lips when she noticed their leader wearing a vastly less expensive yet still endearing version of her own crown.

"Ohh, Princess Rarity!" one of the fillies swooned. "You're the most beautifulest princess in all of the land!"

Rarity, the real one, glowed with as much delight as the fake one.

"Pft, that's kinda stretching it a little bit," Rainbow Dash whispered, playfully grinning when Rarity threw a glare her way.

Once she'd demonstrated her displeasure, Rarity turned her sight back to her adorable doppelganger, and to her horror, three caped colts rushed over, brandishing wooden swords and frightening the poor fillies.

"Princess Rarity!" one of them yelled, the apparent fearsome leader, "We finally found you!"

The little princess stepped back with an admittedly overly-exaggerated gasp. "Oh no! What do you want with me?! I'm too pretty to die!" she claimed, and honestly Rarity was more and more delighted by her every second. What a tremendous actor!

"Give us your crown!" one of the colts demanded, brandishing his sword. "And you three are coming with us, too!"

"Or else!" the third added, but just as he stepped towards the cowering fillies, a fourth filly jumped into action, standing between the fillies and the colts.

"I won't let you hurt Princess Rarity!" she exclaimed, her makeshift armor coming apart with her hasty movements. "I have my sword and my ma—oh, uhm, wait." She paused for a second, quickly adjusting the paper horn on her head before brandishing her own wooden sword and glaring at the colts. "My sword and my magic!"

Rarity immediately gasped. "Fluttershy! Fluttershy, look, look!" she said in hushed excitement, gesturing with her hoof. "It's Twilight! Look at her! Oh goodness, she's so cute!"

"Twilight! Please be careful!" the little princess exclaimed, and this seemed to have invigorated the little bodyguard, who nodded and strengthened her defensive stance in reply.

Rarity was absolutely riveted by the display, completely delighted by the astounding accuracy of it all. She watched with barely contained excitement as the little filly dueled with the colts, and when 'Twilight' gently poked one of them with the tip of her sword, the three bandits fell to the floor, defeated!

"Oh, Twilight!" the little princess exclaimed, rushing over to hug the little bodyguard. "I was so scared! I didn't want them to take me away!"

Immediately did the filly drop her sword and return the hug. "I won't let them hurt you! I'm invisible!" she proclaimed. "I mean, invincible!"

Just looking at the little fillies hugging made Rarity long for the real Twilight all the more. She wanted to hug her bodyguard too!

"Next time, I wanna be Twilight," one of the colts said, getting up from the floor and retrieving his sword.

'Twilight' giggled in reply. "You can't be Twilight, silly. She's a girl."

"Yes, I can! She's a girl, but she's the best, and I'm the best!" he shot back.

And thus Rarity watched with surprise as the foals all began to argue over who got to be Twilight during their next adorable play. Just like with the market, Rarity found herself surprised. These foals didn't care to be royalty, as she would have expected, but instead wanted to be… a soldier.

And not just any soldier, but Twilight, and Rarity could hardly blame them! She knew first-hand that the unicorn was not any normal mare, and the more they argued about the subject, the prouder she felt of her bodyguard.

Eventually, to her great sorrow, they had to move along, lest they miss Twilight's birthday entirely.

"That was cute," Fluttershy said, displaying her excellent taste in plays.

"I'm rather surprised by the fact that they know of Twilight," Rarity said as they walked further into the shopping district and towards the housing district. It was certainly new for her to see somepony other than her close friends acknowledge the bodyguard's existence.

Applejack chuckled. "You might not know it, Your Highness, but Twi's somethin' of a big celebrity 'round these parts. Ain't a foal who doesn't know who she is."

Rarity blinked. "What? Really? She's never told me that!"

"She wouldn't. That's not important for her," Applejack replied. "But it sure is mighty important for folks down here. Somepony like us guardin' the life of our future queen? And stoppin' three attacks already and never boastin' about it? Just 'cause y'all fancy ponies don't see her doesn't mean us 'commoners' don't too."

Rarity fell silent, her perceptions on her subjects once again altered. It was true. Nobles in the castle barely ever acknowledged Twilight, acting as if she were a statue or something to be ignored. How many of them treated lesser ponies than them in such a terrible way? And yet, to these ponies, Twilight was a hero, somepony to look up to and strive to be like.

It warmed Rarity's heart, and she was ashamed to never have gone down to the city to mingle with her future subjects before now. She'd only been there for less than an hour, and already she found she generally liked them more than the stuffy aristocrats residing in the castle.

Besides, it didn't matter if Twilight was invisible to them, because Rarity would gladly shower her with all the attention she didn't receive from those cucumber sandwiches.

Eventually, they reached another bustling area of the district, this time dedicated to the sale of all kinds of custom-made items. Armors, swords and shields for soldiers; artisan crafts for decorating houses; assorted tools for farmers and blacksmiths; modestly priced hoof-stitched clothes for all kinds of occasions.

Rarity found herself wishing she could do just a little bit of sightseeing. Sure, those clothes weren't even remotely the quality of her own royal wardrobe, but there was a quaint charm to them. Maybe she could even buy a nice present for Twilight! Fluttershy was giving her a book, Applejack was…

What is Applejack giving Twilight? And Rainbow Dash, too, for that matter? Surely they weren't planning on attending the party without a present!

"Applejack, Rainbow Dash," she said, coming to a stop. "Where are your presents?"

Applejack rubbed the back of her head. "Er…"

Rainbow snorted. "Present? What present? Lookin' after you is present enough!"

"You mean to tell me you don't have presents for her?! Heavens, were you raised in a barn?" Rarity asked, appalled. "Weren't you ever taught it's terribly rude to be invited to a birthday party and not bring a present?"

"Technically, Princess, we're not even invited to the birthday party," Rainbow Dash pointed out.

Rarity rubbed a hoof against her forehead. The company she kept, sometimes! No wonder Father sometimes questioned it. She reached into her saddlebag and took out two golden coins, one for each mare. "Here! Take this, and for the love of Celestia go buy Twilight a nice present!"

Applejack and Rainbow both stared at their respective coins with wide eyes.

"Princess, I could buy out an entire stand with this!" Applejack exclaimed, looking at the mare as if she'd gone insane. "Heck, I could buy the whole darn place!"

