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When a landslide hits the Pie Family Rock Farm following the previous night's rain shower, Maud of all ponies becomes troubled after seeing so many different crystals all at once. It was because of how the glow they gave off remind her of Rarity, and the time they spent in Manehatten. Although she did an amazing job at not showing it to anypony face to face, Maud would be emotionally touched anytime something shiny came into her view. Considering the sudden change of events, however, she hadn't much choice but to be near them. After sifting through numerous amounts of gemstones scattered as far as the eye could see, Maud ends up finding possibly the most beautiful diamond of them all, and aims to send it to Rarity as a gift.

The only other pony to discover all of this was even happening would be Marble, Maud Pie's sister.

Special thanks for slight assistance in the first few chapters goes to Socks.

Chapters (7)
Comments ( 22 )

"Which one's?" she says

A rock and a hard place.

...And later, Maud receives a beautiful dress and Fluer receives a rock.:twilightsmile:

Anyway, you know that a moon is a month right? That's a slow postal service.

7793314 I did, but I guess I forgot. :rainbowderp: Knew I should've just used nights.

Phew. I was worried at the start that Rarity would hastily use the diamond for the "something missing" in her dress. Possibly missing the note entirely or until the dress was sent off.

Rarity blinked again, and said, “Err… Maud and I don’t like each other in that way, Pinkie.”

Uh oh

Pinkie nodded with a sarcastic attitude. “Well, duh! You’d be sending it to her because you love her like a sister. Right?”

Godammit Pinkie.

Maud has one obstacle in her way.

She's off to see the mare.

Oh Rarity, you overwhelmed the poor mare, just give her time.

Great story. Keep up the great work.

“I knew it!” Rarity didn’t seem mad, but she didn’t seem happy, either. Just that she was right. “Which means… Pinkie?”

Huh. Doesn't this make you suggesting Rarity send a token of love to Maud without checking to see if Rarity actually returned her feelings first a jerk move, Pinkie?

I mean, why didn't you ask this question back then, instead of after all this:

Pinkie rubbed her chin in deep thought, and answered with a question of her own. “Do you think you like her that way as well?”

An interesting bit of leading. I started worried that she would thoughtlessly use the diamond for the dress, and end worried about the aftermath of the inevitable misunderstanding that is going to take place.

Who is Blinkie?

I liked this chapter enough to want more and finally I took the first step in this story. I nearly know nothing about it, but I hope there is a chance for a sequel should I notice that I want more after this whole story.

Just as she suspected, it was Princess Luna.

oh got, I'm having a good mood today it seems, well not really because I get easily annoyed by this again.
I mean when there is a dream that Luna has always come to the rescure, well alsways is maybe a bit to much, not everyone is using her to solve a problematic dream but sometimes it just doesn't needs her in my opinion.

Luna blushed, knowing all too well that she couldn’t answer that directly. Instead, she teased, “Let’s just say that because of events in her life, she doesn’t seem to be looking for a relationship with a stallion right now.”

why the blushing?, had she watched a dream movie again? I dislike it if she doesn't knows privacy and takes a short vacation in someones dreams.

I can already say while it was kind of sweet there was not much going on, which makes me want to have more.

“It happened at the Grand Galloping Gala one year. He was attending, and I was there…” She grunted, and continued, “He expected me to treat him as if he were a mare! It… It was utterly ridiculous, Maud!”

I hope this isn't the equivalent of what we have with how they view man as better than woman sometimes, you know like Mares being better than Stallions here.
I honestly don't like it at all and prefer it if they think of themself as equal.

Maud saw Rarity moving out of the right corner of her eye. She weighed herself against her desk calmly, and said, “He’s met another dragon, you see. Her name’s Ember… Princess Ember...”

Rarity admit you was never interessted in him.......please.
I just can't look over his baby appearance and the show makes him look like an idiot.

“And what about you? Hmm, Maud? What about your gift to me?” Rarity’s mouth came within inches of Maud’s, close enough that she could see the emotion deeply hidden within Maud's eyes. “Did you send your gift because you like me as a sister… Or…?”

Is this rarity being curious or rushing head first into a relationship?

i can image the following talk

Pinkie : Is something wron Maud?, you can tell me anything
Maud : Well it's....I have emotions Pinkie.
Pinkie (laughing) : Of course Maud your a Pony.
Maud : ......they are scary......

Meanwhile, downstairs in the boutique, Rarity looked at herself in the mirror. She was trying to figure out why Maud would run off the way she did, and whether or not she should have chased after her. “I could check the station…”

really? it kind of looked like she actually knew pretty good what she did there.

Pinkie rubbed her chin in deep thought, and answered with a question of her own. “Do you think you like her that way as well?”

Well Pinkie she doesn't already have to see her as a lover already.

well not exactly bad, but I thougth this could have been something more, maybe the ending wasn't so effective because of how the rest looked like?
It seems like there was supposed to happen a bit more.

A nice short little romance story.

The first 5 chapters were wonderful and if Maud x Rarity ever comes to pass, this would be how I imagine it would happen.

However, the last 2 chapters felt so rushed and so out of place in the story.

I was chugging along with the story, enjoying the view but then for the last 2 pitstops, the train went too fast and the scenery whirled by without recognition. Having said that, it wasn't as bad as some stories I've read where they immediately punch it into hyperdrive, but my point still stands.

It was a very nice cute little story but the last two chapters kinda ruined it for me.

Signing out, VShuffler42

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