Sunset sighed and glanced at her clock. It read 3:48 am. Pretty much everyone else in the city was in bed, and the other apartments around her were silent. So, she sat in her bedroom, at her desk, simply staring at the blank paper. She sniffled quietly and began to write.
Dear AppleJack, Fluttershy, Rainbow Dash, Rarity, and Pinkie Pie.
I would like to start this note out by saying that I am sorry for any and all pain I have caused you five throughout the years. I was a horrible bitch, but I've changed. You guys could never know how much I regret my actions. They will forever haunt me. It's funny, really. I knew I had changed, and I thought you guys knew it too. But, this Anon-A-Miss has ruined that. Now I know that I was just a burden and you guys couldn't wait to get rid of me. That's why after the first thing that could give you five any doubt happened, you cut me off. Like a flower. I felt I was blooming with the help from you guys, but now you've cut off my stem. And just like a flower, I feel that I am slowly dying. How could you do that to me? After everything we've done, after everything I've done, you just turned on me like that? If you guys truly respected me as your equal, we could have talked about this. I could have explained myself and we could have worked through this together. But no, it went straight to, 'You're not welcome here!' 'yeah, get out!' 'secret stealer!', and possibly the worst of all. 'You're not our friend!'. Wow. You guys knew about my past, you knew my secrets. You knew how after I left Equestria, I almost killed myself. You knew that there have been so many days that I feel like I'm dead. That I still struggle to fall asleep and to force myself up in the mornings to face the day. And you cut me off so easily. Did you want me to do this? Probably. Hell, it's what the whole school wants. I'm sorry that I didn't prove myself to you enough to make you trust me. I'm sorry if this note doesn't make much sense, I'm not in the best places right now. I'm just so...isolated. I had you five, and now I have no body. I can't take it anymore. I hate this feeling. I despise this feeling. I hate walking through the halls and feeling everybody look at me. I hate going places alone. I hate this constant silence. I guess I should wrap this up now. But before I go, I have one final question. This is mostly for AppleJack, Rarity, and Rainbow Dash. Now that we know the truth, how did you three confront your sisters? Did you guys yell at them? Did you kick them out? Well, no, I didn't expect you to. After all, they are your family. Did you give them a small punishment and then hold them and say you loved them, that it would be okay? Why did they get a small punishment? Was it because they were crying? Did I not cry enough for you? Was falling to my knees and sobbing, begging you, on MULTIPLE OCCASIONS, not enough tears for you? I guess I really am worthless to you. After this, I only ask you all of one thing. The next time Twilight shows up and asks where I am, tell her. Don't sugar-coat it. Tell her what you all did. Now it is time for my story to finish. Goodbye to everyone I once thought of as a friend.
The End.
~Sunset Shimmer
***
Sunset woke up spluttering. It took her a moment for her eyes to adjust, though things still looked blurry. She recognized her shower curtain. the cold water was running into her eyes, making it even harder to see.
"Sunset!? Are you awake? Sunset!" She heard someone's voice from behind her. It sounded familiar. She glanced down and saw a tan arm wrapped around her waist.
"It's not working! Try again!" shrieked a hysteric voice. She felt a finger slip into her mouth and down her throat. At the same time, the arm around her waist flexed. These combined caused her to lean forward and wretch, everything washing down the drain in front of her. Everything. Even the pills she had taken. In a moment, she realized what had happened and panicked. She flailed about for a moment and saw more blurry shapes enter the room.
"N-No!" she sobbed, tears falling already. "No! Don't! Please. Please just let me go! No, please, I don't want this, please!" she cried, leaning forward and hugging herself tightly around the arms. She saw and heard the other people in the room crowd around the tub. With one final "please" from Sunset, she fell unconscious again.
***
Next time Sunset woke, she heard the steady hum of electricity all around her. A light was directly above her head, and it made her flinch and groan. She felt sick and nauseous. A hand tentatively touched hers and she jolted lightly, straining to lift her head up. Her eyes were met by wide, scared, sad green ones.
