• Member Since 25th Jul, 2016
  • offline last seen Oct 9th, 2019

Mystic_Hooves


Hello! I'm an ageplayer in the mid-twenties, just looking for some cute stories and aspiring to create some!

T

Rainbow Dash and Twilight Sparkle wanted a break from the constant pressure of their daily life. After casting a spell supposed to help them, some unexpected changes happens, and they will need the help of their friends to get trough it!
**Warning: Regression and Diaper usage content.**

Chapters (2)
Comments ( 16 )

English isn't your first language? Well, if that's true, you should probably secure a proofreader that knows it well. Grammar can make or break your story.

7428578
I may do this if needed; I know that Grammar is important, that's why I put this warning. For now, I already have a friend that helped with some of my recurring mistakes.

7429379
I have been known to edit stories. If you like, I can act as your proofreader.

7429450
Thank you for the offer. I might send you a message when my first chapter will be complete.
I started to read you're Bast's Adentures story, seem interesting! I will try to finish it tonight.

7429484
Ah, I haven't touched that story in months... I need to get back to it but I have another story I want to put out first. It is something I think you will find more interesting.

Oh Shit! Damn It Twilight!

7429594
I'll make sure to take a look at that!
7429485
I must say I really like your picture!

Comment posted by Mystic_Hooves deleted Jul 27th, 2016

7429744

Thank you m'good sir

Fairly strong start and I will be following. If need someone to look over your work I would be more than happy to assist.

For now here are some corrections that could be made:

‘’" instead of ""

I understand that your first language not English so this just might be a keyboard layout thing for your own language but using ‘’*phrase*" instead of "*phrase*" (doesn't really matter but threw me off a bit while reading).

You honestly think that no Wonderbolts, even during the worst crisis, never been get scared? And wWhat about your friend, the princess? WasIs she completely calm when she is faced with new at every challenges she faced? That’s cute…’’

week-endweekend, and I want you to come earlier at the next session, so we’ll can talk.’’

Rainbow didn’t bother answering, as she already knew she had no excuses for her behavior… The fact iswas, she was beginning to feel the only pressure. sShe felt was because she failed to execute some flying tactics, and was scared she would to be outclassed by her colleagues…

"Is that all your books on magic", ‘’the Ppegasus casually asked while showing an anarchic pile of books next to an empty bookshelf’’.

7429946
Wow, thanks a lots, it means a lot for me!
I will make those corrections.
Thank you again for your time!

I just started to work on the rest. Sorry for delay, had less time than I thought.

Rainbow Dash tried to reply, but he wasn’t able to process any other sound than: ''Gah'' and the like. While the bullies were laughing, the blue Pegasus felt more and more tiny. It was then Fluttershy turn to grow into a mare, and during all the process, she was looking at him with a motherly grin, humming some lullaby. Soon, the clouds were all occupied by mares and stallions, all staring at him regressing back into babyhood…

Why is the gender tags all male?

Login or register to comment