When Nightmare Moon is gone, Celestia finds a baby foal crying out for it's mother. Then she finds out that.....It's her nephew....Luna's foal.
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The prince of the night
The love for the night is very strong and the love for the people of the night
The prince of the night
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Saddd
Take it easy on the ellipses
That's a wonderful story. Can't wait to read more. :)
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Alright, I'll make a sequel
I DEMANDED MORE OF THIS WONDERFUL AND BEAUTIFUL STORY AND MORE ABOUT DUSK AND THE 1000 YEARS BEFORE HE MEETS HIS MOTHER!!!
Hmm nice, but not perfect. Try looking the story over with a keen eye, lengthen some parts, change the formatting of the song(Maybe italiciz), don't start a sentence with a number (3), add emotions and descriptions,don't keep saying Celestia over and over again, but other than that you did a pretty good job.
Add the story to few groups, I recommend any of that help with new authors.