"Sunset," AppleJack sighed. She heard rustling all around her and knew that the other girls had all sat up. Sunset swallowed thickly, feeling more tears prick at her eyes.
"Why?" she croaked after a minute. AppleJack looked at the others, confusion clear on her face.
"Why what, Sugarcube?"
Sunset wasn't sure why, but the fact that AppleJack called her Sugarcube made her angry. After everything she had said and done, she dared to call her such an endearing title? Sunset grit her teeth and clenched her fist, glaring at the light above.
"Why didn't you let me die?" she hissed. The tension in the room could've been cut with a knife. She didn't have to look at them to know they wore looks of horror, staring at each other in shock.
"Sunset, dear, I-"
"No!" she growled, cutting off Rarity. "Don't call me that. Do not call me dear"
Rarity looked hurt but closed her mouth and stared at her palms. No one spoke for a while until Pinkie let out a small sob from her corner.
"Sunset, I'm so sorry" she whispered. Sunset rolled her eye to watch her. Pinkie seemed duller, and sat in a ball in her chair. Her hair was flat, and was falling in long ribbons around her. Her face was flushed and she was shaking as she now openly sobbed.
"Please Sunset, we're all sorry. Please forgive us" came Rainbow Dash's gravelly voice next. She met Sunset's eye and shuddered at the deadness of it. It was dull, swimming in pools of pain and sorrow. She gave no response.
"We're sorry Sunset. You don't have to forgive us, but please just know that we all love you so, so much" came Fluttershys shaky voice. The others nodded in agreement.
Sunset just sighed and went back to staring at the ceiling.
"Please leave."
"Sunset, 'ah-"
"Leave. Now."
Four of them got up, seeing the swift nod AppleJack gave them and walked out the door. Sunset refused to look at or speak to Applejack. Finally, AppleJack sighed and stood, letting go of Sunsets hand.
"I love you." was all she said before crossing the small room and closing the door softly behind her, leaning her forehead against its cool surface and finally allowing some of her tears to escape. Before she left, she could swear she heard sobbing from the other side.
lets see more soon
I want to see where this goes.
p.s. There's an Equestria Girls tag
I'm not liking that romance tag...
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I'll try to get the next chapter done soon!
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Chapter 2: coming soon! And sorry, I didn't notice the tag. I'll change it, thanks!
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Yeah I just added it because I'm trying to hint towards a relationship between Sunset and AppleJack. Well, not even a relationship, but more of just AppleJack having a crush on Sunset. I don't know, I might remove it later. Hope you enjoyed the story regardless!
7477261 On the subject of the romance, i'd say it depends on if it's going to go somewhere. if it's going to stay one-sided, and hardly ever be mentioned, then drop it. If it actually goes somewhere and becomes a bigger part of the story, then keep it.
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That's the problem. I'm not sure yet if I want to expand upon it at the end or not. I suppose I'll leave it up, and when I finish this story decide to keep it or not.
7477684 Well do you have someone to use as a sounding board? sometimes just being able to work your problems out in the real world helps things move forward.
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No, not really. Does it matter though? It's not like my personal life impacts the story.
7477820 No No, problems as in your issue with not being sure where the romance plays into the story. sometimes, pitching your story ideas to someone helps work through whatever issues you may be hung up on. even if they don't really offer any suggestions that are good, just talking through it can help. But it's just a suggestion.
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Yeah, I don't really have many brony friends, so it's really hard to find someone for that. Thanks anyways.
Oooh, typos! Getting scary already!
Lol, but seriously, I love Fics with this premise! Definitely going to be in my favorites.
I'm hopin you keep the possible romance idea. How it coudl go no idea.
I do admit i'm the type who favs true love conquers all, but in this case.
i won't mind the she blew it, she lost her chance forever ending.
Which will turn around into more forgiveness crap, nnope.
