Interesting... VERY interesting, I'll be watching this one closely...

Let me guess, suicde sqaud was your insperation

Ermagerd! This is great! Although, dang it! Now I kinda want to do something like this!

A few pointers for you, good sir:

Fragmentation from the blast was lodged in his right leg, and splinters of wood and glass were burrowed into his left shoulder and right forearm, causing perfuse bleeding. 

The ending part where it says, 'causing profuse bleeding' is awkward. It sounds like something a doctor would say. Perhaps reference the shrapnel slicing open an artery or vein? It is your choice of course, but it would flow better with the rest of the scene if you changed that part.

You can't just charge into battle blindly. Leave the investigating to the authorities.

Uh, if they RULE the Crystal Emilre, why did Cadence refer to the police as 'the authorities'? There can hardly be a higher authority than the rulers of a country. Why didn't she say 'police' or 'Guard'? I am confused.

Cadence tried discouraged Shining Armor, but she knew she could not sway him once he made up his mind.

Round One of Spot The Typo.

"What do you  mean 'something dangerous'?" Cadence wondered; she had never seen her husband so frantic before.

He never said 'something dangerous'. Furthermore he was anything but frantic. Frantic indicates vigorous to the point of uselessness.

Other than the things I mentioned, it's not bad. I do not like anthro stories, but a trade is a trade. I'll read the next chapter when you post your comments on the Prologue of my story: The Unity Pact.

As promised, I am here to review.

First off, not really a fan of the inclusion of anthro. Personal preference, but I really feel it doesn't add anything to a lot of stories. If anything, it detracts, because we have to keep thinking of the normally pony characters in human form, which is really disconcerting and immersive breaking in a lot of stories. Same reason I'm not a fan of human stories that don't have a huge reason to be human.

A similar issue, at least starting off, is the AU tag. It's listed up there at the top, but it's not made very clear as to what's changed. Without that frame of reference to indicate what's different from the show, I've got no real way of telling what's different from the show and what's similar. Maybe consider adding more context for that? I don't know.

Last big issue I have (really sorry that I'm mostly highlighting issues) is how dark it's been starting off. I've got nothing against dark stories- I think that, handled well, they can do a really good job in making us think. But my thoughts on a lot of dark stories are the same as my thoughts on a lot of AU- there isn't significant enough explanation as to why the story is dark, when the MLP show itself is rainbows, sunshine and friendship problems requiring the equivalent of the national guard to handle them. It's something I find myself bringing up a lot, but I do think a lot of dark stories struggle in the regard of not explaining how their different from the normally cheerful Equestria.