Story was written while I was on a depressive sugar high. Yeah, that's a thing. Not it's not. By the way, please do NOT take this story seriously. It's not going to be. It's more of a more or less funny what if-scenario.
The one who made the pictures.
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Around four years ago a couple of mugs tried to rob Sunset Shimmer, severly injuring her in the process. In the hospital she stayed in a coma, until four years later she wakes. However the world has changed drastically in those four years, namely magic is now her thing and her friends rule the world.
Chapters (7)
Hmmm interesting, is this going to be a Sunlight fic? Also Im guessing it was Sunset's mugging that was the catalyst to the Main 6's rise to power?
7351186 Kinda, I mean I needed an excuse for this. Don't ask about my other ideas. Sugar does....things to me.
Man, Ts has the kingdom on a leash.
Intriguing, continue.
Man, I really shouldn't write while I'm on sugar. Noticed a couple of things that I should have done differently. And just look at how bad my writing is, Celestia damn it! So...uh....how come I have no dislikes as of yet?
This is pretty interesting please continue.
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Yes these guys are indeed right... this is really interesting
hoping to see more.
Tracking!!!!!
Yes, you really shouldn't write while you're on sugar.
It was painful to read this garbage, and you should have never posted it in the first place. You were never meant to be a writer, I think you should find another hobby.
You advanced much too quickly in the plot without any detail whatsoever, and you kept contradicting yourself several times in the story, as if you were in a rush to get it done.
7352094 Did you even bother reading my other stuff?
Is this going to be a serious story? I'm asking because that random tag has me a bit worried.
7352182 I wrote it while I was basically halfway in Pinkie Pie mode. The only reason I uploaded it was to see if people liked it. So...uh...maybe?
7352192 Oh, you're one of those guys who think sugar highs are real.
welll this sounds interesting
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It's a good premise for a story and you can always go back and reedit or rewrite it.
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I'm interested in the story continuing! The plot line seems interesting right now, plus I'd love know how they became Empresses in the years Sunset was in a coma. o:
Please continue. I'm hooked.
We can have more? Cause if so then yes, please.
Urrgh, OKAY by popular demand I'll continue this! Now I have four stories on my priority list. I need to make myself a schedule of some sorts. My new job started today too and since I work in different shifts every week it won't be easy.
Hadn't always had, fyi.
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I'm really interested
Also is this a sunlight story?
7351190 I hope they're benevolent.
hmmmm good start, has promise,
I have feeling they more of the end justified the mean type of leaders. the 6 of them work together but rule with iron first....
I DEMAND AN UPDATE!
Will we ever find out WHY Sunset was in that 4 year coma, also will she shift to her Daydream Shimmer form?
7522365 Yeah? Dude, it's only the second chapter. Gimme a break....
Really likeing this still.
What's a "depressive sugar high", and what do you mean when you say "not it's not"?
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I reckon they were depressed and ate a whole mess of sugar. My meds got screwed up for a few days last week and I wound up eating about a half a pound of brown sugar straight from the canister the other day.
7522882 I dunno. Where's the fun in making sense?
Pinkie pie, she just woke up! you don't need to go giving her a heart attack! Neither do you Rainbow Dash!
So, our mighty god-empresses are unashamedly evil...but still friends? Well, that's nice.
so what are they names,
also will sunset fall and join them or will she try to redeem them.
This story has potential but i feel like the prose are bit...weak....and very less defined lack of world building, i mean i don't understand the context, they are evil...Ok why? Why evil? I mean being evil for evil sake is something i adore in a villain but what's the mindset what's the reason here. Also you kinda just jump into without really showing that they are flying demons apart from the picture in the title of your summary. IDK I feel like a lot of this feels very...not so well thought out. A lot of this story is just very hard to follow and i really feel like there is no build up or follow through, it just sorta starts and it makes it very difficult for me to read.
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7538059 Alright, I've been rereading my own shit here and...I have to agree with you here. It is hard to follow without my knowledge of where this story is going. Now, since I'm too lazy to rewrite my stuff, I'll just separate the past from the present by writing a prequel. That way I don't have to forcefully stuff it into this story. Huh, wonder how much I'll confuse people by writing on both stories at the same time.
Don't worry. I'll make sure it'll be understandable and it will have more demons
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7538841 My problem isn't necessarily we need a prequel (Though I gues one would be interesting if written well) We just need a better understanding of the world as it is right now. I mean for example you open up with Rarity getting a message...Ok...well you don't describe what Rarity looks like, or that she has servants now...or that she's a demon...why is she a demon?
You just need to do better WORLD BUILDING in the here and now! Give us context....and isn't not re-writing it kinda the easy way out here. Come on dude....I think writing a prequel just complicates things more. No harm in re-writing. Effort man...It's your work show some pride and show your willing to go all the way.
I just need more context, description and definitly a bit more o a concrete world. I mean a lot of these chapters could stand to be a lot longer and more in depth.
Also why should I the reader have to read a completely different story, just to understand the world of the present. That seems like mandatory story instead of trying to make the story stand on its own.
7538841 ok
7538849 Damn, you're persistent. F I N E. One world building chapter coming right up. I was planning on doing this later, after the six have visited Sunset. I'll put it after the Prologue, but I'll still write that prequel.
I need to get to work now, so I won't be able to answer anymore questions, since fimfiction is blocked by their firewall.
7538877 Oh I hate it when that happens.
Well dude the thing is not a giant chapter....it needs to come gradual, through the chapters not just in one giant chunk. That's writing 101 dude. You tell it through the story...through the dialogue....You set it up you let the world breathe naturally so it doesn't interfere with the flow of the story. Take your time...look it over get Beta readers. Learn, evolve grow, from your mistakes.
If you want help, you should maybe ask for a Co-writer or a editor...or both.
Though I don't begrudge a prequel story only to see how the heck we got here and why they decided to turn evil.
7538886 Eh, don't worry. I noticed one chapter ain't enough, but thanks to you motivating me, I managed to write something nice. Far from world building, but a start and a little bit of fun.
7539737 no problem. I like the concept of this story.
Well, that was amusing. And disturbing. Too bad Sunset will be horrified and disgusted forever once she sees what her friends have become...
So Fluttershy's part Flutterbat. That's not good.
I enjoyed this chaper, but you might want to edit the sudden boldened words that appear halfway through
Also, why not give Russia some equine-related name? You did it with the rest of the locaitons, which I think is a brilliant move making it more fantastical and what not. Again, about Russia, how's Russia into Rushia? or Soviet into Sobillet or Saddleviet? Siberia into Sibaria or Shiftberia?
7540051 I don't know enough English words quite frankly, that's why
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Well, you can always take my one of my suggestions.. Or not, up to you. Good luck on writing the next chapter!
This is an interesting story I can't wait for more. Also I wonder how Sunset is going to find out that her friends are now evil demons. Are they going to tell/show her. (Of course, after she recovers and is back at full strength) Or is she going to hear it from the castle's staff and other people.