Time Out: End of an Era
Our plan was simple, straightforward, and devastating. Uncle Bentley taught Uncles T-Bone and Razor how to control Operation Overlord from the Turbokat's controls while the mech was in jet mode. The two of them would fly attack and distraction against Le Paradox while the four of us infiltrated the blimp itself to rescue Mom and Aunt Penelope, and to neutralize the Paradox Machine. Uncle T-Bone and Uncle Razor were free to do whatever they felt would keep Le Paradox's attention on them so he couldn't focus on stopping us.
Getting in was easy. What came next...
As Sly, Coco, Bentley, and Murray entered the blimp, they found themselves in a completely dark chamber with only a single spot of light shining down on where Carmelita and Penelope were tied up...somehow back in their normal attire. "Well, the only way this could be anymore obvious is if there was a neon sign above their heads proclaiming 'This is a Trap'," Sly murmured darkly.
"Unfortunately, the darkness in here isn't natural," Bentley observed as he scanned. "It's literally an artificial void in reality created by the Paradox Machine. Short of actually stepping into the light, we can't actually do anything about the darkness."
"Is that strict reality, or just scientifically speaking?" Murray asked, gesturing to Coco.
"There isn't any magic out there either," Coco spoke up. "Nothing for the Mask or Staff to latch onto."
"Then at least one of us needs to trigger the trap," Sly decided as he started to walk forward.
Coco frowned. She did not like this idea of a plan, but Le Paradox presently held most of the cards. They needed to let him think he was in control, or they would be stuck. With luck, he wasn't aware of how many had infiltrated his facility-
The entire blimp shook, and the darkness vanished, revealing Le Paradox floating over Carmelita and Penelope in a clawed mech while holding a glass capsule sized to cover the platform they were on. "Those idiots!" Le Paradox snarled as he turned in another direction. "Do they have any idea the damage they could cause to the continuum by improperly shutting down a Paradox Machine?"
"I don't think they care," Coco observed as she focused a sphere of darkness from the Mask into the hook of the Staff before hurling it, shattering the capsule.
"Gyah!" Le Paradox snapped out as he jerked back with his machine. "Are you insane?"
"Yes," Sly, Bentley, Murray, Coco, Carmelita, and Penelope said all at once, Sly having taken the time Le Paradox was distracted to free Carmelita and Penelope.
"You idiots!" Le Paradox screamed as he rushed deeper into the facility with his mech.
At that moment, blazes of light appeared around the group, revealing Bob, Rioichi, Tennessee Kid, Henriette, Sir Galleth, and Salim. "The kitties said you could use some backup," Tennessee Kid offered. "Somethin' about losin' yer cane and yer mind?"
Sly grinned. "I think we could use some help, yeah."
With all the Cooper Ancestors with us, we knew we could make it through. Each cane was sealed in a part of the blimp that - oddly enough - was uniquely designed for that Ancestor to get through. When I pointed that out when Riochi was leaping to his first cane, Penelope had an explanation.
"By the time the Machine itself was being built into the blimp, I'd already stopped wanting to help Le Paradox, but couldn't do so openly. So I spread the canes out in the circuitry so that the chambers would be designed so each ancestor would be able to get to their own cane, in hopes you guys would be able to win even if it came this far."
Looks like the plan worked. Though each time a cane was claimed from the circuitry, alarms went off as Le Paradox' troops charged in to try and fight us. However, we were far too numerous for the amounts sent in. They went down easily each time, though each time a new cane was claimed after the first, one of the Ancestors was sent back through time. Penelope explained it was the energy of the Paradox Machine breaking down and losing connection to those eras, forcing us to move faster to keep it from damaging things further if Le Paradox tried to maintain the link improperly. This, apparently, was the 'proper shut down procedure' he'd been worried about previously.
It didn't take long for the six of us to get through to Le Paradox, with everyone else having been sent back to their own eras. This confrontation was going to be...interesting.
Le Paradox turned atop his mech, a strange metal circle braced against the far wall behind him. "Ah, Coopers...I should have guessed it would be harder than I-"
"That's the Time Tunnel," Penelope explained to Sly and the others, pointing to the metal circle. "Like the time machine, but the controls are on one end with no way to manipulate it from the other. A good way to get rid of people, by tossing them through time. A sideline of the Paradox Machine research."
Le Paradox glowered at her. "Oh, why not just tell them all my plan and goals in the least dramatic way possible, huh? Steal all my thunder!"
"He wants to erase the Cooper name from history as petty vengeance for his father getting locked up for a crime he intended to frame your father for," Penelope told Sly quickly. "Unfortunately for his father, your father stole the diamond before he got there."
"So did he design that mech himself, or was that you?" Sly asked Penelope.
"Me before I started working against him in whatever ways I could sneak past Seft, so I'm afraid it's pretty well designed," Penelope admitted.
"It won't do you any good to enrage me!" Le Paradox snarled out. "With the last Cooper Cane installed in the Time Tunnel, I can restore my alterations at any time at will once it is activated, and there is nothing you can do to stop me as the modern era is anchored firmly in the links to time itself!" Reaching over, he threw the switch. "Behold!" The Time Tunnel spun...and began to spark madly as the entire facility began to crumble. "WHAT?"
"You idiot!" Penelope screamed out. "You used the wrong cane!"
"But it is Sly's Cane-"
"You forgot about Coco, you dunderhead!"
Le Paradox glanced from the Time Tunnel to Sly to Coco, who clutched her Cooper Cane. "...merde..."
Everything went white.
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You're damn right merde.
Oh. Well. Errors have been made.
Welp. This could turn out even worse than the actual ending.
