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Nearly two hundred years have passed since the war that ended civilization. Stable 115, located in the once vibrant prairie lands at the edge of Equestria, is home to a young unicorn mare and her precocious filly. Life in the Stable is about stability and routine, and mother and child find comfort from this monotonous existence in each other and their friends.

Life in the Stable is about to change...

Inspired by Fallout: Equestria by Kkat, and Fallout Equestria: Project Horizons by Somber. Author suggests having read Fallout: Equestria before venturing into this tale.

Update 11/04/2012: To prevent confusion, an explanation about how the chapters are named/numbered. I essentially have the story split into several acts--each act will have a named chapter that precedes the number chapters and are a somewhat separate tale, but will eventually tie into the main story. If I ever manage to finish this (or you figure it out way, WAY before then), then it will hopefully make sense.

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Nice work!
One small thing though, you might want to put in a page break between shifts in perspective, just to make it easier to understand.

808148 Oop! Sorry about that! Potential weekend project! ^.~ I'm used to working with little to no formatting tools on ancient word processor programs from the mid-90s. I got into the habit of massive chunks of space between perspective/scene changes for the simple fact that I found it far easier and faster. Also might have something to do with that one-semester creative writing class I took in high school.

808026 The social recluse reluctantly accepts the invitation! :D He warns you, however, that participation in any conversations will likely be short and infrequent. He DOES work for a living.

:twilightoops: oshiiiiiiiiiiiiii! Must read next chaptar! Also... FIRST BUCKING POST.

Okay, *notbad* but I was hoping for moar :/ *reads on*

832713 I wouldn't know about any of the others, because I've only read two. ;) As for this particular tale, it will take time before it really gets going. It may yet surprise you (or it may not).

957463 I never thought to add the "comedy" tag, as I find humor in life to be a natural occurrence. And the humor should help balance out the darkness to come.
If anything, the story needs a pre-reader or an editor other than myself, as I've already spotted at least two mistakes and a word omission since I put this up last night. Alas, I have no friends and am a rather reclusive person, so I must take upon the duties myself. It might also help if I spent more than just a half hour on the task. >_>

1217081 It appears that I have surprised you after all. :) I hope I can continue to do so.

yay another chapter good one also

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Kittens.
Or puppies, if you're a dog person.

good chapter again looking towards the next one with Star Shine :twilightsmile:

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This mother/daughter pair won't be seen again for quite some time, unfortunately. I'm rather slow with my writing/typing. And I STILL haven't figured out a name for the mare! @.O

Prologue and an intro? Well then.

1941553 Yes, cats can be awesome in their own strange way. :D That particular part was based on a rather lucid dream I had the day before I started working on the chapter (I work graveyard shift and sleep during the day). It involved very similar circumstances on Christmas morning with this fifteen-pound beast of a Maine Coon cat we called Sparks when we first got him as a kitten on July 4th, 1996. He was doing the same thing in my dream--dashing around, annoying my family, pouncing on the shredded wrapping, but when he leapt off the couch and right into a box, all this wrapping paper just came poofing out and I wound up laughing....and that's when I woke up. Laughing. I burned the dream into my mind and typed down as many details as I could recall later to make use of it, and it turned into the scene that starts off Chapter 5.

Sadly, Sparks developed a terrible chest tumor, but cats are very skilled at hiding potential symptoms of diseases and medical problems--my guess is that it's an ingrained ability that allows them to continue hunting and moving about without giving away their position to either prey or other animals. We didn't even know anything was wrong with him until he started having trouble breathing and moving more than a few feet at a time. Before that, we chalked up his increasing sleep periods and lack of spunk to old age as his breed is known to live an average of twelve years. By the time the tumor developed to the point where he could no longer hide it, it was too late, and we were forced to put him down a week later on July 29th, 2008. It was a little difficult writing that scene, but at the same time it also reminded me of all the laughs and joy he brought us, and was somewhat therapeutic even after all this time. I'd long since dealt with it, but this still helped in some ways.

I miss that big, furry bastard.

Really looking towards the next, good chapter :yay:

Wow this chapter was really good :yay: and what was that bear thing? Man bear pig? :trollestia:

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Don't feed the yao guai! :D

1863491 Do you mention this on every story with a prologue and an intro, Mr. Pleb?

oh this chapter was really good. And dead slaver always a good thing. Good chapter again :yay:

I will be watching you. Also, I'm open for pre-reading and editorial junk, so long as you're willing to return the favor (mine quit).