"Oh, uh, hey, Princess," Dash said, looking up to the mare with a bright smile, "Y'know, my birthday is in like, three months, but if you to want to buy me a present in advance, I'd be like, toooootally cool with that."

Rarity rolled her eyes. "I will take a look at the stands here while you two go buy something for Twilight.” She turned to Fluttershy, and furrowed her brow. "Please make sure they buy something Twilight will like, not something Rainbow Dash will like. I'll stay here and look at the stands."

"I don't know, Princess," Applejack said, furrowing her brow. "Leaving you here alone ain't such a good idea, and I'm sure Twilight would be redder than an apple if she found out."

Rarity snorted. "Applejack, darling, please, I'll be fine! Look, I'll stay around this area and look at the trinkets!" She gestured to the plaza, filled with dozens of shoppers. "Look at how many ponies there are! Twilight always says that the most secure places are the ones where there's too many witnesses, and this is just the spot."

Rainbow Dash frowned. "Well… Well, okay, but don't move from here, got it? And if somepony comes over, scream like you just got told your mane was ruined!"

Rarity rolled her eyes. "Yes, yes, I will. I'll shriek loudly enough I'll probably summon Twilight."

Goddesses, she wished she could summon Twilight.

"Fine," Applejack relented, trotting away with Rainbow Dash and Fluttershy. "We won't take long."

Looking around, the Princess adjusted the hood of her cloak, covering her face as much as she could, before trotting towards the nearby stands. One in particular caught her attention, if only for two large stone worship statues placed on either side of it.

On the right side, the Goddess Celestia sat, a soft smile on her lips. Celestia, often associated with guidance, power, warmth, and strength was the deity rumored to raise the sun every morning. Though Twilight Sparkle had never been the religious type, and in fact often contested the existence of gods, even she could not deny the beauty of the goddess of the sun, who supposedly lived in a temple above Caelum, Equestria's highest mountain.

On the left side, the Goddess Luna sat, and her stoic expression reminded Rarity of Twilight. The younger sister, she was associated with influence, balance, wonder, and magic. She was, admittedly, Rarity’s favorite goddess, as the Princess loved the night sky and the thousands of stars it held. Rarity herself would never scale Caelum, but she often visited the little temple at the castle, and she’d practically lived there during the terrible week Twilight had been injured during an assassination attempt.

On top of the worship stones, the stand boasted a wide array of relics, figurines and items all to do with the goddesses. Maybe Twilight would benefit from one of these? A little Celestia pendant might be enough, as not only would it work as a protection charm, but it would also add some charm to the unicorn’s appearance.

“What can I get you for, Miss?” the shopkeeper asked, rubbing her hooves together. She reached behind the stand and procured a large leather bound book, which she shoved Rarity’s way. “Got any foals? Our illustration book is a real big hit with ‘em!”

Rarity blushed. “Er, I should hope not,” she quickly said, and honestly she wasn’t interested in having any yet—not that she even could have foals with her love interest, but that was something she had a very long time to dwell on.

Nevertheless, books were Twilight’s favorite things, so she accepted the object and looked it over.

Leafing through the pages, she understood why foals might be entranced by it. Every page had a beautiful hoof-drawn illustration of the Goddesses and the history of Equestria.

‘The Book of Prophecies’. That’s what it’s called,” the shopkeeper explained. “It’s said that long ago, an earth pony artist climbed up to the temple high above Caelum to seek audience with the goddesses. When she came back down weeks later, she locked herself in her home for weeks on end to illustrate their prophecies”

Rarity snorted. “I don’t quite believe in prophecies.”

“But I do! Look at this one, kind stranger,” the shopkeeper said, and with her magic she turned the pages of the book. She stopped at an illustration of two heavily clothed mares going up a mountain in the middle of a snowstorm. “‘The weary travelers of Caelum’, it’s called. Look at the mare on the left! You can see a bit of the armor under the clothes, and the sheath of her sword.” She then pointed to the other mare. “And look at this one! Those clothes don’t look like what us townfolks wear in harsh winter, kind stranger. That’s royal clothing if I ever saw it! And the tail slipping under the clothes! A beautiful purple, just like our dear elder princess!

Rarity looked up, raising an eyebrow. “You think this is… Princess Rarity?” She scoffed loudly, nearly forgetting her need to keep up appearances. “Don’t be ridiculous! Why in Equestria would she go up Caelum? She’s not insane! And what makes you think Twilight Sparkle would even allow it? Or the king and queen, for that matter?”

The shopkeeper smiled. “Ah, well, I don’t know about the King or Queen, but we could ask Twilight Sparkle herself!” She lifted her hoof, waving at somepony beyond Rarity. “Twilight! Happy Birthday! I have a present for you!”

Twilight?!

Rarity froze in spot, drawing in a breath. Moments later, she saw a bright pink pony appear next to her, whom she recognized as the court’s jester.

“Hiiiiiii, Inky!” Pinkie greeted. “How come you’re not coming to the party?! I made Twilight the best cake in all of Equestria!”

Inky smiled. “Oh, I wouldn’t miss it, but I need to finish up here first! And besides, what’s the point of going if the birthday mare isn’t there?”

“We got delayed,” a wonderful yet terrifyingly familiar voice replied, and a panicked Rarity quickly lowered her hood even more, turning her face away from the mare now standing opposite Pinkie. “Shining Armor didn’t want me to be there while they prepared the…” She cut herself off and took a deep breath of air. “I recognize this perfume.”

Pinkie immediately sniffed the air. “Oh! Oh, me too! It smells just like Princess Rarity’s room!” Her gaze fell on the hooded unicorn who was suddenly very, very fascinated by a relic on the table. “Oh, it’s you, stranger! You smell super nice!”

“I was just telling this kind stranger of the Book of Prophecies!” Inky said, taking the book and handing it over to Twilight, still open on the illustration of the two travelers. “Look! They look just like you and our crown princess! Any plans on going to Caelum soon, Twilight?”

Twilight laughed, and Rarity would have noted what a wonderful laugh it was were she not terrified out of her wits.

“Don’t be silly. Why would she even want to go up to the Goddesses’ temple? The only way she’d ever go there is if she was told the temple doubled as the best spa in Equestria.”

Rarity took a deep breath of air. Rise above it, Rarity, she’s just upset at you.

Inky laughed, closing the book and putting it away. “Well, we can discuss it more at your party.”

