I uh, thought you were going to continue and not just post what you had. In that case, the very last sentence should have a period and not a comma at the end. Also, that's a really awkward place to leave it. Another line or two of Deciduous inner monologue would probably feel better if you were just going to end it like that.
I've had this in my 'read later' list for so long and only now decided to read it. I probably should have waited longer, I like it but theres only two chapters and I need my fix :3
Interesting start, I don't mind the anthro thing, a bit odd for FoE, but as long as its a good story.
I uh, thought you were going to continue and not just post what you had. In that case, the very last sentence should have a period and not a comma at the end. Also, that's a really awkward place to leave it. Another line or two of Deciduous inner monologue would probably feel better if you were just going to end it like that.
7378651 that probably would've been a good idea, yeah. i reckon I'll add that in later, for now, i'm just glad it got accepted. X3
Thanks again for the help, btw.
I've had this in my 'read later' list for so long and only now decided to read it. I probably should have waited longer, I like it but theres only two chapters and I need my fix :3