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Rainbow skies


Hey what up im rainbow skies this is my profile thing hope you like my stories and some other stuff as well but stay frosty later

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good start, but there's a lot of grammatical errors, but still a good start.

"*yawn* sorry but i dont want to leave just yet because of this power but im gonna go to bed you wann join me"i said sitting up.
"Me in bed with you are you trying to make my dad kill you?"she asked.
"Do you wanna join or not cause i dont want you to freez on me plus you lpst the bet so you got to do what ever i say tomorrow"i said and she puffed out her cheeks.
"Fine but you better not tell know pony about this got it"she said and climbed in next to me.
"Alright not a soul" i said laying down i felt very sleepy i put the blanket over us i was out in a instant.

I SHIP IT!!!

Is Rainbow Dash not going to punished for attempted murder of a minor? Especially since it's the son of death I would imagine Luna at least make sure she never tries it again since Celestia can be a little soft sometimes. Even then I think Celestia would punish her for that.

7462662 dont worry she will get whats coming to her AHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAAHAH!

Sorry

oh my god rainbow wtf just out right tried to kill a child and over a bite mark that doesn't mean the same thing as a normal hickey the shame the shame.

7463042 i mean he is the son of death but yeah i have one twisted mind i feel ashamed...and its gone

7463059 i'm kinda hopeing shell go through a mental breakdown once she finally realizes that she tried to kill a child even if he was deaths son

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Im liking it, but what mecha said.

7463076 dont worry i got it covered you just got to wait

7463994 If you need someone to edit for you I can.

This story is is just... just awful. I mean, I couldn't even get pasted the scene where the (100% Gary Stu) main character ran from his school. Not only is this bad in both the sense of the story and the grammar, but this has descended to the level of the worst fic in existence, "My Immortal." The character is awfully angsty and his situation is way too predictable. My friend and I even made a small game of guessing what ridiculous thing would happen next to the character. We didn't get very far, considering we had to stop reading this piece of illiterate trash. What's sad though, was that every time we guessed, we were right.

All in all, this is one of the most cringey and illiterate pieces of "literature', and it would need something not short of divine intervention to bring this story out of the dregs of this website.

Well besides the grammar I like this story very denomicy and HAHA to rainbow crash

death is not good or evil death is needed to keep balance

7471151 2 things i want to get off my chest

1. You need an editor to fix your grammar problem

2. When will the next chapter be out?

7478560 um to ansewr your first question i i dont have one and is looking for one and for your second question um maybe later today

Is it just me that likes Blue Blood? Every fic I read with Blue Blood in it he gets treated with nothing but disrespect, and it's starting to make me wonder if I'm the only person who likes him.

hes not dead almost dead maybe

Sheer WHY:raritycry:


For some reason I would want Sheer and Donovan back together.

But thats my opinion.

Me venting my frustration of Sheer down below.

Pay no mind.

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Sheer f%$# you for what you have done to Donovan. You gave up to fast, you should of always had hope of him returning.

7485719 yeah sorry dude but i have another in mind but it will not happen right away or will it hehehe

I seem to like this story more than my other ones

7487670 when is the next chapter?

7490057 um either in a few minutes or tomorrow

7490114 hope in a few minutes but i would not mind reading this tomorrow, it gives me something to do

Great story just needs a editor for the grammer

So why had you let Sheer Wind give up on him so easily?

7492318 i understand but still i can't help but feel like it was just for the sake of the plot trust dude half the times i don't like that i get enough of that from the show

should the either of the princesses go after rin

what do you mean by that? Isn't the princesses already his friends? I do not see the point in that

7507828 yeah your right im gonna change that

I'm liking it but the grammar, punctuation, and capitalization.

I'm vary happy with this chapter is very interesting to read keep up a good work update more soon :twilightsmile:

7511492 glade you thinkits intresting and there will be an update very soon

Oh my god *shakes head* are you serious now? Your going that route? Really? Your having him be the biological son of both Link and Princess Zelda from the "Legend Of Zelda: Ocarina Of Time"? I do not know what to think of that

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