“What about you?” Pinkie asked Rarity, moving her head to try and get a look of the princess’s face. “Are you coming to Twi-Twi’s birthday party?! Everypony’s invited, even strangers with spooky capes!”

“That’s not a cape, Pinkie,” Twilight said, and Rarity could feel the unicorn’s stare on her. “It’s a silk cloak depicting some of the constellations from the Celestial Equator, such as Monoceros, Gemini, and Aquila. It’s actually a very expensive cloak, made in the southern district of Saddle Arabia’s capital.” She paused for a moment and then, in that tone of voice she used when she’d caught on to one of Rarity’s many mischiefs, she said, “It’s not something a common townpony would be wearing.”

“I apologize,” Rarity said, pitching down her voice as much as she could. “I have other things to attend to. Happy birthday.”

That said, she turned around, making sure to keep her head lowered, and nonchalantly trotted off. As long as she went slow and steady, Twilight wouldn’t suspect a thing. Surely other ponies in the city visited Saddle Arabia! It could have been another noble, for all Twilight knew! Duke Fancy came down to the city plenty of times!

Rarity had made it ten steps when she allowed herself to relax. There, now she just needed to find the others and—

“Wait!” Twilight’s voice called out. “I’d like to talk to you, please!”

Now, Rarity considered herself a tremendously brilliant pony. She was well-read, had received the finest education in all of the kingdom, and her bodyguard was nearly a living encyclopedia to boot. As such, most everything she did displayed her vast intelligence.

Except, sadly, for this one time.

Sometimes, but not often, the princess made choices that would not be considered bright. It was Twilight’s fault, honestly. Love made ponies do silly things, and Rarity’s infatuation with the bodyguard clouded her otherwise brilliant mind.

Had Twilight not clouded Rarity’s judgement with her detestable perfection, Rarity would have calmly glanced back towards the bodyguard and dealt with whatever consequences awaited her. Instead, at the sound of Twilight’s voice, the princess did the worst possible thing one could do in the presence of a suspicious bodyguard.

She ran for her dear life.

She heard Twilight call out again, just as she rushed into the labyrinth of ponies and stands. There was no going back anymore; if Twilight would have been angry before, now she’d be furious. Rarity avoided one, two, three ponies, turned left, and when she glanced back, she was horrified to see Twilight still behind her.

It certainly didn’t help that the cloak was too bulky to appropriately run away, and begrudgingly she was forced to admit that Twilight was always right! Well, of course she was—she was perfect in almost every single way—but in that moment, as Rarity nearly tripped on the accursed-yet-fashionable garment, she hated the fact that Twilight was always so damnably right.

She took another right, diving right into a swarm of ponies and hopefully losing Twilight in the process. Besides, as long as there was the risk of accidentally hitting somepony else, Rarity knew Twilight would never dare use her magic. When she managed to exit the plethora of shoppers, she rushed into another aisle of stands, and saw Rainbow Dash in the distance.

“I SAID STOP!” Twilight called out in the distance, struggling to move inside the crowd of ponies.

Rarity eep’d, rushing towards Rainbow Dash. If Twilight saw the pegasus, it would be just as bad as getting caught herself. It wasn’t until she was nearly next to her that Rainbow noticed Rarity, putting back the item she’d been looking at.

“Princess? What’s wro—”

“Twilight is behind me!” Rarity shrieked, rushing past the mercenary and only just hearing the outrageous expletive Rainbow replied with before she sped off in another direction.

Glancing back, it seemed like she’d finally shaken Twilight off. In the back of her mind, Rarity decided she ought to see if Twilight could get a raise now that she’d seen first-hand how absurdly dedicated the bodyguard was to her job.

“Stop!”

Rarity looked forwards, horrified to find Pinkie waiting for her at the end of the aisle. There was no way to avoid her or go around her, and Rarity’s body was giving out on her, so she reluctantly screeched to a halt right in front of the jester.

It was all over.

Pinkie furrowed her brow, taking a step towards the Princess just as she took one back. “Princess Rarity,” she whispered, furtively glancing at the passerbys and shopkeepers. When her eyes went back to the Princess, her ears dropped and her mane deflated somewhat. “You… You didn’t really forget Twilight’s birthday, did you?”

Rarity, at a loss for words, simply shook her head.

“I knew it!” Pinkie exclaimed, her ears shooting back up and her mane regaining its usual puff. She hopped up and down, a grin decorating her face. “I knew it! See, because Twilight thought you did, and she was so super sad, Princess, but I knew she’s your super favoritest pony ever so you’d never ever forget her birthday! I knew it was just because you dummies don’t know how to talk to each other!” She jumped back, seizing Rarity up and nodding with excitement. “You want to surprise her, right?! That’s why you’re dressed up like that! Ohhhh, now I wish I could surprise Twilight, too, but I can’t because she knows I’m here, and I dunno how to make her unremember me, but—”

“Pinkie!”

Rarity froze at the sound of Twilight’s voice, and her wide eyes bore themselves into Pinkie, tacitly begging the jester to please keep her identity a secret.

“Oh, wait, Twilight!” Pinkie blurted out, frowning and looking behind Rarity. “Don’t come closer! You scared poor Cloakey when you chased her around! She felt like you thought she was a bad pony!”

“B-But she ran away—!” Twilight protested. “And that cloak is just like—”

“That’s no reason to chase somepony, silly!” Pinkie replied. She then cleared her throat and narrowed her eyes at Rarity. “Lessee…” Very slowly, she leaned her face in until her nose was nearly touching Rarity’s. “Hmmmm… Nope!” she exclaimed, jumping back with a big smile. “You’re not Princess Rarity! I’d know Princess Rarity anywhere, and you’re definitely not her.”

Without another word, Pinkie hopped past the Princess. “Come on, Twi-Twi! We’re going to be late to your own birthday party, silly! For all you know, maybe the Princess is waiting for you there!”

“Right. Like she’d give up on her spa time for me. Maybe it's better that way,” Twilight muttered, loud enough for Rarity’s ears to hear and her heart to sink. “I apologize for the trouble, ma’am…”

With that, Rarity heard the two mares trot away, and it wasn’t until half a minute had passed that she allowed her body to relax, falling to her haunches and exhaling the breath she’d been holding. Twilight’s hurt remark resonated in her head, and she buried her face in her hooves with a groan.

Did Twilight really think Rarity cared so little about her?

