He hoped to venture south.
He didn't want to go too far, lest he missed the comfort of home. More than anything, comfort is what he seeks, though it was all in short supply. As the black sun began setting in the distance, he set up camp, resigning to his nightly yearnings of a better world.
She hoped to venture north.
She couldn't bring herself to fail, not when the world around her falls apart. What she seek is the end, yet it forever remains in the distance. Still, she carried on even as the red moon rises, not wanting to waste a moment's breath when a moment is all it takes to build a better world.
Even in a world of liars, however, fate had other plans.
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Chapters (8)
An interesting start. The language you're using is thick and heavy, but it helps set a serious and dark mood. There are a few typos and dropped words, though, which stand out more strongly given the complexity of the prose.
I have a guess about who these two are. If I'm right, this could be an interesting way to handle her origin story.
cover art reminds me of this
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i greatly enjoy the story
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Think I fixed some of the mistakes, though I might've missed out on a few. Knowing me, that's probably the case.
I do like a good guessing game. We'll see if your guess is correct then.
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That is an eerily similar picture.
Not really into the Souls lore, though I do read up about them from time to time to draw inspiration for some things, this story being one of them, interestingly enough.
Glad you liked the story.
I finally got around to continue reading this and I'm glad I did!
The atmosphere and pure bleakness of it all is heavy, for lack of a better word and not in a bad way by any means
. The mood is naturally conveyed, nothing is being shoved down our throats. There's a perfect amount of world building while keeping a kind of mystery to it, and I genuinely eager to find out more about the world itself! This definitely looks like it'll be an interesting journey for these two.
Here's hoping everything goes as well as it can go for them!
If the main characters in this story were voiced, what would they sound like?
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Good question. I try to imagine the voices in my head as I write them so I have a rough idea of how they sound like, though I'm not sure if I could describe them correctly. Worth a shot though.
The magician would probably be a little baritone with a hint of gruffness. Cumberbatch comes to mind.
The filly's probably reflects her overzealousness, but there's a sense of maturity as well. Similar to Sweetie Belle.
Gwendolyn has a brash, tomboyish personality, so I think Rainbow Dash but a lot deeper and a lot less raspier.
Zaidi's voice would be husky and somewhat graceful. Think Snape but with a much more friendlier disposition.
Avery, I believe, would fit perfectly with the voice of Matthew McConaughey. Lol.