Hey there ^^ , I made this account to try and tell the backstory ok my oc ^^ c: , if you enjoy it, thank you so much ^^
Settting the Scene:
This is the story of Lucky Duck. How a young filly grew up practically mute, only being able to say the word "quack". How a young filly came to live in a lake. How a young filly could live all those years with only the ducks for company, never seeing any other ponies like her. Those are the circumstances surrounding Lucky's life. This is her story.
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The whole description is one huge sentence.
7397119 Thank you for the feedback ^^ Do you mean the whole description of "setting the scene"? If so, I'll fix it immediately. Or do you mean the description inside the actual story it's self? ^^ Because I did use "." to end the sentences? so it shouldnt all be one huge one if there were ends.
7397124 Setting the scene.
7397125 Ohh Thanks ^^ I've put "." to end some sentences though? should I add more to show that some sentences have ended? because it shouldnt be a huge single sentence if i ended it? XDD
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If you ever need an editor, I'm always free to help.
7397136 Ohhhh was the probblem that the discription was too long? and that I need to shorten it down?
because I did use "." to make the sentences end and not be one huge one ^^
and ohhhh!!! yo-you'd help edit my stuff? I dont know what to say!! t-thank you so so much!!
7397143 Of course.
I can probably help you with your discription.
7397153 Ohh my gosh!! thank you so much!! :) I'm gonna fix it right away :)
( also how did you make the bit you said about the new discription, have a yellow background? ^^ )
7397157 heh, it's under quote.
And no problem. I love helping others.
7397159 Ohhh, thank you >////< Sorry, still kinda new ^^
and thats what makes you the greatest person of all :D thank you again ^^ :)
I have one last question, if i edit the actual story or the creator notes, how do I update it? because the only way I can see how is by doing unpublish, then republish, if i unpublish it, will everything be gone and I need to wait for approvel again? ^^
7397163 There's a button called save. After you edit, it's right near the title.
And it's OK. I once knew that feeling.
7397169 T-there was a save button!?! ohh my god
>/////< thank you!! I dont know how I didn't see that button 
7397172 No problem.
I'm gonna point out your errors as I go along.
Responsibilities.
Had been.
Because he left town.
7397177 That should be the description fixed ^^ and ooooo what was the probblem with theese? spelling? or what? ^^
Edit: yeah I see my errors now, I feel stupid XD if you make the list, I'll go one by one fixing them ^^
7397177 Ohh what was wrong with "had been" ? ^^ and is it only those 3 that were errors? ^^
7399733 You put has.
and no.... That's how far I've gotten so far. 
I've been kinda busy.
7399736 Ohh i put has and it needs to be had? thanks I'll fix everything in one big edit when the list is made ( which im greatfull for ^^ ) and ohh you were busy, take your time ^^ :) and I hope everything is going well ^^
Not any merit against you, this simply isn't my type of story, but I'm literally just here because of your short description.
You need some grammar, bro. This is just my writing style, under no means whatsoever should you feel compelled to take my advice, but try something like this:
Wish you luck!
7655883 Hey there! thank you so much for the help, yeah I need to work on my grammar ^^'' and sorry that you werrent interested in the story. Glad the description caught your eye though. Would it be alright if I updated the description with your detailed and better one? I can give you full credit for helping with it, again thank you :)
As a couple people have already pointed out, you have some surface errors riddled throughout (mostly spelling, grammar, and inconsistent tense). The story itself is also sometimes awkwardly written, not to the point where it's hard to tell what you're saying, but to where the prose a tad clunky.
Not that bad a story overall, it definitely has some issues but doesn't yet seem to have any major flaws. If you can find yourself a good editor, that alone could fix most of what's not going so well in this.
7656141 Thank you so much for the feedback! it helps alot :) sorry that you had to see those flaws, I hope the actual story wasnt to bad though ^^'', I'll have a look around for an editor, I dont suppose you know where I could find one or look for one? ^^
7655922 Yeah, I'm alright with that!
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The Proofreader Group has a lot of people willing to help out with this. Read up on how to find a proofreader, what the different levels mean (Expert, Skilled, etc.), and then go through and find one you think you'll like.