After a minute, she stood up, took in a deep breath and made her way back to her meeting point with Fluttershy and the others. They were probably already waiting for her, and the last thing she wanted was to upset them and have their names follow Twilight’s on the list of ponies who seemingly wanted nothing to do with her anymore.


Twilight's house was much more modest than Rarity would have imagined for a high-standing military family. It was two stories high, and the dark blue façade had been decorated with white stars and constellations wherever there was space. Light filtered out from inside the star-shaped windows, and a small dome could be seen on the roof, which Rarity assumed was for stargazing.

Though it might not have been the home she expected for Twilight Sparkle the bodyguard, it suited Twilight Sparkle the pony just fine.

Music and voices could be heard coming from inside, the party apparently already in full-swing. It seemed that Applejack’s words rang true, and Twilight was a well-beloved pony in her… original community. Though the Princess had spent the last few hours as a fish out of water, she’d never felt uncomfortable by it. On the contrary, she’d been thrilled by this new if lower class world, and she’d only wanted to know more of it.

But now…

Now she wasn’t certain she felt so comfortable anymore. It wasn’t that she couldn’t fit in—she was a social butterfly through and through, no matter the situation—but what point was there in fitting in and having a nice time if her presence was unwanted by her sweethea—bodyguard?

“What’s wrong, Rarity?” Fluttershy asked, waking Rarity from her apparent reverie.

“Yeah, come on! I’m starvin’ here, and there’s Pinkie Pie cake in there!” Rainbow Dash said, trotting past the Princess and towards the front door.

“Now wait just a minute, Dash,” Applejack called before turning to the forlorn Princess. “What’s wrong, sugarcube?”

Rarity let out a frustrated whine. “I can’t go in there!”

Rainbow stepped away from the door. “What? Why not?”

“Didn’t you hear what I told you she said?” Rarity exclaimed, gesturing helplessly. “She doesn’t want me there! I’ll probably ruin it for her if I trot in! She thinks I don’t care about her, and honestly what’s the point of attending if I’ll be the center of her attention in such a terrible way?”

Applejack frowned. “Your Highness, I’m sure Twilight is able to focus on other things that ain’t you.”

“It’s too late!” Rarity theatrically shrieked, looking towards the horizon. “We’ll just have to go back to the castle, and Twilight will be happy without me, and—”

“No!” Rainbow Dash exclaimed, flying up and landing in front of the Princess, wings spread out. “Sweet Celestia, Princess Rarity! What’d you mean we’re going back?! I—We didn’t come all the way here so you’d bail out now! Come on!”

Rarity stepped back, too startled by the outburst to snap back. “But, I—”

“You’re Princess Rarity! You’re practically a legend in getting your way! You could probably get King Belle to build you a tower just to have some shade in your room past noon!”

Rarity’s face flushed. “That is completely ridiculous!”

“No, it’s not! And you are not backing out! What are you?! A wimpy mare, or the future ruler of Equestria?!” Rainbow Dash demanded, taking a step towards the Princess. “You had your dumb plans for her! You’re gonna walk away letting her think you don’t care?! Huh?!”

“Of course not!” Rarity snapped back, incensed and yet invigorated by Rainbow’s claims. She was Rarity Belle of Equestria! She was the mare nobles travelled from all over the lands to gaze at! She was the future queen of Equestria, and she’d be damned to let things end that way! “I’m going to march in there, and tell her what’s what!”

Without allowing herself time to think things through, Rarity promptly stomped her way towards the door, slammed it open and stepped inside.

“TWILIGHT SPARKLE!” she shrieked. “I DID NOT FORGET YOUR BIRTHDAY!”

Unlike her many romance novels, the music didn’t immediately stop at her dramatic declaration. It went on and on, loud enough to have muffled her scream so only about half a dozen ponies heard. They all turned to stare at this crazed but fashionable cloaked intruder, and the Princess would have lost all her nerve if Twilight Sparkle hadn’t heard.

But she did.

All the way from across the room, the rim of a glass on her lips, Twilight Sparkle stared at Rarity with eyes the size of saucers. She’d already changed into her party attire, and for a glorious moment, Rarity all but forgot her purpose and instead admired the incredibly rare sight of her bodyguard wearing a dress and makeup.

How graceful she was, lowering the cup and placing it on the table. Her eyes were set on Rarity, as they should, and an expression of delighted surprise painted her face… Well, perhaps it wasn’t delighted surprise so much as it was general surprise, her lips whispering Rarity’s name, and the Princess just knew her ever stoic Twilight was rejoicing on the inside.

And then Twilight’s expression shifted.

Her brows furrowed, her teeth gritted, and oh, Rarity suddenly fully understood what it meant to see fire in somepony’s eyes. Just as she made a move to get up, Rarity immediately stepped back outside and slammed the door shut, heart racing in her chest.

Twilight Sparkle was going to murder her.

“So!” she said, stepping away from the door and smiling brilliantly at the three disconcerted mares. “That went well, I think.”

Fluttershy frowned. “It… did?”

Before Rarity could reply, she heard the door creak open, and when all three of her friends blanched at the sight behind her, Rarity didn’t need to turn to know who’d opened the door.

“Girls, I’d like you all to know that I’m truly grateful of what you did for me tonight. I realized I asked much of you, but you delivered splendidly, and now I can only humbly hope you will bring flowers to my funeral, which will be hel—”

“Princess Rarity.”

Rarity’s eloquent speech dissolved into a terrified squeal. Oh goodness, she was done for. Dead at the hooves of Equestria’s most stunning murderess. Alas, there could have been far worse ways to leave this cruel world, and Rarity was very lucky all things considered. She took a deep breath, put on an award winning smile, and turned around to face her doom.

To say Twilight Sparkle looked furious would be an inaccurate statement. Her face bore no expression, no furrowed brow, no gritted teeth, no flaming eyes, and it was this same lack of expression that told Rarity that fury would be a tame word to describe what Twilight was probably feeling.

Twilight’s eyes flicked beyond Rarity, to the three equally petrified mares, before returning to the crown princess. “Where are your bodyguards?” she calmly asked, and my, did the temperature drop to negative levels? It certainly felt like it did.

Drawing herself up, figuring she might as well go down tall and proud, the Princess calmly replied, “At the castle.”

“And what are they doing there?”

Rarity cleared her throat, running a hoof through her mane. “Well, if you must know, they’re taking care of Sweetie Belle.”

