• Member Since 5th May, 2013
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PegasusMesa


Every time you read one of my stories, an orphan is allowed to be happy. Do it for the orphans.

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When a noblemare meets an attractive young pegasus, she questions whether her commitments are promises worth keeping. Of course it doesn't help that this pegasus is hungry for more than fancy hors d'oeuvres.

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Comments ( 43 )

Well, that took a dark turn.

EDIT: TBH, I'm not quite sure what to think about this story.

EDIT 2: Think the line "Written for the 12th F*** This Prompt" should be on the cover?

7382478

Just the way I like it. Regardless, thanks for reading!

>La Petite Mort
>"the little death"
>French euphemism for an orgasm
>no sex tag

I feel like opportunities were missed here. But you know, you do you, dude. Whatever makes you happy writing.

7382491

Or maybe I'm just the worst tagger ever.

WHO CAN TELL?!

...huh. This isn't what I expected, based on the title, but I dug the twist and I liked the point of view. I dunno that I'd necessarily agree with how the story is tagged, but meh. I am left with several questions, but perhaps that's just the nature of the story.

7382513

You thinking sex and romance? I'm considering adding those.

7382517 Yeah, definitely. I did like the story, though ^_^

7382532

Magnifique.

Thanks for reading!

my guess as to the definition of the title is 'the small death'
Keep in mind my french is rusty, and my understanding of latin may be leaking in

Interresting. But need more Granny Smith.

I did not see that coming. When Dash asked about the fiance I was like. Wait. She's okay with that? She knew? But then it made sense. Great story.

7382868

Good eye! I wasn't entirely expecting people to catch on to that detail.

And I'm glad you enjoyed it! As a side note, would it be possible for you to throw some spoiler tags up?

7382878

It's absolutely no problem. Thank you again for reading!

7382478

Sorry, I didn't notice your second edit.

I'd like the story to stand on its own and be judged for what it is rather than what it was written for. That's more important to me than the contest itself.

Nice first line/last line linking.

Very clever Mr author , very clever indeed.:derpyderp2::unsuresweetie:

So, that was a thing

Methinks it was a bit cramped

Still, have an upvote

7383795

I agree; there's plenty of room to stretch out, and I should've taken it.

7383417

Yeah!

7383210

Thank you very much! I'm glad it tickled your fancy!

7383159

Well, I do what I can.

Excellent story as usual. I especially liked how the opening line connected with the ending, which put everything into context and why it fit with the main character. The dialogue between the characters was also nice, all of which felt natural given the different moods. :twilightsmile:

Cute cover art for the story! Honestly, it's the reason I decided to give this a try even though it didn't seem like my kind of thing. So good choice on that.

Felt like a bit of a bait and switch on your part since it's not actually Dash, but given that it was an interesting plot twist and I rather enjoyed it as a short story you have an up vote from me.

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I'm glad I managed to rope you in, then!

Nice one, didn't expect it. Kudos for you!

7386098

Pow!

Thanks for reading!

Personne n'échappe à mon regard.
The story is short, yet very sweet and simple for a great read. Using Google Translate, it let me have a tiny taste what was about to come. It had something to do with orgasms, but I thoroughly enjoyed the outcome of this story. The perspective is placed very interestingly, in the perspective of a wealthy noblemare. The noblemare had the charm and language of a high-class pony, something you would expect in a story like this.

With Rainbow Dash as the centerpiece of the story, her character is very much in play, even out of the perspective of only a noblemare. It was refreshing to see through the lens other than the Mane Six. The transition of the story was smooth and musky like good wine. It had a fruity finish and a nice tart-dry after taste.

It's better to read the story than to read this short and unfortunate comment, but like I said. It's short, simple, and great.

It was a great read.

wine drinking simulator 2016

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I'll take it. Thanks for reading, and thanks for the review!

La Petite Mort =The Little Death.

Cherchez la Femme = Look for the Woman.

Rainbow Dash is hungry for more than fancy appetizers.

Huh, that had a deeper meaning than I thought it did.

who the fuck are you
and how are you making fanfiction good
what is your secret





you asshole

Huh, i didn't see that coming at all. Very nice twist. M Night Shyamanallama-sama would be proud. I also approve.

Vampony? Changeling?

Good gracious, that got sexily dark... sexily fast.

Sexy! :rainbowlaugh:

Solid twist. Despite it feeling more cramped than a sardine in a mosh pit, I'm not really sure what expanding the concept would have done for it.

Interesting story! :pinkiehappy:

i wanna see more. XD This is about the second story ive seen that paints Dash as a vampony. and i like it.

Damn, this bus took a sharp turn out of Romantic Drama City and swerved right into Horrortown. Absolutely wonderful.

I assume Rainbow Dash is a changeling? The green eyes make it seem so.

she threw me onto the bed and lept after me

*Leapt.

Impressively done. Very nice twist and the protagonist has just enough information to be intriguing, but not so much to overshadow.

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