Hey guys I'm a writer who just writes stuff. I like writing SonicxMLP so yeah.
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Sonic, a boy who's life is always hectic on his adventures while he's on his runs he comes across a purple haired girl named Twilight Sparkle who gets sent to Sonic's world from a failed spell she did.
Together these two polar opposites will go together in adventures and might end up getting more closer then apart.
Sonic and MLP characters are all humans in this story
Please Enjoy!
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This is the second Fanfic you've posted in a day. Is there something going on here?
I already had these stories ready, this ones a few chapters ahead, so it's just that.
If the cover's accurate, this story should be tagged "Equestria Girls" instead of just "Human".
7495742 It's the only picture I can find that was them close enough to being humans.
If you people are going to dislike it, can you at least look at the story first?
7531248 Save your breath, some people on this site will always prefer to downvote without a word. Just keep doing what you're doing, undeterred.
Ugh... sorry dude but I had to give a dislike.
First off, your sentence structure and grammar is atrocious. I suggest reading the writing guide provided on this site.
Secondly, your barely giving any time to explain things. Your pacing is way off. Slow down a little and let the reader get used to the surroundings. Describe the area. Don't just say "green hills" since that is extremely vague.
All in all, you've got a lot pf improvements to make my friend.
Cliche much dude? Good God, I could taste the cringe. And you say you wrote this months ago? You didn't bother to go back and edit this why!?
Dude, I'm not trying to be mean or anything. But I sincerely believe you should take the story down and rewrite it completely. I'm not telling you to scrap the idea completely, as there may be potential in this that I'm not seeing.
From the bottom of my heart, and with helping you at the forefront of my mind: I implore you to take the story down, get an editor, rewrite the story in a way that has basic grammar, sentenice structure, and doesn't have overused cliches, and then come back and see how the story does then.
Again, I'm only trying to help. If your mind translates this into mindless scorn or berating, that's your problem.
This is my advice, I think I've said enough.
Pfffffffff.... BAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAAAAA!!! Dude, what in the actual fuck was this bullshit!?
7558455 I'm sorry, is there something you wanna say to me?
7558910 Okay, sorry. That actually a pretty rude thing to say.
But in all seriousness, this story needs heavy rewrites. There are whole scenes that to be either removed or redone. And no, I can't help you with that. I am doing my own writing. But I can give you a few pointers if you'd like.
Well... that totally isn't borderline sexual predator status.
You guys can put the dislikes on this story all you want I'm still going with this!
7560162 And just to clarify I get better in later chapters!
This was my first story so, deal with it!
omg
7588110 And?
7588123 I wasn't ready. I just wasn't ready for the slam jam.
7588139 Ok are you trying to tell me something?
Here's some advice, when you have finished writing a chapter, read it out loud. You can catch a lot mistakes by doing this. Also, saying it's going to get better isn't up to you. You made the story, of course you think it's going to get better. The reader is the person who will catch most, if not all, errors made in the story. The more errors the reader catches, the less likely they will think the story is going to get better.
You might get less instant dislikes if you got rid of the "cover art", because that is just god awful looking. If you get an editor to help you, make sure it's someone who knows a lot about grammar; a lot of fan-fic writers tend to just get there friend to help them and that often ends with a lot of left over errors, because their grasp on grammar is about just as good as the author's.
7588993 THERE, I got rid of the cover art better?
7589373 It's a start.
Can someone please comment on this please? I feel like I'm ignored
i'm glad that you didn't make amy a psycho bitch because of her crush on sonic(unlike other fanfics) thought the amy fighting twilight because of her crush kinda feel a bit excessive
otherwise good work
also love how you implemented the PA announcements in the story,they where one of the best part of sonic colors(haven't played the game yet)
7882871 Yeah I tried to tone her down a little. I thought I did there fight a little good.
I'm glad you liked the PA announcements as I found them funny.
Sweet story! I hope the next chapter comes out soon.
1: great chapter. And 2: Isn't Sunset a good guy now?
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1.Thanks.
2.No she isn't. Not yet in this story, didn't you read the A/N at the end of the chapter?
Ok, this really needs a lot of grammatical and format editing. It'll get you more likes.
Why does this story have so many dislikes? I mean, it can't be that bad, right? ...Right?
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It’s because when I started the story out in this site it has a lot of grammatical mistakes. Though I’ve fixed them
uhhhhh part of this chapter is missing like at the start where did espio come from
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No I’m sure I didn’t skip anything here.
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Wait are you seriously saying twilight is on par with a multiversal busting being (sonic)! How!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!???????????????????
Seems the haters are jealous in the plot you have given to your art work, well I can say for sure it is a great story with great plot despite the grammatical errors but it is still readable and still have some interesting plot, so keep it up^^
please finish story I like it
I thought it was going n Emerald Hill
Danmit!!!
Not again
I love dis story
plz ship shadash eventualy
The ligth barrier: ¡NOOO! ¡Culo!
hay when will the next chapter come out?
Good chapter 👍
Good chapter 👍
Good chapter 👍
Good chapter 👍