“And why are they taking care of Princess Sweetie Belle and not you?” Twilight asked, and Rarity wished she could run away again.

“Because…” she replied, admiring her hooficure, “she’s in my room pretending to be me. She's quite the actress, just like some fillies we saw earlier near the market.”

"I'm sure she is," Twilight said, stepping to the side and leaving the path clear into the house. She smiled at Fluttershy and Applejack. "Why don't you three go inside? Everypony is very nice, and the food Pinkie made is great."

Fluttershy threw the Princess a worried glance before nodding and quickly stepping past Twilight. Applejack did the same, stopping only to whisper something to Twilight, and then following Fluttershy into the building.

Rainbow Dash, however, did not budge.

"Wait, you're not gonna chew me out?" she asked, disconcerted.

Twilight smiled. "I will once I'm done with the Princess."

"Oh." Rainbow Dash took a deep breath, trotting past Twilight and into the house, and then turning back to the Princess. "I'll bring flowers to your funeral, Your Highness."

Rarity smiled. "Thank you, Miss Dash. I'll see to it that flowers are brought to yours, as well."

Rainbow Dash grinned at that, finally disappearing inside the building and closing the door behind her.

When she was gone, Rarity stepped back, her smile fading off. Twilight Sparkle stared at her in irritated silence, no doubt trying to piece together what exactly she was going to tell the Princess. Rarity, for her part, did not regret her actions. Yes, perhaps running away from home hadn't been the best solution, but she had two excellent bodyguards with her, and nothing even remotely dangerous had happened.

"Well? Come on, just get it over with, Twilight," Rarity said, staring her bodyguard down. The faster Twilight vented, the sooner Rarity could prove to her how wrong she'd been.

"I'm trying to think of a word that adequately describes the stupidity of what you've done today, Your Highness, but I'm having a very hard time finding it," Twilight calmly replied.

Rarity winced. "Look, Twilight! Nothing happened! I'm perfectly fine. Applejack and Rainbow Dash were with me, and frankly they're just as efficient as any other guard!"

"Oh? What if they weren't there?" Twilight shot back, stepping towards the Princess. "What if Lady Fluttershy had been somewhere else today?! What if I hadn't asked Rainbow Dash to guard you?! Then what, Your Highness?! Do you even realize what would have happened to me?!"

Rarity rolled her eyes. "Oh, relax. If anything had even happened, nopony would have blamed you for it."

Twilight stepped back, eyes wide. "What? You think…" She lifted a hoof to her head, seemingly at a loss for words. "Rarity, I... That's not the point, Rarity! I don't care about that! But how many assassination attempts have I stopped in the past years?! Don't you realize how easy it would be for me to lose you?! You're lucky most of the castle city loves you, but even then—!" She drifted off, burying her face in her hooves.

"...Lose me?" Rarity whispered, her heart pounding in her chest.

She'd always known—or at least strongly suspected—that her infatuation with Twilight was reciprocated, but to hear it put like that...

"Why would you even do this?!" Twilight asked, apparently too angry to even realize her own confession. "I don't care that you forgot my birthda—"

"Yes, you do!" Rarity shot back, stepping towards Twilight. "Yes you do, and even if you didn't, I care! You're my best friend, Twilight, and I can't believe you'd honestly believe I'd prefer a spa day over spending the day with you! And, by the way—!" She took the Mareford Archives letter from inside her saddlebag and presented it to the unicorn. "Here! Look at the date! An entire week before our stupid argument!"

Twilight took the letter, eyebrows still furrowed, and began to read. "I, Princess Rarity Belle, the First, will be visiting the fair city of Trottingham… intend on visiting the Sacrosanct Archives… will be accompanied by my personal guard, Twilight Sparkle… would like to make a…" Twilight's anger all but faded, replaced instead with a shamed flush. "…formal request for Miss Sparkle to be given permission to read any book she desires… visiting the archives has been a dream she's had for quite some time… Regards, Princess Rarity Belle."

"See?! I'd been planning it for weeks, and I foolishly thought it would be a good idea to pretend I didn't know so I'd surprise you, and it all blew up in my face! And, yes, Twilight, you can be furious at me for what I've done, but I will not tolerate you thinking I forgot something as important as your birthday, because you mean the wo—" Rarity cut herself off, cheeks turning bright red, and instead made a rather odd gesture with her hoof. "Because I wouldn't, alright?!"

Twilight fell silent, falling onto her haunches and looking at the floor. "I'm trying to think of a word that describes how silly this all is, but I'm having a very hard time finding it."

"Goodness, that seems to be happening a lot with you. Maybe I ought to have gotten you a dictionary for your birthday instead?" she suggested, unable to stop herself from giggling when a smile pushed its way onto Twilight's face.

"You have to go back to the castle, Princess," Twilight pointed out, getting up. "I'll ask Rainbow Dash to please escort you back."

"But… I want to be with you," Rarity whined piteously, and if they hadn’t been at risk of being seen, she'd have trotted a few steps further and finally satiated her desire to nuzzle her crush. She sighed instead, her ears falling as she pawed at the floor. "I'm sorry, Twilight. I didn't mean to ruin this day for you."

"But who says the day is ruined, Your Highness?"

Rarity turned around, surprised to find one of the very few nobles whose presence she actually tremendously enjoyed.

"Lord Fancy!" she exclaimed. "What are you doing here? I thought you were attending Father's… dinner… party…"

She knew the duke was fond of Twilight, but she'd never expected him to actually attend or even know of her birthday party. Unless Twilight invited him and not Rarity, in which case maybe she didn't feel so guilty anymore.

"If I may, I'd like to wish this lovely mare a happy birthday first," he said, stepping towards Twilight and bowing his head.

"Oh! Er, I… th-thank you, My Lord!" Twilight blurted out, herself bowing down to the earl.

"Now, as for you, Princess," he continued, clearing his throat and turning to the increasingly uncomfortable royal. "I did in fact attend your father's dinner! Fleur and I were disappointed to hear you felt too sick to attend, and when Duke Wineberry insisted a doctor go see you, you can hardly imagine the panic when he found Princess Sweetie Belle fast asleep inside your bed."

Ah.

"Some actress," Twilight said, smiling at Rarity's glare.