Oh I like this chapter and hopefully they get those collars off :yay:

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Why the sad face? :(

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when I read it I thaught all three kids died but obviously not :ajbemused:
p.s.
ive been really enjoying the story thus far, but in some sections the wording can make it confusing, and in others it just seem to take so long to read I just skip it(long and daunting but to an ok point)

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That has been something I've been trying to work on for years, with little success. In K-6 I was reading Michael Crichton's novels (heavens bless his departed soul) while most other kids were reading stuff slightly below their grade level. From junior high up to high school graduation it was Tom Clancy. Clancy's stuff in particular can be excessively lengthy (my paperback copy of Executive Orders numbers over 1300 pages!), and my childhood reading experiences have had a rather hard subconscious effect on my writing style. Old habits are just hard to shake. Hopefully at some point in this tale I can start weeding that out.

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I see now, but if ya cant im willin to help with that process, just ask :moustache:

This is awesome. And to prove it here is a list.
accurate gun safety lessons that progress as well as can be expected.
a look into the mentality of the characters that doesn't involve mind magic and near death experiences.
stables being treated as actual places rather than mythological hellpits.
actual flaws in people that show in ways you dont notice on first run.
accurate ballistics.
accurate wounding.
immaculate story progression.
world building.
off the wall names that are just too good to not like.
a little prereading and this stands to push the original so it may equal it... Also we need to get word of mouth around so you can get the reads you need.

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You aren't the first to mention the idea of pre-readers to me. Hell, I've even wondered about it at one point or another. Unfortunately, any potential pre-readers that would be willing to assist with the project would be frustrated by my glacial pace of writing and understandably quit on me within a month. If I can concentrate and get in the right frame of mind, I can pump out 8,000 to 10,000 words on a chapter per sitting, but I find that difficult to achieve. Music seems to help a great deal--just this morning I had the soundtrack for Aliens going on via a Youtube video (I've never been able to find it on CD), as well as the combined soundtrack for the first two Fallout games when my ears tired of James Horner's work, and got the majority of chapter 10 typed out. And sometimes my own life can be a decent source of inspiration--the start of chapter 5 was directly influenced by a very weird dream I had about an old family cat (in fact, I think I explained it in a previous reply on this comment page months ago).

The word of mouth, thing, on the other hand....I'm not quite sure how to approach that, or even make it work. I've never been very good at advertising myself or showing off, it's just not what I do. I prefer to just hammer the stuff out, and let the world judge it without my outside influence (this may be a mistake).

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I will be your prereader. And I won't ever quit. Quitting is the sign of a weak mind.

Wow that poor mare she got tortured by raiders for that long :fluttercry:. Though I hope they find a way to get those marks off their neck but at least they got them off, good chapter again :yay:

I'm still sorta trying to get over am entire stable that is just dead now. I mean fuck I was thinking the door gets stuck open and that's it... I'm sorta in shock and I'm totally floored by how much more openly brutal and dead this wasteland is as compared to Equestria proper. I am beginning writing a story and people just keep me going forward. I want it perfect so that I can share it in confidence.

*Logs on* Hmm lets see whats here.
Oh look a fallout equestria story updated.
Reads.
Oh. Oh dear.
This story is so good. Like filled with the problems of life and the wastes so I love it when the story makes you feel like you are invested in the lives of the characters.
Keep up the good work.

Please, please, please don't let her die, this chapter was really good but she can't die. I hope Kite saves her somehow, good chapter again :twilightsmile:

I am surprised how well you presented Light Tail's perspective on the chaos!
It was utterly horrifying to see this stuff through the eyes of a child. It properly represented the psychological effect of violence that so many authors of these fictions seem to miss.

Well... that was devastating.

Pow! Another amazingly written chapter!
Also, smooth introduction of the gryffons/gryffins/I do not know how the word is spelled! Leon's characterization and introduction falls a little flat though - could have more dialogue to establish a profile for the guy.

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There seems to be several ways the word "griffon" can be spelled, like "gryphon", or "griffin", or whatnot. I went with the method that flowed off my brain the best. :D But yes, I could have done a better job with Leon than what I've accomplished so far. When I conjured this pair into existence the idea was that Ada would be the more sociable of the two and therefore the one that would do most of the talking for them. So far, however, that's turning out to be far too one-sided, and I've a few ideas for how to break that mold I've set myself in. Now if I could just get away from World of Warcrack long enough to get the next chapter finished....

