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"You think you know me..."


Apple Bloom wants to try out Scootaloo's scooter, but Scootaloo refuses without giving a reason. Apple Bloom decides to try it out in secret, but an accident happens that breaks not only the scooter, but also a friendship as Apple Bloom learns the truth about the scooter and resolves to make it right.(Can be checked out at Equestria daily as well)

Chapters (6)
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Comments ( 80 )

Gotta have a happy ending.:pinkiehappy:

Really great story, sad :fluttercry: but a happy ending :pinkiehappy:

I loved this story on Equestria Daily, I love this story on FIMfiction.

I also love how you brought in the reference to Sisterhooves Social. It fits quite well with this story with the relationshi between Sweetie Belle and Rarity.

Chapter 1/2 and Chapter 5 were my personal favorites. I also love how Applebloom shows her stubborness like AJ as she rides Scootaloo's scooter and breaks it and she does everything she can to help fix the problem even if it even kills her. Overall, it shows a great relationship between the CMC and each of their struggles to keep their friendship together. Each has their own story which balances their contribution to the story.

I can actually see this type of plot in a real episode. (Except the dead father and possibly the Everfree Forest scene)

Hands down one of my favorite MLP fanfics of all-time. Same level as Dash of Inspiration, Bittersweet, Guidance and Patronage of Trixie, Feathers, Kindness' Reward, Elements of Gaming, ect.

I'm having the same kind of problem with a friend like Applebloom and Scootaloo. This kind of helped in a way and a enjoyable read as well.

this was a good story i even stayed up all night to finish it:twilightsmile:

If this turns into Scootabloom I am going to be disappointed.

Relax, it's just friendship. :yay:

I always cringe/tear up whenever I rear a pony say "I hate you." :applecry:

But then the. Daddy scene. :fluttercry:

BFF are the best kind of friends. :yay:

Really liked this one, as it reads as a normal episode of the show, though some parts seemed a little TOO melodramatic. I thoroughly enjoyed it. Although I still think you should have kept the "Storm Front" name for Scoot's father as the new name doesn't sound as good, I know you changed it because of the relation to nazis, but you were using the innocent meaning to it and I'm sure nobody would be offended by something like that.

Wow, just wow. Amazing story!! It would be in my top 5 fimfictions if I had to make one.

What did I like: Everything
What did I dislike: Nothing

As you requested

Thank you for this amazing story. Keep it up!!

This has to be the best fanfic i have ever read. I'm not kidding. I really enjoyed this. I got pretty choked up at the backstory of the scooter:
I enjoyed the ending very much, espichally the friendship report at the end. I always love a good happy ending.
Also the part where Twilight's experiment blows up in her face had me laughing my head off.
All I can is, excellent job. You should be very proud of this story.

Wow! This could have its own episode! I loved everything about this story.:heart:

Dude, this was awesome. It had a perfect blend of drama, action, friendship, and love. Just amazing. It could easily be an episode if the hell hound looked a little different and the part with the dead father was edited. One of the best fics I've read. Good job.:applecry::heart::scootangel::heart::unsuresweetie:

I said it once, I'll say it again: You just copy and pasted the script for the season 3 finale. :ajsmug:

How have I not found this story before now? Such a great first chapter, I'm curious to see where it goes.

Good girl, Applebloom! It's a harsh lesson in responsibility, but one that she needed to learn.

"Lost Cat Near the Everfree Forest"...ooooooh dear.

Damn fine story, this should be an episode.

V-very g-g-good! *sob*
Must. Keep. READING!

APPLEBLOOM TOO! Though it makes sense, I almost feel that you are trying to kill us with the dead parents! Good job so far though!:derpytongue2:

AND NOW SWEETIE BELLE WITH PARENT ISSUES! Dang you like ripping out my heartstrings! Well, it is a good way to make the CMC's friendship THAT much more important.

Great short story! Though a little darker, it is amlost like an actual episode! I loved reading every moment of it, and my only suggestion is to edit Twilight's letter to make it sound more like somethin she would send to Celestia in the show. There is something abou the letter that just seems... Off. Otherwise, great job!

This should be a special episode.

great story loved it

I remember this one, its just as awesome as I remember.

I could defiantly see a more child friendly version of this being made into an episode. Great story, one of my favourite ones with Scootaloo in.

Cracking story, mate. Really, really enjoyed it.

The only bit I would change is the hellhound thing. To be honest, I couldn't really get it into my head. Using a timberwolf (or three) would provide one with a stronger mental image.

When I made this story, Timberwolves weren't even shown. This was around during the time Season 1 was just ending

I did suspect that was the reason. You've been writing for a long time, then?

I have a lot of your work to catch up on, then. Jolly good.

People disliked this. It's only two but, WHAT'S WRONG WITH THOSE PEOPLE! :flutterrage:

No story goes without it's dislikes

2788932 You are correct, and I hadn't even read all of it before I liked it. First chapter, BOOM liked. I truly enjoyed it, about as much as I had enjoyed past sins.

171173 I was waiting for it to load my other comment so looked at other comments. I always look at the picture and yours sir/ma'am, made me laugh.

this is the sadest fic iv ever read:fluttercry:

I can see Sweetie Belle getting a Cutie Mark as a Grief Counselor.

Schootaloo? Really?

Great job on your story. I'm not used to seeing the CMC not being friends...made me cry:fluttercry: Your Pinkie was spot on too:pinkiehappy: Only one chapter left to go. Can't wait to see how it all ends:raritywink:

Last chapter had me at the edge of my seat and cheering afterwards:pinkiehappy: Not only was there a happy ending:yay: but we also got a nice letter to the Princess for a lesson well learned:twilightsmile:

All your other stories have awesome cover pictures. This one is in dire need of one. Contact your illustrator and have him or her draw up a picture of Scootaloo yelling at Applebloom over a broken scooter in a dramatic fashion.

I don't have a single illustrator, but either way it doesn't need one. It's already complete and there is no point wasting money for a cover art

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