"She's quite loyal to you, I must say!" he continued. "The poor filly was so terrified of you being punished, she was adamant in her refusal of divulging your location. Luckily, Fleur is quite the expert with children, and once she found out it was our dear Twilight's birthday… so, here I am! To fetch you, and inform you that your parents have decided to punish you from any social event until the masquerade ball."

"The masquerade ball?!" Rarity gasped, horrified. "But—! But, Lord Fancy, that's in two months! My entire social life will crumble! Twilight! Twilight, do something! Tell him!"

Twilight was impassive. "Actually, considering you ran away from home, told nopony about it but your baby sister, lied to your bodyguards, and ran away from your personal bodyguard earlier today, I think they're going too easy on you, Your Highness."

Rarity was never more offended in her entire life.

"What?! You—! You traitor!" she accused, jumping away from her backstabber and signaling her with an accusing hoof. "This is your fault! I did this for you, and this is your response?! You know what, I didn't even want to attend your birthday party in the first place!"

Twilight smiled. "Of course you didn't, Your Highness."

Oooooh, she thought she was so smug with her smug little adorable smile, but the joke was on her because Rarity didn't care for her anym—

"Ah! About that! I have a message for your from the king, Twilight," Fancy continued, losing all his previous playfulness.

"O-Oh?" Twilight asked, the complete disappearance of her smug smile drawing deep satisfaction from the betrayed princess.

"Indeed. Both he and the Queen were very surprised to find out they had not been informed of your birthday, and after all you've done to protect their daughters, they wanted me to personally invite you and all your guests to a birthday celebration tomorrow night at the castle!"

"What?!" Twilight gasped, looking besides herself. "But—! I—! Really? But, I can't accept that—!"

Fancy waved her off. "Don't be ridiculous. They insist, and frankly, so do Fleur and I. In fact, they asked me to apologize in their stead for not holding the party today, but it was a bit short notice and they'd like to prepare it properly."

Twilight's mouth hung open, her cheeks flushed. It was clear that she'd never expected to receive such a recognition from Rarity's parents, and even despite Twilight's grievous backstabbing, Rarity was more than pleased by the news.

"Well, I, for one, think it's a wonderful idea," she said. "That way I can get your present and—"

"Oh, my dear girl," Fancy interrupted, expression softening. "I am terribly sorry to say this, but I fear your punishment includes Twilight's birthday party."

Rarity's heart fell. "Wh-What?! But—! But..."

Twilight took a step towards the earl. "But, I mean, isn't there— Can't they—That's not really fair..."

Fancy sighed. "Believe me, my dears, I tried swaying them, but they were adamant. I truly am sorry, Your Highness."


Twilight Sparkle's birthday party was an event to be remembered.

It had only started an hour ago, and already it was one of the best events held that year. The best musicians available had been brought to play all night, every noble that could attend was invited, and for the very first time in a long time, the gates of the castle had been opened so the townsfolk could attend the celebration. It was truly set to be the party of a lifetime.

And Princess Rarity was going to miss it.

From inside her room, atop her tower—prison, more like it—the eldest Princess of Equestria looked down from her open window, glaring at the dozens of ponies having fun in the gardens. How dare they be happy at Twilight's party when the only pony who mattered was barred from going? She wanted them all to be miserable, but…

But that wouldn't be nice for Twilight, and despite it all, Rarity wanted her beloved to have a wonderful birthday party. She wanted Twilight to feel loved and celebrated for how wonderful, brave, and heroic she was.

Throwing one last glance out the window, the Princess sulked away towards her bed, landing on it with an uninspired thud. How could her parents do this to her? She understood—well, no, she didn't—but she could accept being punished from other social events, but from Twilight's party? That was completely unfair! Cruel, even!

It was cruel, and it made her miserable because she wanted to be with Twilight, and see her happy, and see her smile, and sing silly birthday songs, and…

Ugh…

Three knocks at the door.

Ah yes, that was another thing her beloved parents had implemented. Guards coming up every hour to make sure she hadn't run away again.

"Go away!" Rarity yelled, levitating a pillow and throwing it at the door. "I haven't run away, if that's what you're here for!"

To her immense irritation, she heard the doorknob turn, and in reply she rolled around in her bed and buried her face in her pillow.

"I said that I want to be alone!" she growled, having half a mind to go down and yell at her father for hiring guards who clearly had no respect whatsoever for her privacy.

"You always say that," Twilight's voice came, "and then you get mad at me for staying outside your room."

Rarity looked up from her pillow, taking a moment to admire her bodyguard. This was two days in a row that she'd seen her all dressed up and out of that gaudy armor, and she begrudgingly thanked her parents for being responsible.

"Why are you here? You should be downstairs enjoying your party," she pointed out. "Even though I can scarcely imagine how one could even enjoy a party without me, but you should at least try. Fluttershy visited me earlier and the list of nobles she gave me..."

Twilight frowned. "Honestly, I'm pretty sure that not even ninety percent of the noble ponies downstairs even know or care for who I am."

Rarity frowned, burying her face back inside her pillow. "...throw them all into the dungeon the second I take the throne," she mumbled, and Twilight's laugh nearly drew a smile out of her.

"And what are you going to do about the ensuing revolution, Your Highness?"

Rarity looked at Twilight again. "I don't know. I'll have you figure it out for me."

Twilight smiled. "Right. Anyway, you better start getting ready, Your Highness," she said, stepping away and going to close the open window. "You're still on time to be 'fashionably late'."

Rarity sat up, confused. "Whatever do you mean? I'm not allowed to go down. You know that."

Twilight went back to the Princess, sitting down on the floor besides her. "I know, but King Belle asked me what I'd like for my birthday present, and I told him that even though he'd already done enough, I'd be very grateful if a certain princess was allowed to attend the party."

Rarity didn't know what to say at first. She didn't know how to properly express the butterflies in her stomach, or the giddiness in her chest, and she certainly didn't know how to stop the smitten smile from forming on her lips.

Instead, in the privacy of her room, where she was allowed to get away with whatever she wanted, she extended her foreleg and oh, how heavenly it was when Twilight leaned in, buried herself in her princess's hug, both of them sighing in contentment.

"I'm trying to think of a word to describe how happy I am that you're back, but I'm having a hard time finding it," Rarity said.

"Maybe we both need that dictionary," Twilight said in between giggles. "But I'm glad you're here, too."

