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Indulgence


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Although they may seem as permanent as either the Sun or Moon, any single story can take on a great myriad of forms, each as infinitely changeable as the next. They start with as many guises as there are perspectives on events, gaining ever more facets and different flourishes with each retelling. This is most true of the grandest, those tales which have passed into myth and legend, stories of betrayal, banishment, regret, and the way back.



Great thanks to Haphazard for pre-reading.

Also thank you to anyone who reads my stuff.

Notes:
• Titles are based on the Kübler-Ross model of grief
• I use the word pegasus with both a singular and plural meaning, rather than pegasi, due to personal preference. Apologies if it is an annoyance
• I welcome any and all feedback

Chapters (5)
Comments ( 4 )

I like it. Good job:twilightsmile:
I especially loved the ending :raritystarry:

Wow, what a start. I am definitely intrigued by this and can't wait for more. :twilightsmile:

I feel that it is unfortunate for me to say, but I just can not keep reading. It seems that the author is more concerned with bombarding you with atmosphere, rather than actually fleshing out the characters themselves by simply giving them some lines that are not inner diouloge. I have read many stories so I know that I do not lose my train of thought so often while reading, that is unfortunely the problem I seem to have, and I believe it is mostly do to the problem I mentioned before, while I do not mind being more articulate with your word choice, you should not do it so much to the point where the sentences start to blend together, in turn making it hard to follow.

7976946 Fair point. I'm aware i'm prone to getting a bit tangential, it's a fault i'm continuing to work on. Thanks for the comment

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