And now they land in Equestria! :D
I take it this is how we get back to Equestria. Also, this chapter, as well as the one from A Rock in the Gulch last night, which were posted at the exact same times as their previous chapters last week shows you are alarmingly similar to Twilight Sparkle in terms of punctuality in regards to chapter releases, especially if it's a major holiday. While new chapters on Christmas are both a surprise and appreciated, we would completely understand if you broke your schedule for family.
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I don't celebrate Christmas.
Indeed
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Happy holidays nonetheless
Well hopefully the stupid skunk will finally learn that screwing with time is highly dangerous and in the end not worth the trouble. Please put me down for him somehow erasing himself from existence.
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Which holidays do you celebrate, and which holidays do you observe?
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That or a time lord coming to clean up time.
7 likes away from 777 upvotes!
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Hanukkah.
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Ah Then thanks for taking the time to update last week then as well Tatsurou
in the words of ZE CAPTIAN..."YOU BOOB!!"
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And T-Bone and Razor use Turbokat to blast out Tirek.
Dunderhead was such a schoolyard insult, it was both perfect and weirdly out of place at the same time
Merde va frapper le ventilateur.
That is what is just now going through Le Paradox's head right now.
If you think the bad guys cane win it all, this shows why.
Oh the gang is definitely crazy... Good at what they do.
Guess those security systems were an era by design.
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Crazy like a fo- er, raccoon.
Looks like the paradox machine is living up to its name.
Huh... I hadn't even considered the fact that Coco is for all intents and purposes the Cooper of the Present. Sly's can is no longer the last in the line, therefore, Le-Paradox royally fucked up...
I foresee an epic battle atop a pyramid. Just gonna throw that out there...
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so i wasnt the only one to see the missing link in the Cooper line...
*sigh* I'll go summon the Dragon.
HEY DIALGA, GET YOUR BIG BLUE TAIL IN HERE! SOMEONE BROKE TIME AGAIN.
a-HEM
And that, fillies and gentlecolts, is why Time traveling on the Time traveler's original universe tends to be taboo...
Looks like this story is getting ready to wrap up. It should be fun to see how Coco PWNs Tirek. :P
Popo voice: "Oh what did you maggots do this time? Hold on...." *claps hands together*
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Somehow pickpoketing the magic out of him?
Read the last line in TF2 Spy's voice
That reminded me of the Major in Hellsing Ultimate Abridged
Huh. I'd been wondering about the Coco cane...
Pffffft, fucking rookie mistake there bud, whew!
This is gonna be a... timely mistake...
...
Puns.
-Facepalm- Uy, pendejo...
Adoption counts!
In the words of Abridged Alucard, you done goofed.
"You idiot!" Penelope screamed out. "You used the wrong cane!"
"But it is Sly's Cane-"
"You forgot about Coco, you dunderhead!"
Le Paradox glanced from the Time Tunnel to Sly to Coco, who clutched her Cooper Cane. "...merde..."
Morgan Freeman: And it was this moment he knew he fucked up.
Remember the temperature control technique? I wonder when Coco will plaster those instructions onto the back of a certain page...
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.......I love you forever in a completely platonic way.
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To be fair, if the Mystery Dungeon series is any indication, if the timeline is messed up too much, Dialga it(?)self seems to be pretty badly mentally affected as well.
Still funny though. XD
I've been reading this story for a while, and just got done reading another one of your stories: "Another Hatchling" not to long ago and am proud to say I liked both of them. Comparing these to how I wrote my story (my only story), I have a long way to go before I'm this good at storytelling.
As a veteran writer, do you have any writing advice for a young writer like me? I'm curious because I don't think my story's dong very good. So I'm curious.
Now regarding the story, I think the plot's going along splendidly, can't wait to see what happens.
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I can give you one piece of general advice which is my watchword for all my writing.
Characters first. Before story, character. Before lore, character. Before epic moments, character.
Everything in the story must derive from the characters. When you come to the situation, fit yourself into the mindset of the character and imagine what they would say and how they would say it. Let everything in the story unfold from that naturally.
I see your one story is a crossover. Assuming it's not a retelling style but one where two worlds - or characters from two worlds - intermingle, focus on the character interactions. Choose which character pairing - or pairings - you want to work off of in terms of team ups and visualize how they would interact until it flows naturally. If you can't hear the characters saying these things naturally in their own voices, your readers won't either.
The thing about well written characters is that you can literally throw them into any situation and make a good story out of it. Your characters will carry your story...so make sure to put your all into making them strong characters, ones people will enjoy reading about and following the exploits of. So if you write your characters well, your story will soar on their backs.
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Reading this is like seeing an old grizzled frontliner give advice to a reservist coming up.
hahahahaha idiot
Can I recieve an answer to the full plot of Le Paradox by These questions Tats?
1: How exactly does Le paradox’s Machine supposed to stabilize the changes he wants? I read it, and still don’t really understand it. Is it supposed to be like all of his changes for each cane he has in his machine supplants the natural timeline?
2: Why and How Did Le Paradox make his mistake with the machine to cause it to explode? The Only clue being “You were supposed to use Coco’s cane idiot!?!” Didn’t really answer it now that I think of it, as Coco was from another world entirely.
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1. He was making changes to specific points in time while attempting to preserve certain other aspects of time. The canes from those time periods acted as anchors for what he was doing.
...to be perfectly honest, I don't actually understand how it was supposed to work in the game. I just built off how it was presented somewhat.
2. In order for that part of the machine to function properly, he was supposed to use "the last Cooper Cane", which he assumed to be Sly as he's the last of the Cooper Line by blood. However, Coco is adopted into the Cooper Clan, has been trained in all the techniques, and has her own Cane made in the same style as the Cooper Canes. As such, hers is "the last Cooper Cane".