At that, Rarity closed her eyes and relished the nuzzle she was being treated to. "Happy birthday, Twilight."

End Part II

Author's Note:

Stay tuned for the next thrilling installment of Bodyguard!AU:

Rarity becomes president of the city's Twilight Sparkle fanclub.

Thank you for reading, and as always, let me know if you find any typos (preferably through PM)! Thank youu :twilightsmile:

Comments ( 62 )

Crazy! I just logged in thinking of how much I'd love to see a new Mono story :twilightsmile: Welp, time to get started

10/10 best raritwi that ever twi'd rari

Cant wait to read this once I have time.

I have literally no time to read this right now. You're so mean. I'll have to leave the second chapter for later. XD
Glad we finally get a preseeeeequally to the teaser fic of last time. xD

I'm rather surprised Rarity would trust Dash to acquire appropriate flowers. Pretty sure Dash would go with a Venus fly trap or similarly "awesome" non-flowering plant.

You're joking but I would read "Rarity becomes Twilights fan club president" with a vengeance

these are some of my favor story, idea with twilight as guard of rairty

“Girls, I’d like you all to know that I’m truly grateful of what you did for me tonight. I realized I asked much of you, but you delivered splendidly, and now I can only humbly hope you will bring flowers to my funeral, which will be hel—”

Loved this line haha. Great story!

7502257 I'd expect poison joke, given her penchant for pranking everypony

7502435 Seconded

Absolutely loved every line of it. Excellent as always, Mono.

Prequel/Sequel story of the Masquerade. Prior knowledge of the AU isn't really necessary to read.

I'm confused; is it a PREQUEL, or is it a SEQUEL? Is the first chapter the prequel, and the second chapter the sequel, or do you just not know the timeline you're setting up here?

Edit: I see, it's a PREQUEL. You should specify that to begin with so there's no confusion about the timeline.

Wait!!! What about the book of prophecies????? What!?!?!

Well that was charming. I liked the entirety of the main six in this story. Everyone is so in character. Sad to know that it's the likely end for this AU though. Now I to go through and read some of the older stories again.

7502587 that was either mono being a huge troll and making us extremely sad by never doing it... Or the foreshadowing of a hundreds of thousands of words long epic about the journey of their love, BEGINNING with the confession, passing through the hurdles oh the path of their union, the death of her beloved parents, the marriage and ensuing years of the reign of queen twilight the patient and drama queen rarity.

If not, mono is an evil, evil witch hell-bent on making us be sad, sad ponies for the pen of no other shall endeavour us so with such beautiful tale.

I'd say wink wink nudge nudge but really, JUST DO IT, MONO!!!! :flutterrage:

Pretty please with sugar on top? :fluttercry:

A pleasure to read as always, Mono. Fantastic work.
The lines about the book of prophesy got me really exited for a whole second before I remembered that this is possibly the last Bodyguard AU fic. That's almost cruel, but the amazing quality of the fic overall makes up for it.

Edit: that doesn't mean that I'm not praying for more from the Bodyguard AU. Another fic about all of this would be, in my opinion, the "Best Possible Thing!" :raritystarry:

I still find it a bit chuckle-worthy that you have Luna as the mystical sister when Celestia was the Bearer of Magic (and Kindness and Generosity).

Are you serious about that sequel? I mean, of course it won't be serious, but I seriously hope that you're serious about the non-serious story. :twilightsheepish:

usualy your right so well so why *facetalons* is everyone in this story acting so stupid? I mean seriously by the time fancy tells rarity the king has bared her from attending the party, it just gets painful.

Ah. Sweet sweet RariTwi from the undisputed mistress of the genre.

I'll certainly hope it's something you'll revisit after that far-off goal of a finished TEL!

Until then, this was a fantastic way to leave off. Now to go re-read all of them in the chronological order you posted in your blog!

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The thing is, I'd love to write a massive bodyguard!au story, but that would require either cancelling or indefinitely hiatusing my proper AU D: If a large amount of folks would want that, I'd have no problem considering it and hiatusing EL, but right now, there's no way I can work on two massive multichapters at once.

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I'm sorry you didn't like it :c I understand that not all my stories will be well received by everyone, and hopefully next story I post will prove to be a nicer read for you :fluttershysad:

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I hope you liked it!

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Thank youuu <333

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Oops! I didn't mean to be mean :trollestia:

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Oh my gosh, she would, though.

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Alas, that story is doomed to stay in our imaginations forever :fluttercry:

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Thank you! I'm glad you like them!

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Thanks!

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Thank you, Pepper! Glad you liked it c:

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Hi! I explained it in a blogpost for masquerade, but the thing is I've been writing this entire AU in reverse, going from when Rarity was a queen to, well, now. So, from a writing/posting point of view it's a sequel, but from a timeline pov its a prequel.

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That was just a little fun I was having :twilightblush:

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Thank you, White! I'm glad you liked it. And yes, this is probably the last story. The only other idea I have for it could only be done as a long multichapter, but I can't handle BG!AU /and/ Enchanted Library. I'd love to do a massive bodyguard story, but EL takes precedence if only because I've been at it for a year already...

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Thank you, Rocket! I'm glad you liked it, and yes, it seems for now this is the end of this AU D: I have a bit too many things on my plate and I'd like to finish them first before I think about another bg!au story.

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Thank youuuu, Neo! I'm glad you liked it so much :D

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omg well admittedly I followed what Earthsong did. She assigned those elements for them in her blog, and I've tried to keep faithful to her headcanons and "rules".

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I'm not serious.... :c

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God, sometimes I feel like I'm never going to finish EL lmao orz Admittedly sometimes I feel like EL should have had the ficlets format I've been using for Bodyguard!AU whereas BG should be the long multichapter, but alas, what's done is done.

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Well, someone will have to write it now. And even if it's just in my head (because I'm a horrible procrastinator), I will follow that story to its end! :duck:

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Completely fine! Just makes me laugh a bit. <3 More Raritwi, please. (And Rarijack in the future, for an experiment!)

I saw that prophecy. I saw it, I like it.

The rest of the story was excellent as well, I must say.

~Skeeter The Lurker

7503213 no one said it had to be NOW (although it would be massively appreciated), only that it should happen. You're a great author, we can wait for you to properly finish that one first. After all, out would be unfair to the fans of EL to asks that one too be put on hold for an epic of this one to be born.