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ugh sorry! I'm using word pad which doesn't have a spell check, so I usually rely on the filter on here for that. Glad you liked it though, and thanks for the fav!
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I'm thinking that Sunset won't have it in her heart to forgive AJ. Still not fully sure though!
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I'm actually not sure if I want Sunset to forgive the Mane 5. Or, if she does, it will take a really long time.
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That more realstic, it take a long time before she could forgive them fully, let alone trust them agaild find new friends and a new love as well.
thatw as so ahrd for me tow rite, as i love the ide aof Apple jack/Sunset as well, but int his story it could not happen due to what happened. Just have to wait and see.
7481000 I guess we will
Do you think you could edit this so it has tab spacing and paragraph breaks? It's really hard to read a run on paragraph like this.
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Yeah, I'll definitely do that next time. The way my writing program is doesn't really allow for blank lines or asterisks, it just automatically deletes them. Sorry for the inconvenience.
update as soon as you can
when are u updating? i'm dying to see more!
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I'll try to update soon, I've just gotten really bad writers block. I'll try to finish it soon though!
7527697 you alive
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Barely :-: Sorry it's been so long, I have a ton of school work rn
7556886 do you have any friends who are willing to stand up for you make a sequel you know to take off the burden of having to do fanfiction for you you know because school is important I understand that so is life
7556886 I feel you man
Put school first, come back to this only when you can.
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Not really, lol. I'm working on a chapter 2, so I hope it'll be out soon.
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Lol thanks I will, I'm adding bits to the story when I have time between school
Uhm...... You don't exactly leave someone who just tried to commit suicide alone.
You get them under observation and psychological help of some sort, to prevent any further attempts!
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That's all addressed in the upcoming chapter. Sorry it's taking so long, massive writers block :/
7591997 Then I'll hold further questions till then
7592871 Okay. Sorry again to everyone for the massive wait!
when are you making moar!
7611406 Agh I have part of the next chapter waiting but I just can't seem to get the end right. I'm really, really sorry!
7616092 by 'the end' you mean the title of the story or the ending of said chapter?
7627956 lmao a little bit of both, I guess
7477261 Awesome! Sunjack is way underrepresented in this fandom!
WELL, I'm guessing it's the end of 'The End'.
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True. But I think those five would had done more harm, considering they were the reason she did this. She needs an expert who will listen and understand her, not five 'friends' who quickly turn against her when something comes up.
7647551 The thing is that they can't do any worse to Sunset... they already made her suicidal!
Thus in this situation, the correct procedure would be to call an ambulance and tell them that there were an attempted suicide, and the wait UNTILL the ambulance personell arrive and take over!
Sunset is in severe depression and suicidal.... the proper response in for her being placed on observation to determine how severe her case is and if she should be placed under 'suicide watch' immediately, while she's getting the help she needs through the proper channels and from the right institutes.
7647703 They didn't leave Sunset in her apartment... Sorry if I made it unclear, but they get her to the hospital. That's where the whole end scene for chapter 1 took place. She woke up again in the hospital with them all there. Then she made them leave. She was still in the hospital though. Hope this helped!
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This is what I was imagining. Thank you for quoting it better than I could!
Update as soon as you can
7700205 Dude calm down. I'm taking all AP classes and I'm in a full time club. It takes a lot of time, and you're being a dick. If you're going to be a bitch, just unfollow it please.
Bit confused here with this chapter. How did Sunsets friends know what she was doing you seem to have skipped that part within this story.
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Agreed.
This was sloppy and heavy-handed. You really could use an editor to help fix a lot of these mistakes. As for the heavy-handedness, the letter was a decent start, but the hospital scene was pretty lacking. Emotional scenes like that tend to rely more on showing instead of telling. You just told us everything and gave the scene no time to develop. This greatly lessened the impact of the scene.
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Quit criticizing everyone's stories, they write how they write. If you don't like that then too bad.
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Dude, are you just gonna do this every month? Do I need to explain to you what grammar is and why it exists?