I always wonder why the FOE fics are always the longest ones. This one seems interesting though. But the huge wordcount seems daunting to start. Also so few veiws. To bad you cant really advertise fanfics

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The word count may be an informal "rule" of sorts, though there are plenty that are far shorter than most. The risk with longer tales is that the author may eventually lose interest and just stop working on it. In my case, my sloth-like writing pace is as much a hindrance as anything else (World of Warcraft doesn't help any either). Now and then, though, I may have to churn out something shorter, or even one-shots entirely unrelated, to get the mental juices flowing again. I've a couple of those lying around my hard drive at the moment that I may touch on and finish off at some point this summer.

If I were doing this for the viewcount, I'd have stopped at the second chapter. I'm running with this for as long as it takes to finish it. I anticipate a project of at least another two years, if not more, given the pace that I'm going at. :\

Well at least he doesn't have mercs anymore :twilightsmile:, also glad that she didn't lose any eyesight :yay:. Good chapter again :rainbowkiss:

This was a grand chapter!

One gigantic gambit stacked on another. Ada's POV. Leon's POV (with at least some personality attached now too!).

And BJ has character too. Shocking! This is shaping up to be my favorite Fallout: Equestria side-story.

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Despite the massive gap in time since the last chapter, I am indeed still at work on the project. This may be a case where no matter how much I rewrite the current chapter to try to satisfy myself that it will do, I'll just have to suck it up and put up what I've got regardless of how much better I think it could be if I worked on it just a little bit more....

....which I've been doing for six months.... >.>

It's a good thing I don't do this for a living.

This is a wonderful breather. Great to see you back.

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I wouldn't say important, but yes, having some clue of how to use a firearm helps to portray their presence as something more than "BANGBANGyou'redead". I won't even begin to list the problems and inaccuracies that crop up with Hollywood and TV shows (sometimes intentionally!).

The bit in this chapter about the visual problems is also something I experience personally. Human vision is binocular in terms of how it operates--the image of each eye is combined to form a singular, central view and focusing on one focal plane while occluding the others a bit, but everyone's eyes are different and a great deal of people don't have perfect 20/20 vision. My eyesight is actually pretty terrible, to the point where I'm not supposed to drive without eyeglasses. Even with corrective lenses, I find that my eyes can't focus on more than one focal plane without getting double vision in the other. If I were to raise my finger up in front of my PC monitor and then focus on the monitor, I would see two ghostly images of a finger (yes, I would actually "see" through the image of my finger!). If I focus on the finger, most everything beyond that finger splits into two.

A great number of training schools often advise that one shoot with both eyes open, and competitive shooters are often able to focus on their front sight, and then the target with such rapid speed that their sight picture can almost appear as a singular crisp image, but my own eyes simply cannot accomplish switching from one focal plane to the other without a host of visual problems getting in the way. It's very difficult to focus on that front sight and then sight it in on the target when either object is always split into two different offset images, even if the target itself only a few feet away. The way I've gotten around this is to simply close one eye, which naturally puts an end to those pesky double images as I'm now only seeing through my right eye, instead of both the left and right, but this also means I'm now seeing the world from a slightly off-center point of view and with a very reduced depth perception. One option a person could take would be to talk to their eye doctor about a set of eyeglasses that would allow them to properly focus their vision when shooting, usually through a set of bifocals in the upper portion of the lenses rather than the bottom, but not every eye doctor is experienced or knowledgeable about this specific issue a near/farsighted person experiences.

Another option is some form of optics or red dot sight, but until very recently this was almost strictly limited to competition shooters even after red dot sight technology evolved to the point where it could be miniaturized to fit on a pistol. Handguns are most often designed only with iron sights and have no provisions for mounting any kind of optics system unless they're modified by a gunsmith. Within the last two years, however, a small number of manufacturers have begun making models with a portion of the slide machined and cut for a miniaturized red dot sight directly from the factory, making it much easier for the rest of us to enjoy the benefits of optics on a handgun (I'm aware of about three models at this point, and I have no doubt there are more than that on the market). Having a single, bright red dot to focus on that can appear on the same focal plane as the target greatly speeds up the process of sight acquisition even for those of us who were not fortunate enough to possess normal vision. And until the last few months, my income didn't allow for me to explore this option without putting my financial security at risk. Now that I can comfortably afford to, it's something I intend to look into this year along with new eyeglasses, if my eye doc is one of those that understands the issue at hand--and assuming that I can get the time off to do so, I've been working more compulsory overtime than I'd like these last few weeks and I don't see it coming to a stop any time soon. :(

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