• Member Since 7th Aug, 2016
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Gpizano


Just a pegasister who likes art, fanfics, and perchance writing.

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Edit: Look I'm too lazy to change the long description since it's basically a summation of the lore of this world and gives you terms. So if you just want to get to all the antics, you can skip this and the intro since the intro chapter just establishes how things are between the Mane 6.

In the land of Equestria, the very foundations of it's culture and history all come from the great equine god Shadowfax, a horse so powerful it shaped the very lands, could defeat one thousand enemies with but a kick of his hooves, and bestowed magical gifts unto the race of man, creating three different factions within the race. The Arion, gifted with the ability of flight and command of their domain in the sky, the Macha, born with strength and hardiness with mastery of the land and nature, and the Hrimfaxi, connected with the mystical energy within the world and the ability to exert their will to control it. Yet there are four, rumored to be favored by the great Shadowfax himself, that have the gifts of all three and know as the Dyaus, who rule the land to help maintain peace and harmony through the lands...

But that's enough lore, for there is a greater tale unfolding within the town of Ponyville, with a great question lying at it's center... how can an apple farmer get her chores around the farm done when she has a bevy of women vying for her attention while every other week some monster, trouble maker, or powerful being comes around to try and wreck shit?

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Yeah I'm not trying super hard with this one. Well, I will still put in effort of course, but it's like I guess I wanted something silly with the possibility of drama. I blame watching Steven Universe. So Applejack is the main character because she's awesome.

I REGRET NOTHINGGGGGG! *jumps out of window*

Chapters (7)
Comments ( 67 )

7489722 Ugh, are you kidding? Pears are the worst! THey wait for you to literally leave the room and then they ripen and rot!

Freaking pears, hard as a rock when I leave the room, then when I come back and pick one up, it falls apart in my hand!

7489759 Hey, knowledge is power. Give me time and I'll have THE DEVICE powered up!

7489769 As if being mean is going to stop her.

Friendship is magic, scrub.

Comment posted by Fracturedheart deleted Aug 18th, 2016

7489795 Lady (I think based on the pic?), it's all good here.

I've got three other super serious stories I'm writing and I just need something I want to have fun with.

If I wanna write that Applejack defeats Nightmare Moon through the sheer power of being sexy? I CAN DO IT!

If I wanna write that Pinkie Pie pops out of a birthday cake in a bikini to try and seduce Applejack on her birthday? I CAN DO IT!

If I want to write that Applejack needs to beat a professional boxer to save the town of Ponyville from being bought and turned into a casino strip? I. CAN. DO. IT!

Now get ready for the future when I bring out the fan service binkini chapter, because this is the internet and I can choose to be as terrible as I want with heck to the consequences! U. S. A! U. S. A! :pinkiecrazy:

7489851 Man, I'm so touched! :pinkiesad2:

But now how to respond... I must dig deep within my soul to find the proper music!

Nailed it.

I have to say, I never thought that I'd find myself interested in a story like this, but it works really well. Applejack wouldn't be my first pick for protagonist of a harem story, but she's the perfect mix of oblivious and endearing... More so really than any other member of the Mane 6, so she's the perfect choice. It's bad that I'm hoping for some real drama and some hard times for her, but that goes hand and hand with the climax of stories like these.

I'm really curious to see where this goes.

7489883 Woot! Well I guess we're both gonna see how this goes then! :rainbowlaugh:

I blame watching Steven Universe.

Does this mean that this story will have a character who's based off of Jasper?

Nobody cares background pone got harem.

downvoted

Honestly, frontloading the description with a bunch of super-pretentious half-baked mythos is what's turning me away from this. That's just a very inelegant and unattractive way to make a first impression.

However, I would like to thank you for bringing up the idea that there are five other national heroes who could be at the center of a harem story as opposed to Twilight, as well as for admitting that you weren't trying especially hard with this one.

7490100 Eh, since I'm basically bending the laws of time and space for this to happen (don't eat a grapefruit by the way, the duct tape won't hold), I figure eh, I'll make some mythos like a hot pancake to the face and anyone with the fortitude to continue, kudos!

Mythos history out of the way instead of dedicating a page to it, fill in the blanks as I gooooooo! *rides horse towards the sunset*

...Story sucks but I like your guts to do something as stupid as this. A like flipped upside down.

7490618 Hey, I'll take it. :rainbowwild:

I figured no one would really like it but hey, I'm having fun. XD

I gave it a like solely because the title made me laugh.

This is not serious at all, and I love it.
Applejack is best pony. :ajsmug:
Why are there so many dislikes? It's a not-at-all-serious-comedy!
Also, I started reading this yesterday, then played Warframe for a few hours, then ate dinner, fell asleep, woke up at 2 in the morn, and then read the rest.
In the paragraph in which thou spoke of the young Scathian lad, thou hast misspelled the great and honourable Shadowfax's name.
In the paragraph detailing the fight, you said that it was a left punch followed by a left punch.

7491070 ZOUNDS THOU ART CORRECT!

Well played good sir. :moustache:

Yes. Applejack is best pony...

I don't care about the story....
All i know is

She is the best.

And with that, Pinkie Pie has taken the lead! The others need to step up their game.

7493870 LOL. I just have to wonder whose next and how they'll top Pinkie. :rainbowlaugh:

Ah, this is funny! I'm usually not one for harem stories, but with this comedy I'll foollow this for sure!

7489795 Amusing how ironic you're being with the term "sad", since your entire existence on this site is porn and unwanted videos. Now that's sad.

7515683 Heyyyy, come on buddy. We settled the matter already, no need to harsh the good vibes.

7515703 Still pretty early. Wanted to put my two cents in for that little conversation.

Since I'm here, might as well put my two cents in for this story. It's a decent read, though personally I was put off by the sheer amount of description of each and every character that we all know in our hearts. I get it that it may be necessary at times, but again I feel you put a little too much effort into describing the character's common appearance.

The comedy is decent as well. Not knee slapping but not an eye roll. It's enough to get a smirk out of me, which really is a personal taste in humor I guess. I didn't get the comedic thing from the whole Harem idea, but more from the ending bit with the final dialogue with Applejack.

Though, without the personal feelings towards the story, it's vocabulary and overall plot is A'okay. I don't see many errors in this piece, which is obviously good. And all around worth it.

7515724 Well good to hear, glad you think it's okay. :pinkiehappy:

Edit: Sorry if this was short, it was like... 4am when I replied and I was really tired. :twilightblush:

But I do see everything you are saying and yeah, I could've done descriptions better buuuuut this was just for fun so I thought I'd just dump everything in the description and the intro chapter, both which are totally optional to read and more for myself because I am a lore nerd of Tolkien levels and I'd introduce all the lovely ladies available like in a game.

So yeah, glad you still liked it though. :pinkiehappy:

Ahahah, tsundere Dash unable to express her feelings and meddlesome Twilight XD

7516176 Hey, Princess of Magic! Just remember to put up anti-scrying spells if one ever comes to your town. :trollestia:

7516671 Dude, you can't stop the fire! It's always been burning since the world's been turning!

I don't know what but that song keeps popping up into my head.

BUT I SHALL NEVER STOP! :rainbowwild:

Subtelty, thy name is Rarity!
And Fluttershy's comeback! Girl's draw out her claws!

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