Just don't forget this piece of rarilight, OK? :twilightsmile:

As always, Mono, you have a way with horse-words.

And probably regular words, too, but that's not what we're here for. :raritywink:

With how much we talked while you were writing this, I actually wasn't expecting it to be as wild of a ride as it turned out to be. And it definitely was much better overall due to having more than 3,000 words. I cannot even imagine what this story would've been like, had it been that short. :applejackconfused:

I eagerly await whatever you scare up next, Mono. :twilightsmile:

I also would read the *:yay:* out of the "BG!AU Twilight Fan Club" story. I'm hoping you change your mind a few months from now and write it anyway. :pinkiehappy:

7503258 Truth be told, I haven't seen a story in your library detailing Rarity being a Queen. Have I just missed it, or is it elsewhere?

See, Mono, stuff like this is the reason I even attempted to get Dented Armor out there in the first place. I fact, this AU and King of Beggars Twilight Sparkle of the Royal Guard are the two stories that originally started the spark for that little one shot of mine, such as it is.



And as always, this was completely brilliant. Well done.

HNNNNNNGGGGGG
THIS IS TOO MUCH FOR MY HEART :raritycry::heart:

I eagerly await the fic about Twilight's inevitable conversation with King Belle about ... stuff.

Eeeee this was so awesome :rainbowkiss: I love your RariTwi AU! I would absolutely love to see a massive multichapter fic of this, but at the same time i love EL...maybe when EL is finished :D? Keep up the awesome writing!

If there's one thing this story does perfectly, it's exemplify why pretending not to know someone's birthday is just the greatest cruelty, and the entire day of feeling like crap is NOT worth the party at the end.

Of course, it also does everything else very well, but this in particular stuck out as especially good.

I'm running out of ways to say 'nice work, Mono!'... oh, guess I'm not. I'm actually on the verge of creating a bookshelf just to compile all the stories for this AU so I can organize them chronologically... for my own edification. Given the response here, you may have another long term project to consider after EL wraps... or for when EL reaches a point that you throw your hands up in surrender (don't do that, though). Hey, if you need someone to bounce ideas off of.... I'm sure you'll find 'em! :trollestia:

To this particular iteration... well it really shows off your knack for world building. Every one of these additions gives us a stronger peak into its world and this might be the best yet. We already had some notion of a different (but similarly decadent and snobby) nobility, and now hints about what the Sisters are up to. Hermits on a mountaintop, eh? Or are they spirits this time around? It's not like they have to climb Caelum (nice touch) to find out... just take a chariot. Oh but then again, Rarity loves camping.

As to our protagonists here... well, I'm a bit surprised by Rarity. Given her propensity for romance novels, she might have known that pretending to forget your, erm, bodyguard's birthday for the sake of surprising them rarely works out. Still, if anypony could pull it off... she just needed a couple more minutes before Shining showed up.

I loved her seeing Twilight's life outside the castle, and that Twi's a bit of a hometown hero. We see plenty of castle life in these vignettes; this was a really engaging change of pace. Also, Pinkie!:pinkiegasp: ...Right?! I'll throw my hat into the 'loved the funeral flowers' jokes, but also.... Those fillies and colts! Thanks sooo much... had me squeeing at work again, dammit. Luckily, break room was empty this time around. Freakin' adorable...

Anywho, wrap this up here... yeah, to sum up... nice work once again. Thanks for writing!

P.S. ...You used 'orz' down there in your responses... I rarely see it since my old FF11 days, oddly nostalgic for me. Actually, I can't recall seeing it used elsewhere... buuut I'm a bit of a recluse so that doesn't mean much.

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Only problem I can see with poison joke would be that we have no idea if Dash has access to the Everfree, or even knows where it is.

OH MY GOD THEY WERE SO CLOSE TO SAYING THINGS THAT WERE BASICALLY I LOVE YOU BUT DIDN'T OH MY GOD.

Now they need to go mountain climbing.

Once again, you don't disappoint. Your work is like fine fondue. It's somehow both simple and fancy, made of the good kind of cheese, and it makes you feel all warm and gooey inside.

7503013 >raritwi is now a genre

Please stop I'm already Twidash trash I don't want to be Raritwi trash as well

OMG fantastic, loved each chunk of this story :heart:

I just love the casual, kind, endearing arrogance that seeps into absolutely every thought Princess Rarity has. You portray her outstandingly, and I am so, so glad to have found your writing. A touch disappointed not to see actual love letter scene, but it's still comforting to know that it'll occur in-universe.

Also--those foals were the most adorable things. Just the most adorable, ever.

‘The weary travelers of Caelus’
'Dat foreshadowing!

Also, a minor issue--Inky starts off as male, then becomes female.

7502521 Eh... I don't know. If she's experienced Poison Joke before in this storyverse, then she probably wouldn't play a prank as mean as giving it to someone on their birthday.

An enjoyable read! :twilightsmile: Poor Twilight, Rarity was just trying to throw you off the trail of what could've been a wonderful birthday present, but alas, fate would have it that Shining has terrible timing! Rarity lervs you (not that you're aware of that yet), and she'd never forget your special day!

I really enjoyed the escape and trek through town, it was nice to read! Very charming! :raritystarry:

Thank you for the story Monooo!

You do such wonderful things with this AU, Monochromatic. :pinkiehappy:

Lovely! Lovely! Lovely! I love the way you describe how Rarity reacts to and thinks of Twilight! It's just so adorable and lovey-dove! I've devoured all of your fanfics. I liked the original picture done by Earthsong for sometime it is a sweet surprise to see all of your amazing work!!!

Any chance you have another story cooking up?

I. Freaking. Loved. It. :heart:
I do hope you write a sequel to this where their relationship is more advanced
(Also I kept picturing Twilight lookin and acting like Corvo Attano:twilightsheepish:)

Rarity becomes president of the city's Twilight Sparkle fanclub.

Just so you are aware... I would read the crap outta that.

I honestly had medium to low expectations about this specific AU and I gotta say... this is cute as fuck! I am thorougly surprise on both the amount of quality in all of the characters and just how nicely this universe is set up. I am not a man to comment on every story so you can take a favorite as a proof of my interest and delight but I will say this, I will finish every story in this series cause I really like the way you have done this!

don't know why, but this made me think, what if this Rarity got jealous over someone who was taking Twilight's time that Twilight is meant to have with her x3

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